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for Kiss My Hand At My Command

by Reppa

person Maris
schedule October 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Don't know why the hell I have to enter my name and e-mail after I've logged in...
Okay. I decided to divide this review into two parts: the good things about this fic, and the bad. This way, you can just ignore whatever I wrote for the bad part.
GOOD THINGS ABOUT THIS FIC: I absolutely loved Malik in this. His comedy relief was fantastic- I loved the part where he said "Bakura's not my boyfriend, he's my stalker." Also, it seems you aimed to please with this fic, which is awesome, although I hope you were still writing for your own pleasure as well as for your readers'.

BAD THINGS ABOUT THIS FIC: I really resented your comment about bipolar people. I have manic depression (aka bipolar disorder) and it does not make me act like a sadistic maniac. It basically makes me occassionally have really severe mood swings known as highs and lows. Also, this fic really isn't realistic at all. I know, I know, that's why it's called FICTION, but I've read other stories that have sounded better than this BECAUSE the authors made them realistic. I don't want to go into detail over why this is so unrealistic, because that would be tedious. Another thing about this story is that I noticed you misused words often. For example, you can't scowl loudly because scowling is a facial expression. It doesn't make a sound. Writing something like "he scowled darkly" would have been more appropriate. Last thing since I've ranted enough: I really despised the ending. Seto was treated unfairly and inhumanely during the entire fic, and to make him suffer that much for nothing seems unneccessarily cruel.
person Dark_Sage
schedule October 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey! I've already read this story...but it was before i registered...like right before...any way just wanted to tell you i loved it! can't wait 'til the sequel! lates!
person pixydeathkiss
schedule June 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i loooooooovvvvveeee your story. please please please make the next one. please? awww come on. you know you want do ido it do it do it. ~.* its like 6am and i havent sleped so sorry for my anoyingness. but really. i love your fic. if you dont write the next one ill have to hunt you down and make you write it.... and i have ways of doing that.... really i do. just you wait and see. YOULL ALL SEE!!!!
person yugismine
schedule May 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Kick-ass story. Can't wait for the sequel!
person MomOfFluffyAndFluffier
schedule April 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
can't wait for the sequel...this was a fantastic story (wonder how Seto is gonna get even). Wonder how close the two might become when they realize how similar their lives have been .... despite the major glaring difference in financial status they experienced. Hope they can work things through in the next part...or perhaps the third if this will be a trilogy? (part one with Joe as dom...part two with Seto as dom...part three they finally realize their true feelings and learn to love each other in truth?)
person halowing4
schedule April 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You are right. There are a lot of unresolved issues from this story. Hope the sequel will lead to a real and possitive relationship between Jou and Kaiba.
person Kodachi
schedule April 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I like!!! I wanna read the sequel!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person stegeta
schedule April 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
GOD! I LOVE THIS FIC!!!!!!!!!! ITS MY FAV OF ALL TIME AND BELIVE ME I READ ALOT OF FIC!YOUR THE BEST SO DON'T STOP OR I WILL HAVE NO RESSON TO LIVE!!PLEASE UE SOE SOON I JUSTE CAN;T ANYMORE ITS THE BEST THING SICE LIFE ITSSELF! I LIKE COLLECT FIC ABOUT UKE SETO AND YOUR IS THE BEST ...LOVE YOUR SITE TO^_~ QUIP UP THE GOOD WORK YOUR BIGGEST FAN
STEGETA
-XXX-
person Felidae
schedule April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ahum(in sing-sang-voice:)
Scaredy Cat and Horny Cat were home all alone.
Hrony Cat wanted to play,
Scaredy cat said nay,
so Horny Cat took Scaredy Cat
on the wild ride anyway

Poor Seto, hehehehee...ah, what wonderful mental images you deliver, very appetizing, if I may say so..^^
person Felidae
schedule April 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Meowrrrrr...(rubs up against Reppa's leg:) me like evil Jou, and I really like your story...purrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr....