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oh how fucking typical gotta love you darling hardasses dont you one looke at INNOCENE is enough to make you morons cringe is that it so be it then *she takes out a computer and erases the part where Yami set Malik and Ishizu free from their obligations to him and with great delight throws them both back underground then reseals the entrance in stone* and let us not forget mister needs serious anger management skills takes it out on Yami FOR SOMETHING HIS THRICE ACCURSED UNCLE DID hell Yami wasnt even fucking born when that happened *she shoves Bakura into the past and forces him to bare witness and drill into his mind the face of the one really responsible till it sinks in*

utterly typical of you fools you never see the bigger picture do you course not that could a weakling like Yugi provide screw the fact that he saved Seto and Mokuba from a life of death destruction and corruption that would have wounded up with them in prison or the most hated duo in business yet and then theres the wonderful fad trio Serenity would be blind as a fucking bat and useless to the world her brother killed in weeks its just a question of where and when Honda would still be a hard ass and never get anywhere in life Anzu would have no one to support her useless dreams and she'd either work at that stupid burger join for the rest of her life or gets raped and killed by Ushio or something

then Ryou would still be locked inside his own past with no escape and no freedome for him or Bakura Malike would still be locked underground and never know freedome until he went crazy then he'd kill everyone in his path and get no where for it and eventually fight against Pegasus and Dartz and the whole shebang woudl be up in smoke taking the planet with it and while you idots twiddle your thumbs in hell wondering where the fuck it went wrong you know where to look *rolls her eyes before she shoves Malik Bakura and Marik away into an acid pit then leaves cursing every one of them into a slow painful death*

here it sits imcomplete. Are you going to finish it someday in this life time. If not, add a note, saying "on hold","dead muses","not interested","DISCONTINUED". Or you can continue your story,with a more
mature attitude,which sometime only age can bring. That would be nice. You had a good story "idea", a good start with a lot of possibilities. All you have to do is see it through one way or an other.


Good Luck,wherever you may be.

Wow. very nice! I like your writing and your sotries! Keep up with it! It's very good and update soon please!

Oni?

I hope you finish this.........

I want to read more!

Great fic so far, however, not ALL american schools are like that. Mine isn't, in fact it I like to think that what is protrayed in Hollywood is an exaggeration rather than truth. Sure people get picked on, and their are cliques... but from what I can see, at least in from being in a large High school, the cliques are much less inclusive then hollywood suggests. Most "cliques" at my school aren't truly cliques but LARGE groups of friends that intermingle and hang out. my lunch table is 8 to 12 people that normally sit there. WE're all friends, however, thats one of the few times we see each other. I like to think that most american schools give a decent education- it's not their fault that hollywood does not protray that nor is it the schools fault if rebelious teens decide not to take advantage of their schooling. Please don't diss american schools just from seeing what the "high class hollywood drama" schools are like.

Thanks,
Cia

I sat here in a -15 degree house, literally, in New Jersey, and read all thirteen chapters so far. O.o; I think I have frostbite...Anywho, I hope I can read the next chapter soon! You're a wonderful writer and this piece is good enough to prove it!Oh, could you please email me when you post the next one? I'll totally forget. ^.^; Too bad AFF.Net doesn't have Author Alerts like FF.Net does! lmfao.
Ja Mata NE!
~Karasu8~

i like dis story
pls update soon

Wonderful story, I'm absolutely enjoying the characters, and their gradual changes, that's rare. I absolutely adore the descriptions of Yugi and Ryou, they seem to glow almost, with fraiand and some sort of a beauty. Wonderful. Hope to read more soon.

Yuji: Aww same clueless Yamis (Include Mai I guess) who don't understand their feelings.
Yumi: Technically in this fic they're not Yamis
Yuji: Listen when we're talking about Yami, Bakura, and Marik in my head it repeats Yamis
Yumi: Ok, hey nice wording to remeber all but the "Cocksuckers, meet Yuji" thing was priceless
Yuji: I like the gentle moments
Yumi: I also like those little Yami think of Yuji under him stuff (You know sweating, legs opened wide, moaning, all that stuff)
Yuji: I feel bad for Ryou I don't think Bakura will be gentle in this one
Yumi: Fuck that I think Bakura got the wrong idea about the damn dolly
Yuji: You language
Yumi: And what fucking wrong with my language *She said that calmly she doesn't lose her cool often*?
Yuji: *Sigh* Nothing
Yumi: Hey update!! Quick! We haven'en men met Malik yet
Yuji: Yes please udate. I thank you if you do it soon