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Hi, I found this story by chance and I find that I really like it. I was wondering if this story is still on going? If so please update again soon

Hi, I found this story by chance and I find that I really like it. I was wondering if this story is still on going? If so please update again soon

I loved this chapter best! I hope to see more :)

 

COMPLETELY IN  LOVE WITH THIS!!!

Well, miss tigress, I am enjoying your story. I think your doing great since this is one of your first fanfics. Your writing is clear and lucid.I think what your story is missing is the internal conversations or thought process that your main characters are feeling. I expect more huffs and puffs between s and j (sounds like a sandwich, don't you think?.) This softness between these two is sweet but feels like your writing for a young audience. I would like to see more conflict, because relstionships are complicated. Though since you have already set the rythem for this piece, save my suggestions for your next story. Your doing a great job, really!

Wow!I think you have found your rythem.really,really good job!

I think the word you are looking for is "commit", as in commit to memory. The use of the word "commemorate" implies a ceremony and maybe a statue. Of course, if joey were to commemorate seto's dick in silver dollars, I would cough up my retirement account.

I love this so much, please keep writing I need more!

Welp, safe to say I am now a fan of all of your stories :) looking forward to more.

DAMN!!! This is an awesome story!! I should have read it sooner!!!

Catti-dono