Yugi In Bakaland

Yugi in Hentailand
[Still Bakaland]
Part 3) Lectures and Roads
[This fic should HIT the road.]
Author: Princess Lemon
[That is a highly loose interpretation of the word.]
Beta: ~Nakoruru~
[Gotta be better than the last one.]

note: coments in *s are made by Nakoruru, not me (winks)
[Then we’ll know not to credit you with any good stuff that may come out of this. Reasonable, I think.]

Yugi and Akio Cat looked up to see several men glaring at them. From the looks of it, the two had fallen into the library in the middle of a lecture.
[If the lecture was anything like this fic so far, I’d welcome the interruption.]

At the podium was Miakge
[WHO???]

dressed all in gray with mouse ears, whiskers and a long whip-like tail.
[In a list of more than two things, commas should separate all items. See the word ‘whiskers?’ Is it the last item in the series? No. You should be able to figure it out from here. I hope.]

In front of him; Touga, Miki and Seioinji sat in a semi circle of chairs.
[Ah, an undercover comma. He’s disguised to trick us into thinking he’s a semicolon. The bastard.

Okay, question for all Yu-Gi-Oh fans. Who has known ALL random anime characters thrown in here so far? I have a pretty big list that I’m into, and I don’t know all these people.]

These three boys also had animalistic charactistics
[Charactistics? Is that anything like a caricature?]

added to their already striking features;
[That would just make them look funny. Oh well. Par for the course.]

Touga had a set of bull horns, a golden nose piercing and a bull's tail.
[How can a piecing be golden? Oh well. “Piercings are golden (golden), but my eyes still see….”
Maybe you meant he had a gold nose ring, perhaps?]

Seioinji posessed a long black beak
[The word is “Possessed.”
He’s possessing a beak…is there an exorcist in the fic?]

that reminded Yugi of a hawk
[How? A hawk doesn’t have a long beak; their beaks are short and hooked.]

and a pair of tawny wings protruding from his back.
[It’s Biiiiiiird Maaaaaaaan!]

Miki had the nose, floppy ears and tail of a dog.
[I think someone lost another round of ‘Pin the Comma on the Sentence.’]

"Sorry," Yugi said and quickly bowed respectfuly.
[Are you still not using a spell checker? 'Respectfully' has two L’s]

He did this not only out of manners but also to keep himself from staring at the men.
[Yeah. Freak shows are kinda like train wrecks. You just can’t look away.]

"You should be. Now, take your seats and we'll continue with the lecture," Mikage said and pointed to empty seats by Miki.
[Only three people in attendance…must be a riveting subject.]

Yugi was the first to move towards the seats and Akio Cat simply followed him.
[That’s a switch; so far, Yugi’s been the extremely passive-aggressive one.
Why didn’t they just leave?]

Yugi then sat next to Miki and Akio Cat sat next to Yugi. Once the two were seated, Mikage smiled and continued on with his lecture.

"What is he lecturing about?" Yugi whispered to Miki who was trying to take notes.
"Former rulers of Russia," Miki said as he made notes about Catherine the Great.
[How…random and pointless. And HOW do people in Wonderland know about the rulers of Russia?]

"Oh," Yugi said and sat quietly as he listen to Mikage.
[Subject-verb agreement is your friend. Get reacquainted.]

Usually, Yugi is interested in lectures but this time he finds Mikage lecture very dry.
[Mikage Lecture. Odd name.
“Let’s do the Time Warp again….”]

This leads to him yawning and before long Yugi has begun to nod off.
[Ye gods, you’ve changed verb tenses again! Pick one!]

"Yugi...Yugi...YUGI!" shouted Mikage and Yugi snorted as he was startled awake.
[Poor thing. There’s no escape for him from this fic.
And how did Mikage know his name?]

"Yes?" Yugi asked and looked up to see a highly displeased Mikage glaring at him with such a venomous look that Yugi couldn't help but shrink in his seat.
[Poor boy wasn’t that big to begin with. Hope there’s still something left.]

Akio Cat then shot Mikage a look that made him nervous and he stopped glaring at Yugi.
[Why would Akio make Mikage nervous? He had no problem glaring at the two of them for interrupting earlier.]

"Boy, you were snoring during my lecture," Mikage said.
[Can you really blame him?]

"I was?" Yugi said as he began to blush.
"Yes. Was my lecture really that boring?" Mikage asked.
[If it’s any consolation, I think it might be more interesting than this fic.]

"Well..." Yugi started.
"I'm afraid they are," Touga said as he sipped on a glass of red wine.
[Oi. Is this Touga or Pegasus J. Crawford?]

"Where did you get that? You know..." Mikage started as Touga tsked and handed off his glass to Miki who fumbled and almost dropped it.
[Fumbled? Are they playing football now?] ougaouga then got out of his seat and approached Mikage as Saioinji watched with this eager grin on his face.
[This eager grin? Why not that eager grin? Or that eager grin over there?]

"I'm afraid the time has come for something more interesting to do," Touga said, grabbed Mikage's
[“The time has come, the walrus said…”
Actually, the word 'grabbing' would be more appropriate here.]

chin and firmly kissed the pink haired man on the lips.b>[Wb>[What was in that wine, Spanish Fly?]

Saioinji then gave a shout of joy
[Woo.]

and promptly glomped a surprised Miki. If it had not been fore
[And we go from football to golf.]

Yugi's lap, Miki's head would have been injured as Saioinji madly kissed the blue haired blue
[“…kissed the blue haired blue…” Blue-haired blue what?]

while roughly feeling up his body and drawing out low moans.
[Hmm…someone’s a masochist.]

*O_O what an...affectionate group of people*
[Yeah, the beta is better than you. Why don’t you just lest her write the thing?]

Yugi blushed and turned his head up to look away from Miki and Saioinji only to be surprised to see Touga necking
[You do not ‘neck’ someone; you neck WITH him.]

Mikage while grinding him against the podium.
[Ow….]

"Embarassed again?" Akio Cat asked.
[More like afraid of experiencing more trauma.]

Yugi merely nodded and Akio Cat grinned and leaned across Yugi to look at Miki.
[He wouldn’t have to lean across Yugi to look at him if Miki’s head is in Yugi’s lap.]

"Excuse us," Akio Cat said cheerfully.
"Oh, sorry," Miki said and lifted his head from Yugi's lap.
[Does he get to run away now?]

Yugi was highly relieved but this quickly changed to surprise when Akio Cat lifted the young boy out of his seat and placed Yugi on his lap.
[There is no escape.]

Then Saioinji pulled a pillow out from under his seat and placed it under Miki's head.

"You remembered," Miki said happily.
[That there was a pillow under his seat? Good job.]

"Why wouldn't I? Last time you hit your head so hard you were out for the rest of the day," Saioinji said and grinned childishly.
[Sex + concussing one’s partner= BAD.]

Miki narrowed his eyes and moved to slap his partner with his left hand only
[Someone’s an over-reactor]

to have to grabbed by Saioinji's.
[Huh?]

Miki looked on in surprise as Saioinji grinned savagely before he kissed the palm of Miki's hand and trailed the kisses down to Miki's chest where he began to remove Miki's cloth's
[#1 Why is he only wearing a cloth instead of clothes?
#2 What does this cloth own?]

with his teeth.
[Okay, so it’s either “remove Miki's cloth's with his teeth,” in the sense that the cloth owns a ‘with his teeth,’ whatever that is, or “remove Miki's cloth is with his teeth.” Hrm…either way, I am confused.]

The buttons were savagely torn off the cloth
[So it IS a cloth!]

and Saioinji's hands pull back the flaps of the shirt jacket.
[And now it’s a jacket. Maybe it’s all the wine they had.
PULLED,not pull.]

Once Miki's chest is bare, Saioinji plants fiery hot kisses on the skin that elicit a new round of soft moans from M
[“Let’s do the Time Warp again….”
“…a new round of soft moans…” Are these audible sounds or drinks from a bar?]

Meanwhile, Touga is more patient with his partner. Keeping Mikage silent with deep French kisses, Touga's skilled fingers find
[His skilled fingers are keeping Mikage silent with French kisses. He either has a DAMN high Dex modifier, or has a very fucked-up anatomy.]

all the buttons and zippers on Mikage's clothes
[Well, I’m glad to see SOMEONE around here wears clothes and not just cloth.]

and before long there is a pile of clothes at his feet. Touga flicked lightly at Mikage's nipples before his mouth finally left Mikage's and traversed down to the left nipple. There, Touga began to tease the taunt little pebble of pink flesh
[Mikage’s nipple is taunting him? O.o???
Nipple: *singsongs* You can’t get me ha-ard, you can’t get me ha-ard!]

by a skilled combonation of suckling,
[Combo is a colloquial term for combination; however, the second ‘O’ does NOT appear in the actual word.]

tounge flicks and ringing the nipple with the tip of his tongue.
[TONGUE, not tounge.
Someone missed pinning the comma again.]

All the while, Mikage stood there and panted as he enjoyed the pleasurable feelings this was creating in his body.
[“Let’s do the Time Warp again….”]

"What's the matter?" Akio Cat asked as he wrapped his arms around Yugi, who sat there with his eyes closed and trying to drown out the sounds that Miki and Mikage were making.
[*Looks through the fic thus far* Gee, I wonder.]

"I don't like this," Yugi merely said.
[Yugi, I feel your pain.]

"Oh? What is it that you don't like?" Akio Cat asked quietly.
[Do you want that list single or double-spaced?]

"Being here...during all of...this," Yugi said.
[Poor thing. Don’t worry, Yugi; I’ll put you in a nice hot lemon with Yami, Ryou, and Bakura one day to make up for all that you’ve had to deal with in this fic.]

"You haven't seen this before?" Akio Cat asked curiously.
[Yes, just not this poorly done.]

"No, it's just...indecent," Yugi said.
[That’s the polite way to put it.]

"It's just love and making love," Akio Cat said and Yugi looked up at him confused.
"To make love is to what they are doing down,
[So it’s not making love if it’s what they’re doing up?]

slow and sweet so as to draw out the pleasure for both parties. Ever heard of fucking?" Akio Cat asked.
[He’s 16, I would hope so.]

"Yes," Yugi said tentatively.
"Fucking is the oposite that,
[#1 It’s ‘opposite OF that.’
#2 Opposite has two p’s.
#3 And now we have a period pretending to be a comma. Isn’t he cute?]

It's hard and fast...
[Like what Heero and Duo did last chapter…with no lube.]

and a age old term that stands for Fornocation
[FornIcation.]

Under Command of the King. In other words, it means to just do it," Akio Cat said. Yugi began to worry about a lawsuit from Nike when he heard a new round of moans coming from Miki and Mikage.
[So the moaning made him worry about getting sued by Nike? Odd.
Okay, I think next time I go to a bar, I’m gonna order a round of moans and see what I get.]

Yugi looked to see that the both of them were being eaten out by their partners at that moment.
[Girls get eaten out; boys get sucked off.]

*Uh...maybe it's just a locational thing, but where I live, only a girl can get eaten out.*
[I THINK your beta may have been trying to tell you to change that last line.]

Saioinji was seriously deepthroating Miki and making slupring noises
[What the hell does a slupring noise sound like?]

as he looked up at Miki with a savage look in his eyes as Miki's head was titled back into the pillow with his eyes closed in deep pleasure.
[Why would he look savage while he’s giving Miki a blowjob?]

At the same time, Touga was softly eating out Mikage
[Unless they are she-males, it just can’t be done.]

as he mainly massaged Mikage's penis while he suckled on the reddening head and flicked the precum off the tip.
[That’s not ‘eating out;’ that is being a cocktease.]

Strangely enough, Yugi couldn't take his eyes away from the sight of the four men continued to make love.
[Making love involves actual intercourse, not simply oral sex.]

And it wasn't long before Miki and Mikage came with loud groans and spilled their warm seed into their lover's mouths.
[According to that, they have one lover with two mouths. Try “lovers’” instead.]

As Miki grasped onto Saioinji's hair, he gulped down Miki's cum greedily while Mikage grasped the podium and Touga quietly drank his seed.
[Well, I don’t really think you could be THAT noisy while swallowing.]

"Mikage," Touga said after he pulled his partner's softening member from his mouth.
[I would HOPE he’s not trying to talk with his mouth full.]

"Y...yes?" Mikage asked.
"You need to cut back on those lemons, you're starting to taste sour," Touga said.
[Way to kill the mood, Romeo. Not that there was really much of one to kill, mind you.]

"Huh?" Mikage asked. He was confussed at first,
[He’s confussed, and I am conFUSED.]

but then he glared as his anger grew. Finally, Mikage lifted his right hand to slap Touga but he caught it, quickly spun him around and forced Mikage back against the podium.
[What is with these boys getting bitchy and trying to slap their lovers? Male PMS?]

"Careful Touga, you don't want to bruise him again," Saioinji called out as he kneeled at Miki's end and appiled
[How does one appile something? Or did you mean APPLIED?]

a generous helping of KY lubricant to Miki's puckering entrance.
[So he just spread it around there? Okay, you have to lube and prep. No lube can make it really painful, and there is the dread possibility of getting stuck together like that. No prepping can make it really painful to the uke even with lube because they haven’t been stretched and loosened yet.]

Once he closed the bottle, Saioinji tossed it over to Touga who promptly caught it.
[Well, it wouldn’t work very well if he decided to catch it later.]

Touga flicked the top open with one finger and kneeled down to do the same lube job
Did Did he just become a car like in the Utena movie? Freakish. Autophilia.]

to Mikage's ass hole before he flicked the top closed again and placed the bottle on the podium.
[There are some words that, when used in a lemon scene, convey a sense of just fucking rather than making love. Asshole is one of those words.]

Once the two were lubed up, Saioinji and Touga slipped their steel hard members into the
[The semmes need to lube themselves up as well. Man, all the ukes in this fic are gonna be SORE tomorrow.]

taunt ass holes of their lovers.
[And now their assholes are taunting their lovers. I think I saw this in Pink Floyd’s “The Wall.”]

Miki hissed with the pain of the his
[One of these words does not belong. Guess which one?]

inner walls being streched
[There IS another ‘t’ in the word ‘stretched.’]

so much and Saioinji slowed so as to allow to gradually adjust to the change.
[With no prepping, he’d better!]

Mikage moaned loudly and tilted his head back as Touga entered him roughly with no peace.
[“…with no peace?” I’ve never heard of anyone entering their lover WITH peace.]

So it began, the ride to end all rides.
[I want off of this ride.]

Touga banged Mikage with no mercy as all his sounds of not only pleasure, but pain as well.
[And…? You seem to have not finished the sentence.]

As Touga held onto Mikage's hips for suport, Mikage held onto the podium which was thankfully nailed down.
[As hard as you say he’s getting banged, that thing had better be bolted to the floor. Oh, and ‘support’ has two p’s.]

At the same time, Saioinji was treating Miki differently. He moved at a slow and steady pace that increased over time, which only drew out pleasureable noises from Miki.
[#1 It’s PLEASURABLE.
#2 To call something pleasurable means that it is capable of affording pleasure or satisfaction. A moan is not pleasurable; it is caused by pleasurable sensations.]

"Are they...?" Yugi asked, his voice barely above a whisper.
"They all are making love, but in different ways. Those two enjoy only the pleasure while those two enjoy both the pleasure and the pain," Akio Cat whispered in Yugi's ear.

"But...why?" Yugi asked.
[Why not?]

"Mikage is a Masochist and Touga is a sadist.
[I must be a masochist; I’m still here.]

Sadists take joy in causing others pain
[That’s fun, too.]

while Machosists take joy in receiving pain,"
[Like sadist, masochist is not a proper noun.]

Akio Cat said as his grigan gan to widen while Yugi's brow furrowed as he tried to understand how one could take so much joy in getting hurt.
[Just a personal preference, kiddo. Nothing to get too confused about.]

Yet before he could, his attention was drawn back to the lovers when Touga and Saioinji came deep within their lovers as they moaned loudly. They were soon followed by Miki and Mikage who shouted out as they came, Miki spilling his seed on Saioinji and Mikage spilling his on the podium.
[I feel sorry for the library’s janitor.]

The four were locked in place, almost as if someone had hit the pause button as their seed began to spill till their was a small puddle on the floor underneath them.
[What about their ‘was a small puddle on the floor underneath them?’ Do they each own one, or is one jointly owned by all?
If it was as if someone had hit a pause button their semen wouldn’t spill either.]

Only after a moment has passed did they begin the relax.
[What is ‘the relax?’ Is it a yoga thing?]So aSo as Miki and Saioinji moved to spoon each other and fall asleep on the chairs, Touga and Mikage laid down on the floor where a nest of pillows appeared.
[Nest? But Saioinji is the bird boy.]

"Akio Cat...I'm ready to go," Yugi said in a monotone voice with his head bowed just enough for shadows to hide his eyes.
[If this was Ryou, I’d be afraid.]

Akio Cat merely nodded then Yugi got off his lap and led the way to the exit.
[Yugi led the way? How the hell did he know where the exit was??]

Once outside, the couple found themselves to be on a dirt road in the middle of the forest as the sun shined down on them as if nothing had happened.
[The sun doesn’t usually take notice of strange events.]

Yet to make sure,
[To make sure of what, pray tell?]

Akat pat peeked over his shoulder and raised an eyebrow when he saw that the library was gone.
[Um, am I supposed to think that’s cool or something?]

'Good riddance, now I have Yugi all to...' Akio Cat started to think to himself but stopped short when he looked down at Yugi and saw the somber state he was in.
[The poor boy’s seen sex for the first time today and none of it was good sex. I’d be somber, too.]

"Yugi?" Akio Cat started and Yugi only mumbled something under his breath in response.
[Yugi: Must…kill…authoress…]

Akio Cat frowned as he thought 'This will not do in the least' and promptly scooped Yugi up in his arms.
[Damn cat.]

"Hey!" Yugi shouted in surprise as he got higher up in the air untill
[And ‘until’ only has one ‘l’. Double consonants give you a lot of trouble, ne?]

he finally landed on Akio Cat's shoulders.

"Cheer up Yugi, we're out of that drafty old library and not everyone around is like those four," Akio cat said.
[Some of them are much worse.]

It was Yugi\urn urn to raise his eyebrow as he noticed his surroundings for the first time. Seeing that he was back
out in the sunlight, he took Akio Cat's words to heart
[He’s in the sunlight, so it must be definite fact that not everyone is like those four. Uh-huh. Right.]

and leaned forward a bit to rest his arms on Akio Cat's head as a smile painted itself on his face.
[And the Escher smile has returned! All hail the Escher words!]

"I trust you're not going to get comfortable up there," Akio Cat teased.
"Huh? Why not?" Yugi asked.
"First off, you're making me rather hot.
[That could be taken one of two ways.]

Also you maybe
[May be, not maybe.]

small but you're not very light. I wonder if I'm carrying a young boy or an elephant," Akio Cat said with his usual grin.

"I'd watch it if I were you, I can hurt you from up here you know," Yugi said.
[Do it!]

"But not if I disappear and then reappear someplace else," Akio Cat said.
[Damn.]

"Hmmm...you have a point," Yugi said thoughtfully. Akio Cat just grinned and continued to carry Yugi untill
[Still just one ‘l’.]

they reached a fork in the road...literally.
[That kind of stuff just doesn’t write very well. Or maybe it’s just your writing.]

In the road was this giant wooden fork and on it were at least ten different signs pointing to the nine other roads.
[There was this, he saw this, he went down this… Oi. I swear, that kind of thing just screams ‘teenybopper fangirl.’ I’m just waiting on an overuse of the word ‘like.’]

Once Yugi was safely on the ground, the two looked at the signs to find that they were pretty worn out. Once could barely make out the words that once were painted on them.
[Once could barely make out the words, but what about Twice?]

"Great, where do we go now?" Yugi asked. Akio Cat opened his mouth to make a suggestion but never got the chance to utter his words for the two soon heard a distinct female voice singing a song of some sorts.
[Sort, not sorts.]

The two looked up and all around them yet they couldn't see who the voice belonged to as it got closer and closer and the song became clearer.
[Maybe it’s an Escher voice?]

"Do you know the Muffin Man
The Muffin Man, the Muffin Man
Do you Know the Muffin Man
Who lives on Drube *Drury*
[Earth to Princess, I think the asterisked stuff meant you should make those corrections, not just insert them like that. But then, that would be an intelligent thing to do, so nevermind.]

Lane," it sang, over and over again...untill...
[STILL one ‘l’.]

"Hello!" came a loud and cheerful voice from behind them. The two guys jumped and whirled around to see...a woman!
[Oh my gods! A female voice belonging to a woman! Who couldn’t have anticipated that?]

Finally, someone female in this insane asylum.
[That doesn’t necessarily make it better. What you want is a sane person in an insane asylum.]

(coughs) Excuse me, got a little excited there.
[Who is speaking here? Is it the Escher words again?]

She stood 5ft and 6in tall,
[Who gets that bloody specific in fics? …Let me rephrase that. What GOOD writer gets that specific in fics?]

dressed in a gray outfit of a sports bra, blue jean shorts with many pockets, hiking boots and various elastic bands on her legs and arms.
[The whole damn outfit is gray? How…drab.]

She had beautifuly
[Okay, beautifully has TWO L's.]

tanned skin, vivid green eyes filled with the wisdom of many years and glee,
[How does glee impart wisdom? Besides the kind that leads up to an ‘oh shit’ moment, that is.]

long auburny-brown
[Auburny is not a word. Hair is either auburn or brown. If it is more brown than auburn, then it is dark auburn.]

hair that was pulled back into a fluffy pony tail and a lean body.
[Her hair was pulled back into a fluffy ponytail and a lean body. That sounds like a hair DON’T if ever I heard one.]

If one were to speculate that she merely worked out, they would be laughed at. For at that very moment the woman carried on both shoulders two giant kegs that could have easily fit three or four Akio Cat curled up inside of them.
[Okay, she works out a lot, or has a Belt of Frost Giant’s Strength or something.]

"Wow! Are those empty?" Yugi asked as he pointed to the kegs.
"Nope, they're both full of the drink made for parties," she said suggestively.
[There’s a specific drink made for parties? Damn. That’s specializing.]

"Oh, are you heading for a party?" Akio Cat asked curiously.
'Damn curiosity, I thought I killed you,' Akio Cat cursed mentally while keeping his outward appearance calm.
[That was incredibly…not humorous.]

"Yes, the young Lord Raenef is throwing a party at his house. You two are invited to join me...but it appears as if you have nothing to bring," the woman said.

"Bring?" Yugi asked.
"Yes. The rules of the house are you must either bring refreshments or be able to cook them," the woman said.
[Didn’t Yugi still have some cookies left?]

"Oh, I can cook. I can cook," Yugi said excitedly before Akio Cat could stop him.
[Why would he want to stop him?]
"Then it's settled. Follow me and soon we shall be at our destination," the woman said and led the way down the middle road as the began to sing another song about Three Blind Mice. Yugi and Akio Cat then followed behind
her.
[The what began to sing?]

"Uh, miss?" Yugi asked.
"Yes?" the woman asked as she turned around and began to walk backwards.
"What is your name?" Yugi asked.
"What is yours?" the woman asked with a grin that bothered Akio Cat and made his tail twitch.
[She probably reminds him of himself.]
"Yugi."
"Well then Yugi, my name is Grey Wolf," the woman said cheerfully and turned back around to walk properly. As Yugi smiled at the delight of finally finding out the woman's name,
[“…smiled in delight at finally finding out the woman’s name…”]

Akio Cat tried to remain cheerful as an uneasyness began to grow inside of him...but Yugi noticed it.
[Uneasiness. He should have been uneasy from the moment he was thrown into this fic.]

"Akio Cat?" Yugi asked curiously.
"That's not just any woman Yugi, she's the only woman in Wonderland and immortal to boot," Akio Cat said, his tail twitching nervously.
[What about the Red Queen?]

"Is that a bad thing?" Yugi asked.
"Ordinarily, no...but those who get on her bad side have been known to vanish-never to be seen again," Akio Cat said.
[Hey, it’d be a way out of this fic.]

"I see; we'll have to watch ourselves then," Yugi whispered and Akio Cat nodded. While the two thought they had kept their conversation quiet, Grey Wolf had heard the whole thing and secretly grinned to show off one of her
pearly white fangs.
[Shouldn’t a grin show both?]

'Boy, won't they be surprised,' she thought as she heard the distant chorus of party music in the distance.
[Be afraid. Be very afraid.]