The New Girl - Perfection has Landed!
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Yu-Gi-Oh › General
Rating:
Adult +
Chapters:
21
Views:
3,610
Reviews:
55
Recommended:
0
Currently Reading:
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I do not own YuGiOh!, nor any of the characters from it. I do not make any money from the writing of this story.
Chapter 12: Pure Love
Phantom: Here we are again with chapter 12… I won’t even say the title because I ALREADY feel nauseous *has had a virus and heavy fever for most of the week* -.-
Lori: *hugs* Enjoy, fellow readers and reviewers!! ^_______^
Chapter 12 - Pure Love
Sakura's P.O.V
I woke up with a groan and thinking, Where am I? I looked at my surrondings and figured I was in the mansion Seto owned in the guest room I was now occupying. I goraned and sat up.
Lori: Ok....first off, it's "groaned" and "surroundings", and you "goraned" twice. Next, "I looked at my SURROUNDINGS and figured I was in the mansion Seto owned in the guest room I was now occupying" simply makes no sense...to the point where I can't even correct it. I guess it would sound slightly more intelligent if you said something like "I examined my surroundings, and figured I was in the guest room of Seto's mansion."
Phantom: And maybe if you put “thought” instead of “thinking”, you’ll find it stays in the same tense and makes more sense. Ooooh that rhymes! ^_^
"Ow..." I looked at my hand. It was wrapped up.
Lori: "Wow...my hand is like....wrapped, like, dude. Trippy."
“You're awake." Seto lifted his head off the bed and pulled me into a hug.
Lori: Huh? O_o HIS head? Was he in the bed or something....?
Kaiba: *shudder* Please, DON’T say that.
"Why are you so worried?" I asked in wonder. His eyes spelled worry.
Kaiba: Did I SAY I was worried, bitch? No! The only things I’ll be worried about are the blood stains on my fine linens when I fucking KILL YOU!
"You've been out of it for a week." He replied.
Lori: If she has been unconscious for a week with no IV, she would die from lack of food and water, dearest.
Phantom: Oh but of course he has the finest medical team ever…
"Oh. WHAT?! You really must of been worried. Why did you wait for me?"
Phantom: And that would be “must HAVE been worried”.
"I promised didn't I?" Seto replied and smirked.
"Thanks."
"I've got to tell you something..."
Kaiba: I'm gay....and I only talked to you the first time because I thought you were a dude.
Normal P.O.V
"About Jenina. I know. She's dead. I-" Sakura broke down. Seto pulled her into a hug and let her cry.
Jenina: *looks around* I died???
A week of preperation for her funeral passed. It was raining the day of the funeral. It reflected Jenina's loved ones moods. Sakura held tight to Seto trying hard not to cry. After they went back to the mansion and another couple weeks of grieving took place.
Lori: Hon...commas are your FRIENDS! Learn to USE them! "Sakura held tight to Seto, trying hard not to cry." and "It was raining the day of the funeral, reflecting Jenina's loved ones' moods." Ugh.
Malik: And that’d be “preparation”, just for the record…
To lighten the mood Seto decided to take Sakura and family to an amuesment park for a day. Mokuba's idea. Sakura accepted gratefuly and got ready the day he told her. Late into October, snow covered the ground. Sakura glanced in awe as the beauty and splender of the snow flakes glistened on the ground just waiting for a snow ball or two to be thrown. She quickly changed and headed down the stairs.
Lori: Ok...is it just me, or is that REALLY fucking sick and wrong? Taking the family to an amusement park the day of the funeral????
Phantom: I would say yes, but I think you missed the trivial yet vital little line that says… “After they went back to the mansion and another couple weeks of grieving took place.” Heh. Even THAT doesn’t make sense. I’m starting to think this woman is completely out of her mind! ^_^
Lori: Ok. I missed that. But it's STILL kinda sick and wrong..."oh, you're relative died. I'm sorry. Lets ride the FERRIS WHEEL!!!"
Kaiba: At the rate you’re going I would say that YOU’RE out of your mind…
Jou: You’ll find that most authoresses ARE insane… and those errors should be correctly spelled as “amusement”; “gratefully”; and “splendor”.
Seto couldn't help but stare, Sakura came down in the most beautiful outfit yet. She wore a black chemise turtle neck sweater. A long red skirt with black fur on the bottom, and black ankle high boots that had white fur. She had on black ear muffs and white gloves. Her hair was in long braids.
Lori: Lose the braids, and that would be cute....Phantom, would you care to correct this moron's ever-so-poor grammar?
Phantom: I shall. Firstly, there is NO NEED for so many periods!! Let me rephrase this to make it sound passable: “She wore a black chemise turtle-neck sweater, a long red skirt with black fur on the bottom and black ankle-high boots that had white fur on the edging. A pair of black ear muffs and white gloves along with her hair styled into braids, finished off the whole look.” And that’s just a CRAPPY way of rephrasing it -________-
"Ready?" She asked him. Seto nodded and put on black sunglasses. He wore a trench coat, a heavy one that was all black with a high collar. He wore dark blue pants and black leather shoes.
"You two ready?" Seto asked Kari and Mokuba.
"Yep! Yugi's meeting us there! Oh and Rebecca!" Kari winked at Mokuba who blushed.
"Joy." Seto replied.
Phantom: Shouldn’t that have been “Oh, and Rebecca, too!”?
Kari wore a pink sweater with a red hood, red flare pants and her hair was down. She wore black ear muffs and black gloves. Mokuba had on a green sweater and pants. He had on a blue hat that resembled Chris Cringles and green gloves. His hair, of course, stayed down.
Lori: That would be "Kari wore a pink sweater with a red hood, red flare pants, black ear muffs, black gloves and her hair was down." and "Mokuba had on a green sweater and matching pants, a blue hat that resembled Chris Cringles', green gloves, and of course, his hair was worn down." (I’m assuming they match since you just said "pants", and those of us that KNOW how to speak English usually automatically think that both the sweater and the pants are green, unless you say otherwise).
Phantom: Just for the record the way she is describing every little detail on how the characters look leaves very little to the imagination, ne? -_-
Mai: AND she seems to have an infatuation with the colours pink and red – TOGETHER! Everyone knows pink and red clash -_-
Lori: Eh, SOME TIMES they look good....like pink with a red lining. But you're right, usually it sucks.
"Yeah! Let's go!" Mokuba ran into the limo followed by Kari. Seto hooked his arm with Sakura's and led her into the limo.
Lori: Commas! Fucking COMMAS! "Mokuba ran into the limo, followed by Kari, while Seto hooked arms with Sakura and led her into the vehicle." Just a tip… don't use the same word frequently in one paragraph. Like in this case, I said "vehicle" because limo had already been used, and car just doesn't sound right.
"Driver, the amuesment park!" Seto ordered in his cold emotionless voice.
Ryou: “Amusement” park. Sheesh -_-
Lori: Yet another small tip....exclamation points generally give you the mental image of a loud, angry, or excited voice. So when you say cold and emotionless, that's an oxymoron.
"Yes sir!" the driver replied. Seto closed the window seperating himself from the driver.
Yuugi: That would be “separating”.
Sakura watched the snowflakes hit the window in awe.
Lori: "ooooh...the pretty snow flakes......" ADD child -___________-
"Snow is pretty, isn't it Kari?" Sakura asked.
"Yeah, espeacially at the mansion," Kari said and also watched the snow.
They arrived at the park in no time at all. Yugi and Rebecca stood there holding on to no one. Where as Tea held onto Tristan, and Subaru held onto Joey.
Lori: *growls* Get your filthy ass hands off my man, BITCH! *attacks Subaru, the car chick XD*
"Looks like your pairs are waiting," Sakura said to Kari and Mokuba who only blushed and exited first.
Lori: Partners...they're hooking up with one single person each, not joining a group. So, their PARTNERS are waiting.
Phantom: OOORRRGYYY!!! W00T!
Lori: *glomps Phantom, gets nekked and starts the grand lesbian orgy on the floor*
"Coming?" Seto asked and they left the limo.
"Yep!" Sakura came out holding Seto's hand.
"Hey guys!" Tea waved.
Lori: Ok...yet another simply bad writing habit. "Tea" is waving and saying hello, and then suddenly they're off doing shit? Either they ran away from the annoying bitch, or you skipped a shit load of detail…
Phantom: I’d say she skipped the detail. She does that a lot, remember?
They all split up but before they did Seto told Mokuba and Kari to meet him and Sakura at the entrance by 1 pm.
"Okay!" Kari and Mokuba ran off.
"Where to first?" Sakura asked Seto.
"Hmm...do you like the game area?" Seto asked.
"Never been to a fair before. What's here?" Sakura asked.
Phantom: *mocks Sakura* “Oh, *sob, sob* I’ve never been to a fair before! My deprived childhood!” *sob, sob*
"Let's go to the games area first. Ok?" Seto said.
"Okay with me!" Sakura smiled and let Seto lead her to the game area. The first game they played was the one where you shoot the targets with a rifle. Seto shot all the targets with ease. He won a small bear that was all white with a black bow on the back of it's head. Not being one to keep stuffed animals in his room he gave it to Sakura.
The rest of the night passed by in a flash. Seto screaming his head off on the rollar coaster, Sakura throwing up after the Tilt-A-Whirl. It was close to 1 pm when they finally made it off one of the last rides.
Phantom: Uh…night? If it’s only close to 1 pm wouldn’t that mean it’s DAY time?
Kaiba: *snorts* -.- and that would be “roller coaster”.
"I have a surprise for you. Close your eyes." Seto told Sakura.
"What is it?" Sakura asked.
"Close your eyes." Seto replied.
"Fine," Sakura sighed and did as told. Seto guided her through groups of people. Soon he stopped.
"Open them."
"Yea!" She opened her eyes and saw the farris wheel. "WOW!" It spelt her name out in lights.
Lori: *eye roll*
Jou: *gags*
Kaiba: *cries over the loss of thousands and thousands of dollars, wasted on that bitch*
Phantom: It’s “Ferris” wheel. And…if it’s daytime, how do you expect to SEE these lights…?
"That's not all. Come on." Seto pulled her to the front of the line.
"HEY! GET IN THE BACK YOU MORONS!" Someone yelled.
"Shut it!" Seto yelled. They went quiet.
Angry crowd: *flips Seto clone off and throws him to the back of the line*
"Right this way Mr. Kaiba," the man controlling the farris wheel let them into the first carriage. It had velvet red seats and pillows. He shut the door and they were strapped in. As the other people got on they moved higher and higher up. Soon the ride was in motion until they came to a halt at the very top.
Seto seemed excited about something. Sakura continued to look at the sky. Fireworks exploded and spelt out the words 'I love you.'
Jou: It’s supposed to be day time… isn’t it?
Lori: How the hell can fireworks spell out "I love you" when you can barely keep them from hitting your neighbor's window? O_o
Phantom: Even if they could, it’s the worst, most corny material ever. -.- *pets The Chicken*
Chicken: *purrs*
Lori: *molests the chicken*
Chicken: "O_O" Get the CLUCK off me, bitch!
Lori: Well you were in the way of Phantom’s boobs…
Random person: Dude....sick. Chicken sex.
"Seto? You did this?" Sakura asked in shock. He only nodded as she gave him a big hug. He leant in front of her face and they shared a passionate kiss.
Kaiba: Tell me why I shouldn’t just jump off my KaibaCorp Tower and end it all now?!
Phantom: Can’t…answer….too….traumatized……. X_X *passes into a coma*
Lori: o_O *pokes*
In the carrige below Joey and Subaru watched the fireworks explode. Subaru's sapphire eyes lit up with joy.
The carrige below them Mokuba and Rebecca were in a fist fight, a playfull one though. The carrige below them Tristan and Tea were kissing. And below them Kari and Yugi were in tight holds.
Yami: More like “IN the carriage bellow them, Tristan and Tea were kissing.”
Malik: That would be “carriage” times three… and “playful”.
**~***~**
Phantom: *still comatose*
Lori: *continues poking boobies with a large stick*
Kaiba: O_o
Jou: Review please!
Lori: *hugs* Enjoy, fellow readers and reviewers!! ^_______^
Chapter 12 - Pure Love
Sakura's P.O.V
I woke up with a groan and thinking, Where am I? I looked at my surrondings and figured I was in the mansion Seto owned in the guest room I was now occupying. I goraned and sat up.
Lori: Ok....first off, it's "groaned" and "surroundings", and you "goraned" twice. Next, "I looked at my SURROUNDINGS and figured I was in the mansion Seto owned in the guest room I was now occupying" simply makes no sense...to the point where I can't even correct it. I guess it would sound slightly more intelligent if you said something like "I examined my surroundings, and figured I was in the guest room of Seto's mansion."
Phantom: And maybe if you put “thought” instead of “thinking”, you’ll find it stays in the same tense and makes more sense. Ooooh that rhymes! ^_^
"Ow..." I looked at my hand. It was wrapped up.
Lori: "Wow...my hand is like....wrapped, like, dude. Trippy."
“You're awake." Seto lifted his head off the bed and pulled me into a hug.
Lori: Huh? O_o HIS head? Was he in the bed or something....?
Kaiba: *shudder* Please, DON’T say that.
"Why are you so worried?" I asked in wonder. His eyes spelled worry.
Kaiba: Did I SAY I was worried, bitch? No! The only things I’ll be worried about are the blood stains on my fine linens when I fucking KILL YOU!
"You've been out of it for a week." He replied.
Lori: If she has been unconscious for a week with no IV, she would die from lack of food and water, dearest.
Phantom: Oh but of course he has the finest medical team ever…
"Oh. WHAT?! You really must of been worried. Why did you wait for me?"
Phantom: And that would be “must HAVE been worried”.
"I promised didn't I?" Seto replied and smirked.
"Thanks."
"I've got to tell you something..."
Kaiba: I'm gay....and I only talked to you the first time because I thought you were a dude.
Normal P.O.V
"About Jenina. I know. She's dead. I-" Sakura broke down. Seto pulled her into a hug and let her cry.
Jenina: *looks around* I died???
A week of preperation for her funeral passed. It was raining the day of the funeral. It reflected Jenina's loved ones moods. Sakura held tight to Seto trying hard not to cry. After they went back to the mansion and another couple weeks of grieving took place.
Lori: Hon...commas are your FRIENDS! Learn to USE them! "Sakura held tight to Seto, trying hard not to cry." and "It was raining the day of the funeral, reflecting Jenina's loved ones' moods." Ugh.
Malik: And that’d be “preparation”, just for the record…
To lighten the mood Seto decided to take Sakura and family to an amuesment park for a day. Mokuba's idea. Sakura accepted gratefuly and got ready the day he told her. Late into October, snow covered the ground. Sakura glanced in awe as the beauty and splender of the snow flakes glistened on the ground just waiting for a snow ball or two to be thrown. She quickly changed and headed down the stairs.
Lori: Ok...is it just me, or is that REALLY fucking sick and wrong? Taking the family to an amusement park the day of the funeral????
Phantom: I would say yes, but I think you missed the trivial yet vital little line that says… “After they went back to the mansion and another couple weeks of grieving took place.” Heh. Even THAT doesn’t make sense. I’m starting to think this woman is completely out of her mind! ^_^
Lori: Ok. I missed that. But it's STILL kinda sick and wrong..."oh, you're relative died. I'm sorry. Lets ride the FERRIS WHEEL!!!"
Kaiba: At the rate you’re going I would say that YOU’RE out of your mind…
Jou: You’ll find that most authoresses ARE insane… and those errors should be correctly spelled as “amusement”; “gratefully”; and “splendor”.
Seto couldn't help but stare, Sakura came down in the most beautiful outfit yet. She wore a black chemise turtle neck sweater. A long red skirt with black fur on the bottom, and black ankle high boots that had white fur. She had on black ear muffs and white gloves. Her hair was in long braids.
Lori: Lose the braids, and that would be cute....Phantom, would you care to correct this moron's ever-so-poor grammar?
Phantom: I shall. Firstly, there is NO NEED for so many periods!! Let me rephrase this to make it sound passable: “She wore a black chemise turtle-neck sweater, a long red skirt with black fur on the bottom and black ankle-high boots that had white fur on the edging. A pair of black ear muffs and white gloves along with her hair styled into braids, finished off the whole look.” And that’s just a CRAPPY way of rephrasing it -________-
"Ready?" She asked him. Seto nodded and put on black sunglasses. He wore a trench coat, a heavy one that was all black with a high collar. He wore dark blue pants and black leather shoes.
"You two ready?" Seto asked Kari and Mokuba.
"Yep! Yugi's meeting us there! Oh and Rebecca!" Kari winked at Mokuba who blushed.
"Joy." Seto replied.
Phantom: Shouldn’t that have been “Oh, and Rebecca, too!”?
Kari wore a pink sweater with a red hood, red flare pants and her hair was down. She wore black ear muffs and black gloves. Mokuba had on a green sweater and pants. He had on a blue hat that resembled Chris Cringles and green gloves. His hair, of course, stayed down.
Lori: That would be "Kari wore a pink sweater with a red hood, red flare pants, black ear muffs, black gloves and her hair was down." and "Mokuba had on a green sweater and matching pants, a blue hat that resembled Chris Cringles', green gloves, and of course, his hair was worn down." (I’m assuming they match since you just said "pants", and those of us that KNOW how to speak English usually automatically think that both the sweater and the pants are green, unless you say otherwise).
Phantom: Just for the record the way she is describing every little detail on how the characters look leaves very little to the imagination, ne? -_-
Mai: AND she seems to have an infatuation with the colours pink and red – TOGETHER! Everyone knows pink and red clash -_-
Lori: Eh, SOME TIMES they look good....like pink with a red lining. But you're right, usually it sucks.
"Yeah! Let's go!" Mokuba ran into the limo followed by Kari. Seto hooked his arm with Sakura's and led her into the limo.
Lori: Commas! Fucking COMMAS! "Mokuba ran into the limo, followed by Kari, while Seto hooked arms with Sakura and led her into the vehicle." Just a tip… don't use the same word frequently in one paragraph. Like in this case, I said "vehicle" because limo had already been used, and car just doesn't sound right.
"Driver, the amuesment park!" Seto ordered in his cold emotionless voice.
Ryou: “Amusement” park. Sheesh -_-
Lori: Yet another small tip....exclamation points generally give you the mental image of a loud, angry, or excited voice. So when you say cold and emotionless, that's an oxymoron.
"Yes sir!" the driver replied. Seto closed the window seperating himself from the driver.
Yuugi: That would be “separating”.
Sakura watched the snowflakes hit the window in awe.
Lori: "ooooh...the pretty snow flakes......" ADD child -___________-
"Snow is pretty, isn't it Kari?" Sakura asked.
"Yeah, espeacially at the mansion," Kari said and also watched the snow.
They arrived at the park in no time at all. Yugi and Rebecca stood there holding on to no one. Where as Tea held onto Tristan, and Subaru held onto Joey.
Lori: *growls* Get your filthy ass hands off my man, BITCH! *attacks Subaru, the car chick XD*
"Looks like your pairs are waiting," Sakura said to Kari and Mokuba who only blushed and exited first.
Lori: Partners...they're hooking up with one single person each, not joining a group. So, their PARTNERS are waiting.
Phantom: OOORRRGYYY!!! W00T!
Lori: *glomps Phantom, gets nekked and starts the grand lesbian orgy on the floor*
"Coming?" Seto asked and they left the limo.
"Yep!" Sakura came out holding Seto's hand.
"Hey guys!" Tea waved.
Lori: Ok...yet another simply bad writing habit. "Tea" is waving and saying hello, and then suddenly they're off doing shit? Either they ran away from the annoying bitch, or you skipped a shit load of detail…
Phantom: I’d say she skipped the detail. She does that a lot, remember?
They all split up but before they did Seto told Mokuba and Kari to meet him and Sakura at the entrance by 1 pm.
"Okay!" Kari and Mokuba ran off.
"Where to first?" Sakura asked Seto.
"Hmm...do you like the game area?" Seto asked.
"Never been to a fair before. What's here?" Sakura asked.
Phantom: *mocks Sakura* “Oh, *sob, sob* I’ve never been to a fair before! My deprived childhood!” *sob, sob*
"Let's go to the games area first. Ok?" Seto said.
"Okay with me!" Sakura smiled and let Seto lead her to the game area. The first game they played was the one where you shoot the targets with a rifle. Seto shot all the targets with ease. He won a small bear that was all white with a black bow on the back of it's head. Not being one to keep stuffed animals in his room he gave it to Sakura.
The rest of the night passed by in a flash. Seto screaming his head off on the rollar coaster, Sakura throwing up after the Tilt-A-Whirl. It was close to 1 pm when they finally made it off one of the last rides.
Phantom: Uh…night? If it’s only close to 1 pm wouldn’t that mean it’s DAY time?
Kaiba: *snorts* -.- and that would be “roller coaster”.
"I have a surprise for you. Close your eyes." Seto told Sakura.
"What is it?" Sakura asked.
"Close your eyes." Seto replied.
"Fine," Sakura sighed and did as told. Seto guided her through groups of people. Soon he stopped.
"Open them."
"Yea!" She opened her eyes and saw the farris wheel. "WOW!" It spelt her name out in lights.
Lori: *eye roll*
Jou: *gags*
Kaiba: *cries over the loss of thousands and thousands of dollars, wasted on that bitch*
Phantom: It’s “Ferris” wheel. And…if it’s daytime, how do you expect to SEE these lights…?
"That's not all. Come on." Seto pulled her to the front of the line.
"HEY! GET IN THE BACK YOU MORONS!" Someone yelled.
"Shut it!" Seto yelled. They went quiet.
Angry crowd: *flips Seto clone off and throws him to the back of the line*
"Right this way Mr. Kaiba," the man controlling the farris wheel let them into the first carriage. It had velvet red seats and pillows. He shut the door and they were strapped in. As the other people got on they moved higher and higher up. Soon the ride was in motion until they came to a halt at the very top.
Seto seemed excited about something. Sakura continued to look at the sky. Fireworks exploded and spelt out the words 'I love you.'
Jou: It’s supposed to be day time… isn’t it?
Lori: How the hell can fireworks spell out "I love you" when you can barely keep them from hitting your neighbor's window? O_o
Phantom: Even if they could, it’s the worst, most corny material ever. -.- *pets The Chicken*
Chicken: *purrs*
Lori: *molests the chicken*
Chicken: "O_O" Get the CLUCK off me, bitch!
Lori: Well you were in the way of Phantom’s boobs…
Random person: Dude....sick. Chicken sex.
"Seto? You did this?" Sakura asked in shock. He only nodded as she gave him a big hug. He leant in front of her face and they shared a passionate kiss.
Kaiba: Tell me why I shouldn’t just jump off my KaibaCorp Tower and end it all now?!
Phantom: Can’t…answer….too….traumatized……. X_X *passes into a coma*
Lori: o_O *pokes*
In the carrige below Joey and Subaru watched the fireworks explode. Subaru's sapphire eyes lit up with joy.
The carrige below them Mokuba and Rebecca were in a fist fight, a playfull one though. The carrige below them Tristan and Tea were kissing. And below them Kari and Yugi were in tight holds.
Yami: More like “IN the carriage bellow them, Tristan and Tea were kissing.”
Malik: That would be “carriage” times three… and “playful”.
**~***~**
Phantom: *still comatose*
Lori: *continues poking boobies with a large stick*
Kaiba: O_o
Jou: Review please!