The New Girl - Perfection has Landed!
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Chapter 19: Learning About a Bad Memory
Phantom: Okay, okay, I know we’ve been baaaaaaaaad little authoresses, so hopefully this FIFTEEN PAGE long chapter will make up for it XD
Lori: Or, if you prefer, you can spank us ^_~
Crispy: -.-
Marik: Are ONLY the viewers that are allowed to spank you?
Lori: <.< >.> yes…
Marik: *shrugs* Forgive me Ra, for I have sinned. *slaps her ass with a plank of wood*
Lori: AAAAAH T____T asshole!
Phantom: *on the floor giggling* XD
Bakura: *jumps on her and binds her to a four-poster bed that appeared from nowhere* Now, which first, a back massage, or tickle torture?
Phantom: NNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! *hates both* >__<
Kaiba: *just sits back and watches* Ahh… it doesn’t get any better than this.
**~***~**
Chapter 19 - Learning About a Bad Memory
Seto walked into the limo holding Sakura. Joey stood outside the limo.
Phantom: Well… that’s a very nice opening sentence to your chapter… not -_-
Malik: And how can you walk into a limo? Unless you literally did walk INTO it. XD
Mai: e_e I think she meant to say something along the lines of “climbed” or even “got” would be better than “walked” XD. It makes Seto sound like an idiot ^_~
Kaiba: >.>
"Wheeler, I wouldn't usually offer this to you but get in!" Joey didn't move, "Well...did you run here?"
Otogi: You’ll need a comma after ‘you’.
"Yes," Joey replied.
Joey: Yes....I'll have sex with you on the first date.
Lori: Momma's little man whore.
Bakura: You've taught him well. *smirks*
Lori: -_____________-
"Then...get in!" Seto ordered. Joey stepped in and sighed.
Phantom: Just to be a nitpicker, shouldn’t it be “Joey sighed and stepped in” rather than the other way around?
Crispy: *bobs her head in agreement*
"Thanks," Joey replied. ' Man. I neva thought rich boy could be so kind. Man! Subaru looks hot asleep! '
All: o______O
Bakura: STUPID! This is just so STUPID!! How can someone look HOT while they’re ASLEEP?!!
Ryou: o.O ‘cute’ maybe, but not…hot. Unless they’re naked with just a sheet over them or something… and I’m digressing ^^;; *promptly shuts up*
Phantom: O_o yeah… um and that should be ‘never’, and the fact that she’s basing this fic on the Japanese series and characters goes to show how much she really knows about them… *coughJounouchicough*
Jou: >.> blame the dubbers.
Lori: Not to mention A..) Jou sounds completely RETARDED pulling that whole “dirt-poor-little-orphan-that-thinks-ALL-rich-men-are-cruel” accent, then finding out that some of them can be different like some bloody goddamn cheap Disney knock-off crap, B.) He went from his "AMAZING" discovery that millionaires CAN have hearts, straight to commenting on how some random bitch looks when she sleeps. Uhhh....can we say: A.D.D ANY ONE?! and C.) NO ONE SAYS ‘MAN’ TWICE IN THE SAME FUCKING GODDAMN SHIT-FOR-BRAINS SENTENCE, "MAN"!!!!! Ugh! *pants*
All: O.O
Phantom: Eaaaasy there, cowgirl… o_O *rubs back*
Lori: X_x
"I'm tired out," Kari sighed and looked at her hand. ' Guess all of us except for Joey have to get some medical attention. Even Yugi. ' "Seto, we should all get checked out by the doctor." Kari looked out the window.
"Yeah, we all are, except for Wheeler who missed the-" Seto noticed a wound on Joey's shoulder. It was deep. He must of been hit by a bit of the power. "Never mind."
"Oh dis?" Joey looked at his shoulder, "It's nothin'. You, Yug and Sakura got it bad." Joey gazed at Sakura and noticed the left hand's fingers dripping off tiny droplets of blood. "Wat happened when she was inside da guardian?"
Lori: -_________- You people make me sick....what the fuck is with little angsty teenagers and mediocre Goth crap like "tiny drops of blood" or "crimson tears"?
Phantom: GGGGAAAHAHA… you are so right. I hate Goths, or better yet Goth-wannabes -___- *is a self-confessed Goth-basher* SATAN WORSHIPPING, ATTENTION-SEEKING, WRIST-SLITTING FUCKERS!! JUST GO JUMP OFF A CLIFF!!
Otogi: o_O ooookay. That would be “Oh, this?,” “nothing” and “what”. And you really shouldn’t use “da” as a substitute for “the”.
Jou: It sounds like I got speech problems -___-
Yuugi: And the least he can do if he’s gonna refer to me by that nickname is put an apostrophe after it -.-
Phantom: Otherwise it sounds like “jug” but with a ‘Y’ XD!
Others: e_e *anime fall*
"I remember trying to go into the light," Yami replied weakly, "It felt like white hot knives were jabbing in my skin, they were digging in. The M. Puzzle protected me somewhat...but left me weak. I can't imagine the pain Sakura went through. It must of been ten fold, or even twenty times as worse as the light felt. And that light really hurt." Yami looked at the puzzle.
Phantom: Egad! She’s doing it again!! T___T
Mai: Sweetheart, it’s “Millennium” for God’s sake. Or if you want to get technical, “Sennen” – Japanese for “Millennium”.
Ryou: Yeah…and if you’re gonna describe something using two words, you sometimes have to hyphenate them, e.g. “white-hot knives…”
Lori: and MORE teenage Goth crap! -__-;;
"I have to agree with Motou there. My arm is pretty beat up, nothing I can't handle, but...Sakura..." he looked down at her sleeping body. The blood still flowed.
Marik: If the blood still flows… what the fuck are they doing in a limo?
Phantom: An ambulance would be a more appropriate alternate, don’t you think? e_e
Lori: And who the fuck cares about Sakura?! Geez! Rule number 1 in avoiding making OCs WAY too Mary Sue-ish...NEVER focus EVERY THING on your own damn character! Hell, you shouldn't even use them as the main character. It just trashes the fic, ok? In fact, you make the rest of the great writers out there feel ashamed that idiots actually consider this to be English literature. Just do the world a favor and Shut. Up.
Phantom: I agree… I mean great writers like Jane Austin, Anna Sewell, Margaret Mitchell and Emily Bronte… even SHAKESPEARE… they MADE writing history. Hell, even BEFORE them, literature was around. Even ancient Greek scripts tell us of great literature. And then we read this… -_- what HAPPENED to the world of great, original works, HUH?! THE WORLD IS DOOMED!!
"Did dis ever happen before?" Joey asked.
Jou: >________< “THIS” God, dammit!
"What do you mean?" Seto asked.
"Did DIS ever happen before?" Joey asked again.
Jou: ……………………. *seething* …..
Phantom: He’s going to spontaneously explode! I can feel it!
All: *hold their breath* O.O
Jou: ………………X_X *passes out cold on Kaiba*
Kaiba: >.> *fans him*
Seto really didn't want to reply but felt he had to. "Yes. Once. But she didn't bleed like this. She came out of this without a scratch. Maybe because she was going all out against Aroga. Maybe using all that power did this to her? I don't know." Seto sighed and looked at her. "I don't want to have to tell her about her changes when she wakes up."
Phantom: *gasps* The only think I can really pick out in this paragraph is “Yes. Once.” should be “Yes, once.”…other than that it seems okay. O.o
Lori: *slaps* What the hell has come over you, woman?!
The mansion was full of commotion as the six of them walked in. Mokuba ran up to Seto in tears.
"What happened? We all so worried! Seto what's wrong with Sakura? She's bleeding all over?! Seto your arm! What happened? SETO!"
Kaiba: *flicks him around the ear* Shut the fuck up and let me talk, clone brother.
"Mokuba calm down. Go and call the doctor for me please? After, I want you to talk with your sister. She'll tell what happened, okay?" Seto looked at Mokuba with warm eyes.
Otogi: Okay, how the hell Kaiba can pull off “warm eyes” is beyond me…
Bakura: Ugh, I agree. Plus her grammar still sucks…
Lori: It licks and fondles too.
Phantom: XD not in the nice way though.
"Yes Seto," Mokuba ran into T.V room to call the doctors Seto had at his disposal.
"Sir? Where do you want Miss Kodasawa?" a maid with brown hair asked.
"Her room. Put black sheets and blankets on the bed. Get three other rooms prepared. We have some guests tonight." Seto walked behind the maid. As he ordered the bed had black sheets, and blankets. The exception was the crimson red pillows. The canapy bed had it's silvery curtains drawn open.
Phantom: -_- the girl is dying, do you really think she cares about the colour scheme of her bedroom right now?
Ryou: Right… and that would be “canopy”.
Lori: She just loves to write about her damn dream bed...in this poor excuse for fanfiction, she can make all of her retarded fantasies come true. -___-
"Sir."
"Good, is the-"
"Doctors are here Seto. I told them to come and see Sakura first. Eight of them came!" Mokuba cheered.
"Sir. Sir? Your arm. Mr. Kaiba let me look at that," the doctor that was wearing a white lab coat took a look at Seto's arm.
"Hmm..." The two doctors wearing suits of grey said as they checked Sakura over.
"I see..."
"Let's just..."
"Would you hurry up?!" Seto asked tapping his foot in annoyance. The doctor finally finished wrapping up Seto's arm and he stood up.
"Mr. Kaiba, no computer work or signing paper work with that arm. I don't want it to become seriously damaged."
'What! No computer! Hey...no paper work!' Seto smirked but it faded, "Very well."
"I'm done with this young lady. What happened to her?" The female doctor asked.
"None of your buisness."
"I'm her doctor! I'll make it my buisness!"
"Hey! Listen! The guy said it's none of your buisness! So...IT'S NONE OF YOUR BUISNESS!" Joey yelled walking in.
Phantom: O.O can anyone say “anger management”? She’s turned everyone here into fuckin’ psychos!
Bakura: You can’t really say they’re OOC though… Kaiba didn’t exactly yell, and Jou did ALL the yelling in that scene.
Otogi: Yeah, but it’s not like the doctor would backchat to Kaiba, knowing he’s one of the most respected guys around.
Phantom: Yeah… that would be like, me abusing Donald Trump XD
Malik: XD … and just for the record, it’s “business”.
'I hate saying this to Wheeler...' "Thanks," Seto mouthed.
"Fine. Miss Kodasawa is pretty banged up. I've tried my best to bandage her up. I want those changed every two days. She needs some R&R (Rest and relaxation). If she tries to get out of bed, keep her in it. Goodnight." The doctor left defeated.
Marik: She’ll be pretty “banged up” when I’M finished with her XD
Phantom: XD Eeww…
Lori: Please...PLEASE don't touch that bitch without a 30 foot bargepole.
"I'll leave ya alone now," Joey left the room, "Oh. Kari is going to be fine. Yug's got a concussion, minor one, and Subaru is just exhausted and will be fine in the morning."
"Where'd you hear all this?"
"The doctors. Me. Um…don't worry 'bout me."
"I wasn't."
"See ya rich boy!" Joey left the room.
"Whatever," Seto's gaze turned to Sakura. Her body was pretty beat up. She had bandages wrapped around her chest, her lower arms, her right hand, her ankle, neck, and there was a band aid on her right cheek.
Phantom: …and she DIDN’T need a blood donor! WHAT A HERO!
Malik: More like a medical miracle if you ask me e_e
Lori: Rule number 2 of OCs...NEVER make them "overly amazing." Like that.
Seto wove her silver hair with black and gold streaks into a braid. The silver, gold and black each had their own strand.
Phantom: *goes into an OOC-overdose seizure* X___________x this…isn’t…happening…
Kaiba: *reads the sentence and immediately joins her*
Mokuba: o_O how the hell would Seto know how to braid someone’s hair? Let alone do it…
Lori: And yet again, she makes her self seem like some retarded mall-Goth.
'Ow...my...head. Why do I feel so weak?' Sakura tried to open her eyes but it hurt. 'Why am I so weak? Why? Why? WHY?'
'Sakura. Calm down.'
'Cala.'
'Don't foget about me! Caru!'
Malik: “forget”, that would be.
'Caru.' Sakura smiled.
'I sugest you wake up before Seto has a heart attack. Caru commands it.'
Phantom: -.- and “suggest”. Why would he have a heart attack?
'But. I feel so weak right now. I can't even open my eyes.'
'Rest for now than. Rest till you need to.'
Yuugi: “THEN” you fuckin’ bitch!! Watch ‘Dude, Where’s my Car?’ again!!
"Sakura?" Seto asked looking at her.
"Huh...Seto..."
"You're awake..." Seto was shocked, 'Oh. Still asleep.'
Meanwhile...
'Ow...my head...hurts so much...' Yami sat up and saw an unfamilure room. It was painted blue. There was a dresser on the left wall, right wall, and the wall right in front of the bed. He was laying in a normal bed with blue sheets. It had a large closet and bathroom.
'Aibou? Are you awake yet?' Yami ventured into Yugi's soul room. 'Why did he not ask for my help when breaking that spell?'
'Y-yami? What are you doing in here? So...weak...' Yugi stayed in the small bed trying to stay awake.
'How can you still be drained? Yugi? How much power was in that spell?'
'I needed to use 99 of my power to stop that spell. I almost gave up 100 until I heard the spell break. I feel so tired.'
Phantom: 99…what? 99 problems and a bitch ain’t one?*
Malik: XD I think he meant percent.
Lori: What...now she's too damn lazy to use the bloody % sign?!
'Then rest for now.'
'How's...Sakura?'
'She's fine I hope. When she turned into the guardian form-'
'Wait. Guardian form?'
'I'll explain later. She defeated Argoa but-'
Bakura: She can’t even get the name of her villain right -__-
'But what?!'
'The process nearly killed her.'
Guest Room where Subaru is...
'Next time I decide to completly make myself exhausted, make sure it's at home.' Subaru sat up and looked around. 'Hey! This ain't my room!' "Where am I?" Subaru asked aloud.
"Rich boys mansion," Joey walked in.
Rich boy? Oh! Kaiba! "Really? Wow! I never would have thought."
Kaiba: She’s suddenly got a lot of energy…
Phantom: -.- she reminds me of like… a meerkat or something.
"I think it's because of Sakura."
"Speaking of Sakura..."
"Joey?" Subaru got up and found she was wearing a white tank top and long white pj pants.
"Yeah. The maids changed us I think? Hey, I'm wearing all blue."
Pegasus: What IS it with her infatuation with being changed??
Phantom: o_O where the hell did YOU come from?
Pegasus: A nearby fanfiction ^.^ this one looked more fun.
Mokuba: *whispers* Why does he still remind me of a pedophile?
Bakura: Good thing I ripped his eye out then, isn’t it…
All: ……… *scoot away*
Lori: ...........*grabs the gun*
"Yeah, I guess. So, about Sakura."
"She's pretty banged up. The docs got her bandaged up and now she's resting in bed."
"Oh." Subaru studied her surrondings. The room was painted white. There was a large canopy bed with blue hangings, it had white sheets and blue pillows. There was a dresser and bookself that was empty. "Doesn't do much to guest rooms does he?"
Phantom: Ok… how many times have I read that same word “bookself” spelt the same way? Seeing it once, MAYBE twice, like that, is acceptable, but this is just too much -__-
Ryou: I’ve seen it too… and it should be “bookshelf” and “surroundings”. And no-one cares what the DAMN room looks like!
"No. You should see Sakura's room."
"Her room? She lives here?" Subaru asked shocked.
Otogi: Commas are your friend… “asked, shocked.” -o-
"Yeah, let's go see her. Oh wait...Kaiba's wit her right now so let's grab some grub!" He pulled Subaru out of the room and to the kitchen.
Sakura's Room...
"Sakura, I know the pain you must of been through was horrible. Why do you have to bare the burden of the M. Cross Bow? At least if it was me I would...what would I do? My lifes become so...new...exciting with you around. I don't know what I would do without you. You've changed so much. You've changed me. In so many ways it was like I needed to meet you. When you...you almost died...I thought my life was over. I wouldn't let that die. That's why I saved you. Now...now you're asleep and probably can't hear anything I say. I know. Me Seto Kaiba is babling. I get on peoples backs because they belly ache. But who cares. You, Kari, Mokuba, you guys are my world." Seto sighed and ran his hand through the end of her braided hair.
Mai: Oh, Kami, this is horrendous. I think we’re gonna need to break this up into sections… starting from, NOW!! *unleashes killer boobs to break up the paragraph*
All: o___O
Crispy: O_o *pecks the killer boobs*
Lori: *cough* Ok then… 1.) “Must HAVE” would be grammatically correct. 2.) “Why do you have to BEAR the burden…” blah, blah. “Bare” means to reveal, uncover, or simply to be naked XD
Phantom: xD Touché… 3.) “MILLENNIUM” Crossbow. Or better yet, “Sennen”. 4.) “Life’s” with an apostrophe, you numbskull. 5.) “Me, Seto Kaiba, is BABBLING,” would be better… even though it’s totally OOC and makes me gag. -_-
Kaiba: -.- I feel you. 6.) “People’s”, 7.) “Bellyache” is one word and 8.) This whole speech is something I would NEVER, EVER do!!
'Oh...Seto..' Sakura smiled in her mind. She strained herself trying to open her eyes but she still felt as weak as a sick kitten.
Ryou: E…gad… it’s so… sickening.
Phantom: Unfortunately, this is all some young girls’ fantasies involves.
"Kaiba? Can we come in?" Subaru asked.
"Sure."
The room was big. It was a big as Seto's. There was a canopy bed with see through silver hangings that sparkled. Black blankets and blood red pillows were on the bed. A dresser was to the side of the bed. There was also four other dressers. Sakura's deck was on the bedside table. A fridge was in the far right corner, a book self full of books was in the left. There was a bathroom big enough to hold a jakuzi, shower and tub. Infact, that's exactly what it had. It also had two closets, large ones full of her clothes.
All: *aren’t paying attention and don’t really care, either*
Marik: It’s “Jacuzzi”, and “Infact” are two words. “In fact”.
"Sakura? How is she?" Joey asked.
"Still sleeping."
"Huh?" Sakura's eyes fluttered open half way.
"Sakura!" Everyone said shocked.
"Ow..." Sakura tried to sit up but fell. Seto caught her and helped her sit up.
"Take it easy," Subaru said. "We've got some things to show you."
"What?" Sakura asked.
"Joey...a mirror," Subaru really hated to do this but she knew Kaiba wouldn't and Joey wouldn't get to the point. Seto untied her hair and let it fall full length.
Sakura held the mirror and looked at her hair. "Wha-what? My hair! What happened? It used to be brown with-with-"
"That last transformation caused you some changes. Are you ok? I know it's scary."
"It is. How can someone just change like that? AH!" Sakura screamed in agony.
Phantom: Anyone notice this goes from one extreme to another?
Mokuba: Yeah, and very randomly -.-
"What's wrong?"
"I can feel the knives! They're burning! They hurt!" Sakura yelled.
Lori: GOTH ALERT! GOTH ALERT!!
Phantom: <.< >.>
Random Goths: *hide in the bushes*
"What's going on?" Seto asked trying to calm Sakura down.
"I don't know!" Joey said spasing out.
Marik: ANOTHER ONE!! *points hysterically* “SPASING” is *NOT* A WORD, BOYS AND GIRLS!!
Bakura: o.O we know that, you egg XD She’s just an idiot who makes up her OWN words for emphasis on the younger teenage generation. THEY are the only ones that understand this dialect.
Phantom: e_e stop trying to be scientific. *shoves socks in his mouth*
"Calm down young one..." a voice replied. Soon it got a body. He had tanned skin and wore a white egyption rob with a white turbin on his head. Around his neck was a golden key.
Lori: UGH. That is the WORST choice of adjectives I have ever seen. It’s so basic…
Phantom: Like trying to explain directions to someone who doesn’t speak English, right? XD You state the very plain, obvious things in the simplest terms you can think of.
Kaiba: You took the words right out of my mouth.
Shadi: And it’s “Egyptian”, “Robe” with an ‘E’ and “turban”, foolish girl. *disappears in a puff of white… bath towels*
All: o______O
"Who are you?" Seto hissed.
"Shadi?" Yami stepped into the room.
"My pharoah. This girl, her memory of the moment is coming back."
Yami: That would be “Pharaoh”, bitch. Where’s the respect?
Yuugi: *thwaps him* You ain’t Pharaoh anymore, n*gga -.-
Phantom: *dies laughing*
"How do you-" Seto asked.
"I know. Please...let me ease her mind." Shadi walked up to her and placed the key on her forehead.
"AH!" Sakura screamed.
"Ah...such a painful transformation. Let me...AH! That light hurts!"
"No duh! Now help her!" Joey yelled.
"Very well. There. She's better." After ten minutes he said this.
Marik: I think they just got out the egg timer again.
Phantom: They didn’t even say what was wrong with her in the first place, what they did to fix her, and how she so magically got better like that -_-
"Was that what I looked like?" she panted when she opened her eyes. "Was that what I looked like? Was that what I became? A monster so intent on destroying Aroga that in the process I hurt you and Yami? Tell me Seto! Was that what happened? TELL ME!" Sakura moaned gripping the blanket.
Bakura: It’s time for you to be quiet now, you moaning little whore. *puts duct tape over her mouth*
"No. Far from it. You became someone who saved our lives. You risked your life to save ours. I'm proud of you. But..."
"But?"
"I never want you to do that again."
"I don't want to be that anymore! I don't!" Sakura threw her fists into the blankets. Tears began to pour down her face. Crimson tears.
Lori: Well, what a BIG SURPRISE!!
Phantom: Ugh, it’s so predictable it makes me sick.
"Sakura, your tears-they're-they-re-"
"They're red." Yami said.
"I'm crying. Crying my own...blood." Sakura moaned. This was all too much for her. She collaspsed into Seto falling back into unconcsiousness.
Marik: Can I rape her mercilessly now while she’s asleep?
Phantom: -o- no you may not rape her mercilessly now while she’s asleep.
Honda: It’s so fucking common for someone to collapse from crying blood, isn’t it? XD
T.V Room half an hour later...
"What's going on wit her?" Joey asked when they were sitting in the T.V room.
"I'm not sure myself. How can someone cry their own blood? That's not possible."
"She's in real pain," Subaru moaned.
"Tears of...her own...blood," Seto was stuck on this fact.
"What do we do now?" Joey asked.
"We help her through this," Yami replied and massaged his temples.
"Guys..." Sakura was standing behind them. She wore a red long sleeved silk pj top with one shoulder exposed, also long black pj pants with white slippers.
Mai: So far this bitch has described every one of her outfits, not to mention broken all the rules etcetera… You’d think that her “friends” would be starting to get a bit peeved with her by now.
"Sakura! You shouldn't be out of bed!" Subaru yelled.
Phantom: But no, they’re all as worried as a paranoid mother.
Lori: And for the record, all her outfits sound butt ugly.
"I came to say...sorry." She said walking toward them and tripping, weakness overcoming her.
"Got you," Seto caught her. She held on tight to his black pj top as he helped her to the couch.
Kaiba: -_______- *pushes her into the fire*
"I know I should be in bed but I had to say sorry."
"For what?"
To Be Continued
**~***~**
Phantom: X____X *unconscious from hyperventilation from the tickling*
Lori: >_O *has a swollen ass* Please…review… and let this torture…end!!
Bakura + Marik + Kaiba: FOOOOWAAAAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAA!!!
Lori: Or, if you prefer, you can spank us ^_~
Crispy: -.-
Marik: Are ONLY the viewers that are allowed to spank you?
Lori: <.< >.> yes…
Marik: *shrugs* Forgive me Ra, for I have sinned. *slaps her ass with a plank of wood*
Lori: AAAAAH T____T asshole!
Phantom: *on the floor giggling* XD
Bakura: *jumps on her and binds her to a four-poster bed that appeared from nowhere* Now, which first, a back massage, or tickle torture?
Phantom: NNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! *hates both* >__<
Kaiba: *just sits back and watches* Ahh… it doesn’t get any better than this.
**~***~**
Chapter 19 - Learning About a Bad Memory
Seto walked into the limo holding Sakura. Joey stood outside the limo.
Phantom: Well… that’s a very nice opening sentence to your chapter… not -_-
Malik: And how can you walk into a limo? Unless you literally did walk INTO it. XD
Mai: e_e I think she meant to say something along the lines of “climbed” or even “got” would be better than “walked” XD. It makes Seto sound like an idiot ^_~
Kaiba: >.>
"Wheeler, I wouldn't usually offer this to you but get in!" Joey didn't move, "Well...did you run here?"
Otogi: You’ll need a comma after ‘you’.
"Yes," Joey replied.
Joey: Yes....I'll have sex with you on the first date.
Lori: Momma's little man whore.
Bakura: You've taught him well. *smirks*
Lori: -_____________-
"Then...get in!" Seto ordered. Joey stepped in and sighed.
Phantom: Just to be a nitpicker, shouldn’t it be “Joey sighed and stepped in” rather than the other way around?
Crispy: *bobs her head in agreement*
"Thanks," Joey replied. ' Man. I neva thought rich boy could be so kind. Man! Subaru looks hot asleep! '
All: o______O
Bakura: STUPID! This is just so STUPID!! How can someone look HOT while they’re ASLEEP?!!
Ryou: o.O ‘cute’ maybe, but not…hot. Unless they’re naked with just a sheet over them or something… and I’m digressing ^^;; *promptly shuts up*
Phantom: O_o yeah… um and that should be ‘never’, and the fact that she’s basing this fic on the Japanese series and characters goes to show how much she really knows about them… *coughJounouchicough*
Jou: >.> blame the dubbers.
Lori: Not to mention A..) Jou sounds completely RETARDED pulling that whole “dirt-poor-little-orphan-that-thinks-ALL-rich-men-are-cruel” accent, then finding out that some of them can be different like some bloody goddamn cheap Disney knock-off crap, B.) He went from his "AMAZING" discovery that millionaires CAN have hearts, straight to commenting on how some random bitch looks when she sleeps. Uhhh....can we say: A.D.D ANY ONE?! and C.) NO ONE SAYS ‘MAN’ TWICE IN THE SAME FUCKING GODDAMN SHIT-FOR-BRAINS SENTENCE, "MAN"!!!!! Ugh! *pants*
All: O.O
Phantom: Eaaaasy there, cowgirl… o_O *rubs back*
Lori: X_x
"I'm tired out," Kari sighed and looked at her hand. ' Guess all of us except for Joey have to get some medical attention. Even Yugi. ' "Seto, we should all get checked out by the doctor." Kari looked out the window.
"Yeah, we all are, except for Wheeler who missed the-" Seto noticed a wound on Joey's shoulder. It was deep. He must of been hit by a bit of the power. "Never mind."
"Oh dis?" Joey looked at his shoulder, "It's nothin'. You, Yug and Sakura got it bad." Joey gazed at Sakura and noticed the left hand's fingers dripping off tiny droplets of blood. "Wat happened when she was inside da guardian?"
Lori: -_________- You people make me sick....what the fuck is with little angsty teenagers and mediocre Goth crap like "tiny drops of blood" or "crimson tears"?
Phantom: GGGGAAAHAHA… you are so right. I hate Goths, or better yet Goth-wannabes -___- *is a self-confessed Goth-basher* SATAN WORSHIPPING, ATTENTION-SEEKING, WRIST-SLITTING FUCKERS!! JUST GO JUMP OFF A CLIFF!!
Otogi: o_O ooookay. That would be “Oh, this?,” “nothing” and “what”. And you really shouldn’t use “da” as a substitute for “the”.
Jou: It sounds like I got speech problems -___-
Yuugi: And the least he can do if he’s gonna refer to me by that nickname is put an apostrophe after it -.-
Phantom: Otherwise it sounds like “jug” but with a ‘Y’ XD!
Others: e_e *anime fall*
"I remember trying to go into the light," Yami replied weakly, "It felt like white hot knives were jabbing in my skin, they were digging in. The M. Puzzle protected me somewhat...but left me weak. I can't imagine the pain Sakura went through. It must of been ten fold, or even twenty times as worse as the light felt. And that light really hurt." Yami looked at the puzzle.
Phantom: Egad! She’s doing it again!! T___T
Mai: Sweetheart, it’s “Millennium” for God’s sake. Or if you want to get technical, “Sennen” – Japanese for “Millennium”.
Ryou: Yeah…and if you’re gonna describe something using two words, you sometimes have to hyphenate them, e.g. “white-hot knives…”
Lori: and MORE teenage Goth crap! -__-;;
"I have to agree with Motou there. My arm is pretty beat up, nothing I can't handle, but...Sakura..." he looked down at her sleeping body. The blood still flowed.
Marik: If the blood still flows… what the fuck are they doing in a limo?
Phantom: An ambulance would be a more appropriate alternate, don’t you think? e_e
Lori: And who the fuck cares about Sakura?! Geez! Rule number 1 in avoiding making OCs WAY too Mary Sue-ish...NEVER focus EVERY THING on your own damn character! Hell, you shouldn't even use them as the main character. It just trashes the fic, ok? In fact, you make the rest of the great writers out there feel ashamed that idiots actually consider this to be English literature. Just do the world a favor and Shut. Up.
Phantom: I agree… I mean great writers like Jane Austin, Anna Sewell, Margaret Mitchell and Emily Bronte… even SHAKESPEARE… they MADE writing history. Hell, even BEFORE them, literature was around. Even ancient Greek scripts tell us of great literature. And then we read this… -_- what HAPPENED to the world of great, original works, HUH?! THE WORLD IS DOOMED!!
"Did dis ever happen before?" Joey asked.
Jou: >________< “THIS” God, dammit!
"What do you mean?" Seto asked.
"Did DIS ever happen before?" Joey asked again.
Jou: ……………………. *seething* …..
Phantom: He’s going to spontaneously explode! I can feel it!
All: *hold their breath* O.O
Jou: ………………X_X *passes out cold on Kaiba*
Kaiba: >.> *fans him*
Seto really didn't want to reply but felt he had to. "Yes. Once. But she didn't bleed like this. She came out of this without a scratch. Maybe because she was going all out against Aroga. Maybe using all that power did this to her? I don't know." Seto sighed and looked at her. "I don't want to have to tell her about her changes when she wakes up."
Phantom: *gasps* The only think I can really pick out in this paragraph is “Yes. Once.” should be “Yes, once.”…other than that it seems okay. O.o
Lori: *slaps* What the hell has come over you, woman?!
The mansion was full of commotion as the six of them walked in. Mokuba ran up to Seto in tears.
"What happened? We all so worried! Seto what's wrong with Sakura? She's bleeding all over?! Seto your arm! What happened? SETO!"
Kaiba: *flicks him around the ear* Shut the fuck up and let me talk, clone brother.
"Mokuba calm down. Go and call the doctor for me please? After, I want you to talk with your sister. She'll tell what happened, okay?" Seto looked at Mokuba with warm eyes.
Otogi: Okay, how the hell Kaiba can pull off “warm eyes” is beyond me…
Bakura: Ugh, I agree. Plus her grammar still sucks…
Lori: It licks and fondles too.
Phantom: XD not in the nice way though.
"Yes Seto," Mokuba ran into T.V room to call the doctors Seto had at his disposal.
"Sir? Where do you want Miss Kodasawa?" a maid with brown hair asked.
"Her room. Put black sheets and blankets on the bed. Get three other rooms prepared. We have some guests tonight." Seto walked behind the maid. As he ordered the bed had black sheets, and blankets. The exception was the crimson red pillows. The canapy bed had it's silvery curtains drawn open.
Phantom: -_- the girl is dying, do you really think she cares about the colour scheme of her bedroom right now?
Ryou: Right… and that would be “canopy”.
Lori: She just loves to write about her damn dream bed...in this poor excuse for fanfiction, she can make all of her retarded fantasies come true. -___-
"Sir."
"Good, is the-"
"Doctors are here Seto. I told them to come and see Sakura first. Eight of them came!" Mokuba cheered.
"Sir. Sir? Your arm. Mr. Kaiba let me look at that," the doctor that was wearing a white lab coat took a look at Seto's arm.
"Hmm..." The two doctors wearing suits of grey said as they checked Sakura over.
"I see..."
"Let's just..."
"Would you hurry up?!" Seto asked tapping his foot in annoyance. The doctor finally finished wrapping up Seto's arm and he stood up.
"Mr. Kaiba, no computer work or signing paper work with that arm. I don't want it to become seriously damaged."
'What! No computer! Hey...no paper work!' Seto smirked but it faded, "Very well."
"I'm done with this young lady. What happened to her?" The female doctor asked.
"None of your buisness."
"I'm her doctor! I'll make it my buisness!"
"Hey! Listen! The guy said it's none of your buisness! So...IT'S NONE OF YOUR BUISNESS!" Joey yelled walking in.
Phantom: O.O can anyone say “anger management”? She’s turned everyone here into fuckin’ psychos!
Bakura: You can’t really say they’re OOC though… Kaiba didn’t exactly yell, and Jou did ALL the yelling in that scene.
Otogi: Yeah, but it’s not like the doctor would backchat to Kaiba, knowing he’s one of the most respected guys around.
Phantom: Yeah… that would be like, me abusing Donald Trump XD
Malik: XD … and just for the record, it’s “business”.
'I hate saying this to Wheeler...' "Thanks," Seto mouthed.
"Fine. Miss Kodasawa is pretty banged up. I've tried my best to bandage her up. I want those changed every two days. She needs some R&R (Rest and relaxation). If she tries to get out of bed, keep her in it. Goodnight." The doctor left defeated.
Marik: She’ll be pretty “banged up” when I’M finished with her XD
Phantom: XD Eeww…
Lori: Please...PLEASE don't touch that bitch without a 30 foot bargepole.
"I'll leave ya alone now," Joey left the room, "Oh. Kari is going to be fine. Yug's got a concussion, minor one, and Subaru is just exhausted and will be fine in the morning."
"Where'd you hear all this?"
"The doctors. Me. Um…don't worry 'bout me."
"I wasn't."
"See ya rich boy!" Joey left the room.
"Whatever," Seto's gaze turned to Sakura. Her body was pretty beat up. She had bandages wrapped around her chest, her lower arms, her right hand, her ankle, neck, and there was a band aid on her right cheek.
Phantom: …and she DIDN’T need a blood donor! WHAT A HERO!
Malik: More like a medical miracle if you ask me e_e
Lori: Rule number 2 of OCs...NEVER make them "overly amazing." Like that.
Seto wove her silver hair with black and gold streaks into a braid. The silver, gold and black each had their own strand.
Phantom: *goes into an OOC-overdose seizure* X___________x this…isn’t…happening…
Kaiba: *reads the sentence and immediately joins her*
Mokuba: o_O how the hell would Seto know how to braid someone’s hair? Let alone do it…
Lori: And yet again, she makes her self seem like some retarded mall-Goth.
'Ow...my...head. Why do I feel so weak?' Sakura tried to open her eyes but it hurt. 'Why am I so weak? Why? Why? WHY?'
'Sakura. Calm down.'
'Cala.'
'Don't foget about me! Caru!'
Malik: “forget”, that would be.
'Caru.' Sakura smiled.
'I sugest you wake up before Seto has a heart attack. Caru commands it.'
Phantom: -.- and “suggest”. Why would he have a heart attack?
'But. I feel so weak right now. I can't even open my eyes.'
'Rest for now than. Rest till you need to.'
Yuugi: “THEN” you fuckin’ bitch!! Watch ‘Dude, Where’s my Car?’ again!!
"Sakura?" Seto asked looking at her.
"Huh...Seto..."
"You're awake..." Seto was shocked, 'Oh. Still asleep.'
Meanwhile...
'Ow...my head...hurts so much...' Yami sat up and saw an unfamilure room. It was painted blue. There was a dresser on the left wall, right wall, and the wall right in front of the bed. He was laying in a normal bed with blue sheets. It had a large closet and bathroom.
'Aibou? Are you awake yet?' Yami ventured into Yugi's soul room. 'Why did he not ask for my help when breaking that spell?'
'Y-yami? What are you doing in here? So...weak...' Yugi stayed in the small bed trying to stay awake.
'How can you still be drained? Yugi? How much power was in that spell?'
'I needed to use 99 of my power to stop that spell. I almost gave up 100 until I heard the spell break. I feel so tired.'
Phantom: 99…what? 99 problems and a bitch ain’t one?*
Malik: XD I think he meant percent.
Lori: What...now she's too damn lazy to use the bloody % sign?!
'Then rest for now.'
'How's...Sakura?'
'She's fine I hope. When she turned into the guardian form-'
'Wait. Guardian form?'
'I'll explain later. She defeated Argoa but-'
Bakura: She can’t even get the name of her villain right -__-
'But what?!'
'The process nearly killed her.'
Guest Room where Subaru is...
'Next time I decide to completly make myself exhausted, make sure it's at home.' Subaru sat up and looked around. 'Hey! This ain't my room!' "Where am I?" Subaru asked aloud.
"Rich boys mansion," Joey walked in.
Rich boy? Oh! Kaiba! "Really? Wow! I never would have thought."
Kaiba: She’s suddenly got a lot of energy…
Phantom: -.- she reminds me of like… a meerkat or something.
"I think it's because of Sakura."
"Speaking of Sakura..."
"Joey?" Subaru got up and found she was wearing a white tank top and long white pj pants.
"Yeah. The maids changed us I think? Hey, I'm wearing all blue."
Pegasus: What IS it with her infatuation with being changed??
Phantom: o_O where the hell did YOU come from?
Pegasus: A nearby fanfiction ^.^ this one looked more fun.
Mokuba: *whispers* Why does he still remind me of a pedophile?
Bakura: Good thing I ripped his eye out then, isn’t it…
All: ……… *scoot away*
Lori: ...........*grabs the gun*
"Yeah, I guess. So, about Sakura."
"She's pretty banged up. The docs got her bandaged up and now she's resting in bed."
"Oh." Subaru studied her surrondings. The room was painted white. There was a large canopy bed with blue hangings, it had white sheets and blue pillows. There was a dresser and bookself that was empty. "Doesn't do much to guest rooms does he?"
Phantom: Ok… how many times have I read that same word “bookself” spelt the same way? Seeing it once, MAYBE twice, like that, is acceptable, but this is just too much -__-
Ryou: I’ve seen it too… and it should be “bookshelf” and “surroundings”. And no-one cares what the DAMN room looks like!
"No. You should see Sakura's room."
"Her room? She lives here?" Subaru asked shocked.
Otogi: Commas are your friend… “asked, shocked.” -o-
"Yeah, let's go see her. Oh wait...Kaiba's wit her right now so let's grab some grub!" He pulled Subaru out of the room and to the kitchen.
Sakura's Room...
"Sakura, I know the pain you must of been through was horrible. Why do you have to bare the burden of the M. Cross Bow? At least if it was me I would...what would I do? My lifes become so...new...exciting with you around. I don't know what I would do without you. You've changed so much. You've changed me. In so many ways it was like I needed to meet you. When you...you almost died...I thought my life was over. I wouldn't let that die. That's why I saved you. Now...now you're asleep and probably can't hear anything I say. I know. Me Seto Kaiba is babling. I get on peoples backs because they belly ache. But who cares. You, Kari, Mokuba, you guys are my world." Seto sighed and ran his hand through the end of her braided hair.
Mai: Oh, Kami, this is horrendous. I think we’re gonna need to break this up into sections… starting from, NOW!! *unleashes killer boobs to break up the paragraph*
All: o___O
Crispy: O_o *pecks the killer boobs*
Lori: *cough* Ok then… 1.) “Must HAVE” would be grammatically correct. 2.) “Why do you have to BEAR the burden…” blah, blah. “Bare” means to reveal, uncover, or simply to be naked XD
Phantom: xD Touché… 3.) “MILLENNIUM” Crossbow. Or better yet, “Sennen”. 4.) “Life’s” with an apostrophe, you numbskull. 5.) “Me, Seto Kaiba, is BABBLING,” would be better… even though it’s totally OOC and makes me gag. -_-
Kaiba: -.- I feel you. 6.) “People’s”, 7.) “Bellyache” is one word and 8.) This whole speech is something I would NEVER, EVER do!!
'Oh...Seto..' Sakura smiled in her mind. She strained herself trying to open her eyes but she still felt as weak as a sick kitten.
Ryou: E…gad… it’s so… sickening.
Phantom: Unfortunately, this is all some young girls’ fantasies involves.
"Kaiba? Can we come in?" Subaru asked.
"Sure."
The room was big. It was a big as Seto's. There was a canopy bed with see through silver hangings that sparkled. Black blankets and blood red pillows were on the bed. A dresser was to the side of the bed. There was also four other dressers. Sakura's deck was on the bedside table. A fridge was in the far right corner, a book self full of books was in the left. There was a bathroom big enough to hold a jakuzi, shower and tub. Infact, that's exactly what it had. It also had two closets, large ones full of her clothes.
All: *aren’t paying attention and don’t really care, either*
Marik: It’s “Jacuzzi”, and “Infact” are two words. “In fact”.
"Sakura? How is she?" Joey asked.
"Still sleeping."
"Huh?" Sakura's eyes fluttered open half way.
"Sakura!" Everyone said shocked.
"Ow..." Sakura tried to sit up but fell. Seto caught her and helped her sit up.
"Take it easy," Subaru said. "We've got some things to show you."
"What?" Sakura asked.
"Joey...a mirror," Subaru really hated to do this but she knew Kaiba wouldn't and Joey wouldn't get to the point. Seto untied her hair and let it fall full length.
Sakura held the mirror and looked at her hair. "Wha-what? My hair! What happened? It used to be brown with-with-"
"That last transformation caused you some changes. Are you ok? I know it's scary."
"It is. How can someone just change like that? AH!" Sakura screamed in agony.
Phantom: Anyone notice this goes from one extreme to another?
Mokuba: Yeah, and very randomly -.-
"What's wrong?"
"I can feel the knives! They're burning! They hurt!" Sakura yelled.
Lori: GOTH ALERT! GOTH ALERT!!
Phantom: <.< >.>
Random Goths: *hide in the bushes*
"What's going on?" Seto asked trying to calm Sakura down.
"I don't know!" Joey said spasing out.
Marik: ANOTHER ONE!! *points hysterically* “SPASING” is *NOT* A WORD, BOYS AND GIRLS!!
Bakura: o.O we know that, you egg XD She’s just an idiot who makes up her OWN words for emphasis on the younger teenage generation. THEY are the only ones that understand this dialect.
Phantom: e_e stop trying to be scientific. *shoves socks in his mouth*
"Calm down young one..." a voice replied. Soon it got a body. He had tanned skin and wore a white egyption rob with a white turbin on his head. Around his neck was a golden key.
Lori: UGH. That is the WORST choice of adjectives I have ever seen. It’s so basic…
Phantom: Like trying to explain directions to someone who doesn’t speak English, right? XD You state the very plain, obvious things in the simplest terms you can think of.
Kaiba: You took the words right out of my mouth.
Shadi: And it’s “Egyptian”, “Robe” with an ‘E’ and “turban”, foolish girl. *disappears in a puff of white… bath towels*
All: o______O
"Who are you?" Seto hissed.
"Shadi?" Yami stepped into the room.
"My pharoah. This girl, her memory of the moment is coming back."
Yami: That would be “Pharaoh”, bitch. Where’s the respect?
Yuugi: *thwaps him* You ain’t Pharaoh anymore, n*gga -.-
Phantom: *dies laughing*
"How do you-" Seto asked.
"I know. Please...let me ease her mind." Shadi walked up to her and placed the key on her forehead.
"AH!" Sakura screamed.
"Ah...such a painful transformation. Let me...AH! That light hurts!"
"No duh! Now help her!" Joey yelled.
"Very well. There. She's better." After ten minutes he said this.
Marik: I think they just got out the egg timer again.
Phantom: They didn’t even say what was wrong with her in the first place, what they did to fix her, and how she so magically got better like that -_-
"Was that what I looked like?" she panted when she opened her eyes. "Was that what I looked like? Was that what I became? A monster so intent on destroying Aroga that in the process I hurt you and Yami? Tell me Seto! Was that what happened? TELL ME!" Sakura moaned gripping the blanket.
Bakura: It’s time for you to be quiet now, you moaning little whore. *puts duct tape over her mouth*
"No. Far from it. You became someone who saved our lives. You risked your life to save ours. I'm proud of you. But..."
"But?"
"I never want you to do that again."
"I don't want to be that anymore! I don't!" Sakura threw her fists into the blankets. Tears began to pour down her face. Crimson tears.
Lori: Well, what a BIG SURPRISE!!
Phantom: Ugh, it’s so predictable it makes me sick.
"Sakura, your tears-they're-they-re-"
"They're red." Yami said.
"I'm crying. Crying my own...blood." Sakura moaned. This was all too much for her. She collaspsed into Seto falling back into unconcsiousness.
Marik: Can I rape her mercilessly now while she’s asleep?
Phantom: -o- no you may not rape her mercilessly now while she’s asleep.
Honda: It’s so fucking common for someone to collapse from crying blood, isn’t it? XD
T.V Room half an hour later...
"What's going on wit her?" Joey asked when they were sitting in the T.V room.
"I'm not sure myself. How can someone cry their own blood? That's not possible."
"She's in real pain," Subaru moaned.
"Tears of...her own...blood," Seto was stuck on this fact.
"What do we do now?" Joey asked.
"We help her through this," Yami replied and massaged his temples.
"Guys..." Sakura was standing behind them. She wore a red long sleeved silk pj top with one shoulder exposed, also long black pj pants with white slippers.
Mai: So far this bitch has described every one of her outfits, not to mention broken all the rules etcetera… You’d think that her “friends” would be starting to get a bit peeved with her by now.
"Sakura! You shouldn't be out of bed!" Subaru yelled.
Phantom: But no, they’re all as worried as a paranoid mother.
Lori: And for the record, all her outfits sound butt ugly.
"I came to say...sorry." She said walking toward them and tripping, weakness overcoming her.
"Got you," Seto caught her. She held on tight to his black pj top as he helped her to the couch.
Kaiba: -_______- *pushes her into the fire*
"I know I should be in bed but I had to say sorry."
"For what?"
To Be Continued
**~***~**
Phantom: X____X *unconscious from hyperventilation from the tickling*
Lori: >_O *has a swollen ass* Please…review… and let this torture…end!!
Bakura + Marik + Kaiba: FOOOOWAAAAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAA!!!