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Please finish the story :)

Or if you have it already finished somewhere elas tell me at (  ZenaMcClain1997@gmail.com  )

 

I have gotten to enjoy reading this lovely story you have written so far and am sad to see it has collected dust before being completed. I do hope you dust this beauty off and continue the engaging tale.

bah this is ridiculous how can Yugi not see more is afoot here even Atemu saw that coming given the direction it chose to be pointed at its too convenient that so many hardships as well as so many destined events are being carried out near the fifth lords domain and Yami what an audacious man still presuming he could treat Yugi like a friend when he's out to destroy everything you don't even know why the lord wants it all you want is your pathetic freedom so you used everyone you know to get it even a fellow slave who cares for you despite not knowing your true nature. And Yugi I'm ashamed of you yes you finally see that its quite true of Atemu's immortality but your only seeing a TINY bit of the big picture not only is he cursed he's cursed with loneliness a Lord of Tranquility can hardly call himself such if his life is in utter darkness and despair yet you refuse to see his suffering in full all you see is your stupid duties that your failure to see how much Atemu is doing FOR YOU is abhorring may you know true shame for this Yugi for you have fallen hard in your naiveté and blatant disregard for your fellow man just because you think all dark skins are alike. keep up the great work gtg now JA NE

certainly seems that way huh so both Yugi and Ryou are two of them wonder who else is next guess time will tell keep up the great work gtg now JA NE

it has been over a month since you updated this story..please do not disappoint us and update soon..

What an amazing story. The drama is fantastic, characters on either side of the conflict are well rounded so that neither side is truly more right or wrong than the other. Its perfect. Yuugi's cheating on Atem with Yami was built up well and made you cringe the entire way to know it was soon coming to a head. There were moments where Yuugi felt justified and parts that brought out pity for Atem; it is so well done that although I read this story over a month ago, I still think back to it and recall it easily as one of my favourite moments. I cannot wait to see how the issue resolves itself (or perhaps does not) and that is what excites me most. Your writing is not as perdictable as some and is very refreshing.

well what did you expect Atem and just so you know Sasatheshy I adore your fic cause of how well you've done your characters and so this rant at Atem is to show my appreciation for your work Atem you only have yourself to blame it never occurred to you at all that Yugi was nothing but a lowly servant who was on the verge of being killed till Seth showed up he had nothing knew nothing and was doing the best he could for YOU

then out of nowhere comes this other person who you welcomed with open arms you bedded her constantly talked with her ate with and treated her like she was a welcome but you gave none of that to Yugi for several days then you ordered him to clean and yelled at him what were you afraid that his mannerism would scare your precious lady

and you wonder why he distrusts you all the dark faces he's met have been nothing but brutal and vicious and while you and Seth were the exceptions you didn't take long to treat him like he was only a temporary entertainment

you told him nothing of having to share you and while he didn't object since he feared angering you enough to get hurt its not like he could ignore how he felt either or do you need to be reminded that Salilah left cause she was tired of being the third wheel well how do you think Yugi felt

and now this happens all he wants is for someone to treat him nicely to care for him and while you care for him your actions of late say otherwise

and now because of his moment of weakness he's afraid he's going to lose the only person who ever openly cared about him huh well Sasatheshy this is why I like your work because of how well you made Atem behave in such a callous manner for being the Lord of Tranquility he sure isn't Tranquil you crave a mortal life you want a male lover only but ignored that male lover to keep the longest standing one happy and thus resulted in your split Atem

so again while yes Yugi shouldn't have cheated on you you shouldn't have treated him so callously if he truly is the one you love well keep up the great work gtg now JA NE

this chapter is sad but compelling, beautiful story.

Love, Love this story!!!!

Yep that's right atemu the puzzle was inside Yugi the whole time and you ignored him in favour of saliah while yes his tryst was wrong you ignored Yugi for weeks while she made him horribly uncomfortable and jealous need I remind you his view on your kind is of greedy shallow cruel people and you only solidified that by treating him so lowly if you truly cared plus what right do you have to complain he never did this out of spite but out of loneliness that you created huh well keep up the great work gtg now ja ne