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January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ha your friends kick ass if they can make yugi glair like that! and i didn't think jou was too out of himself,lots of people do that to him. I don't get his responce but mabey when i read your next chapter I will.
schedule
January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
READ!
you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!
...ok now that I might have your eyes i have some thing to say I CAN'T SPELL. i could not tell if you spelt a word wrong in that whole thing!and secondly don't depend on reviews to tell you how many people have read your story.as you can see a lot of people don't review! so don't think that the only one review you have is the word of the people! cuss it's NOT! as i'm sure you now see. And besides the only thing I didn't like a bout her/his review was the "this is crap".god i love quotation marks!(Quote flippers)HA AHA HA! er right. and for the people that are bashing her some one had to say it. mabey not as harsh, but some one had to tell her what was wrong and how to fix it!or else she would be "crappy"!(Quote flippers) till some one else said something.
now listen you can take her advise and become a better wrighter from this. OR you could suck and not continu this.
your choice but don't wright another story if you don't whant to improve in the process Now everone be happy for me i did this with out spellcheak!oops.>.<
you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!you no suck!
...ok now that I might have your eyes i have some thing to say I CAN'T SPELL. i could not tell if you spelt a word wrong in that whole thing!and secondly don't depend on reviews to tell you how many people have read your story.as you can see a lot of people don't review! so don't think that the only one review you have is the word of the people! cuss it's NOT! as i'm sure you now see. And besides the only thing I didn't like a bout her/his review was the "this is crap".god i love quotation marks!(Quote flippers)HA AHA HA! er right. and for the people that are bashing her some one had to say it. mabey not as harsh, but some one had to tell her what was wrong and how to fix it!or else she would be "crappy"!(Quote flippers) till some one else said something.
now listen you can take her advise and become a better wrighter from this. OR you could suck and not continu this.
your choice but don't wright another story if you don't whant to improve in the process Now everone be happy for me i did this with out spellcheak!oops.>.<
schedule
January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i like it...
schedule
January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey I want you to update! Jou is so cute when he stutters! I know the feeling of getting told your just a friend. It doesnt matter about spelling or grammar so long as the content is good and I really like what you have so far. Please keep it up for no one else but me! (selfish ain't i?!) Good job!
schedule
January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
.:prods:. If you have seriously given up on this story, then I am going to have to break out the Cow Prod normally reserved for Chika.
I will ignore what vixenia said, because if she is who I think she is, then we get along just fine on a different fanfiction site. I just have a different name on the other site, and am one of her very enthusiastic readers...And if it is her, I will have to remind her of her own complaints next time she's on Messenger.
I'm gonna start whining soon ;.; You're not allowed to give up, I'll give you... .:searches pockets:. a 2.5 Litre bottle of Mountain Dew, a half-eaten packet of Peanut Brittle, a bottle of blue nailpolish and cookies if you write another chapter and post it on this site, under this story. No loopholes XD
I'll even give you a Bakura plushie! Very, very precious, seeing as how they refuse to make Bakura Action Figures.
Write! Stop reading this and go write! For this story, noit another one. -This- one. Have you stopped reading yet? Well, fine, I can stop typing then.
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...
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...Yeah, I don't think that's gonna work. Maybe I can hypnotise you into writing? .:brings out grandfather clock:. You are getting sleepy...Sleepy...Repeat the word "Sleepy" over again until you fall asleep...
When I press the "V" key three times, you will want to write! For this story!
VVV
Now, your adoring public wishes for you to go and wriiiite. And you know, I find it rather interesting that when someone gives advice, others flock to the reviewing boxy-thing .:grin:.
Excuse the errors, I've been pulling an all-nighter for two days and for some reason my energy levels are unusually high. Sparodic Insomnia's a bitch.
-Elle
(P.S- Wriiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiite)
I will ignore what vixenia said, because if she is who I think she is, then we get along just fine on a different fanfiction site. I just have a different name on the other site, and am one of her very enthusiastic readers...And if it is her, I will have to remind her of her own complaints next time she's on Messenger.
I'm gonna start whining soon ;.; You're not allowed to give up, I'll give you... .:searches pockets:. a 2.5 Litre bottle of Mountain Dew, a half-eaten packet of Peanut Brittle, a bottle of blue nailpolish and cookies if you write another chapter and post it on this site, under this story. No loopholes XD
I'll even give you a Bakura plushie! Very, very precious, seeing as how they refuse to make Bakura Action Figures.
Write! Stop reading this and go write! For this story, noit another one. -This- one. Have you stopped reading yet? Well, fine, I can stop typing then.
...
...
...
...Yeah, I don't think that's gonna work. Maybe I can hypnotise you into writing? .:brings out grandfather clock:. You are getting sleepy...Sleepy...Repeat the word "Sleepy" over again until you fall asleep...
When I press the "V" key three times, you will want to write! For this story!
VVV
Now, your adoring public wishes for you to go and wriiiite. And you know, I find it rather interesting that when someone gives advice, others flock to the reviewing boxy-thing .:grin:.
Excuse the errors, I've been pulling an all-nighter for two days and for some reason my energy levels are unusually high. Sparodic Insomnia's a bitch.
-Elle
(P.S- Wriiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiite)
schedule
January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Don't give up! I like the story plot alot, your spelling just needs a little work is all. You do NO suck, just get a beta. elle was just pointing out that you should get a beta(maybe she would do it if you asked). Dont let this discourage you, pick up and move on! Oh, and for the sake of my sanity, please right the next chapter and have it beta'd. ^-^
schedule
December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LOL...i really lIKE this story
and the spelling errors didn't bother me one bit ^_^ hehe...i didn't even notice them. i love how everyone makes a big deal of spelling errros and grammar this is a FANFICTION people! not a real novel that is going for the nobel prize. so don't take whiney people who comment on spelling errors and grammar to serious even though editing is a good thing too and improving your skills.
but yes...please continue...you do not suck!!! to me this wasn't a "sucky" fic.
a bad story is like
"jou went to kaiba land one day and told kaiba he loved him. kaiba shot him down so jou went to the nearest cliff and jumped off but as jou lept kaiba came out of no where and grabbed him. i always love you kaiba said i am sorry it took me so long to tell you. then they lived happily ever ...the END"
LOL...serious i have seen people who write like that and don't know what ... "these are" and just write like
i love said kaiba...thats the only thing that bothers me when people don't put quotation marks
but YES
this is a very nice story...please continue the only thing i have to say for you to change is MAKE THE CHAPTERS LONGER AND UPDATE SOON PLEASE ^_^
and the spelling errors didn't bother me one bit ^_^ hehe...i didn't even notice them. i love how everyone makes a big deal of spelling errros and grammar this is a FANFICTION people! not a real novel that is going for the nobel prize. so don't take whiney people who comment on spelling errors and grammar to serious even though editing is a good thing too and improving your skills.
but yes...please continue...you do not suck!!! to me this wasn't a "sucky" fic.
a bad story is like
"jou went to kaiba land one day and told kaiba he loved him. kaiba shot him down so jou went to the nearest cliff and jumped off but as jou lept kaiba came out of no where and grabbed him. i always love you kaiba said i am sorry it took me so long to tell you. then they lived happily ever ...the END"
LOL...serious i have seen people who write like that and don't know what ... "these are" and just write like
i love said kaiba...thats the only thing that bothers me when people don't put quotation marks
but YES
this is a very nice story...please continue the only thing i have to say for you to change is MAKE THE CHAPTERS LONGER AND UPDATE SOON PLEASE ^_^
schedule
December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
heres the thing: you DO NOT SUCK please add another chapter we would really appericiate it thanks!
schedule
December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, you can't give up ne? Look at all the hits you have. I have just read this and I see nothing wrong with it. I want to read more honestly. Sure people are too busy or at the very worst too lazy to write a review...what matters is that they read it ne? Please continue...I'm very interested in what you have to write next...
schedule
December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Finding a Beta shouldn't be too hard, finding one that's compatible with the couplings is another thing altogether.
Don't give up on the story, it has a great plot and even though the spelling and grammar are things that could be worked on, it's nothing that a Beta or a good spell-check can't fix. If you go to the Yu-Gi-Oh part (not the Yaoi part that we're in now) there's a link that says 'Betas', just post something there saying that you're looking for a Beta for your Jou/Seto fic. Betas far and wide should flock and then you'll be faced with the choice of which to pick .:sweatdrop:.
But always make sure that when you get your Beta (to feed it, love it and call it George XD) that whatever you save your work in is compatible. So say that your Beta has Microsoft Word and you have, I dunno, say, Notepad or something, to save in Rich Text Format so that your Beta can read it (otherwise it comes up with a bunch of symbols. Not fun trying to decipher it).
I'll go read your other works, but seriously, I've read fics worse than this with over one hundred good reviews so you shouldn't give up. I'm gifting you with a virtual Flame-Thrower so any flames you recieve can go towards burning something or making s'mores.
-Elle
Don't give up on the story, it has a great plot and even though the spelling and grammar are things that could be worked on, it's nothing that a Beta or a good spell-check can't fix. If you go to the Yu-Gi-Oh part (not the Yaoi part that we're in now) there's a link that says 'Betas', just post something there saying that you're looking for a Beta for your Jou/Seto fic. Betas far and wide should flock and then you'll be faced with the choice of which to pick .:sweatdrop:.
But always make sure that when you get your Beta (to feed it, love it and call it George XD) that whatever you save your work in is compatible. So say that your Beta has Microsoft Word and you have, I dunno, say, Notepad or something, to save in Rich Text Format so that your Beta can read it (otherwise it comes up with a bunch of symbols. Not fun trying to decipher it).
I'll go read your other works, but seriously, I've read fics worse than this with over one hundred good reviews so you shouldn't give up. I'm gifting you with a virtual Flame-Thrower so any flames you recieve can go towards burning something or making s'mores.
-Elle