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I really hope you continue and finish the story I love it!

I love how your writing joey. He sounds a lot like the cowardly lion in the wizzard of oz. " why I oughta..."

I'm finding your style of writing very amusing. I do enjoy your POv approach. However u seem to be rushing what u want to say. Since the conscious stream is your foundation u should let us see why joey is so focused on Tea, why Yugi is not. and this is my memmory of the second season when Kaiba Saves Tea from being crushed to death by container at the dockyard he says internally that he has to save Mokubas' friend.what could pull his attention away from Yugi, Wheeler,Mokuba or Kaiba Corp. And even notice Tea. I know u have your story line in your head but u need to put more of it on paper. I admit I do love Tristan'POV! I'm not understanding the whole Serenity thing at all. This devious side of her is out of character, also,since she's several years younger than joey why is she in his high school classes? I hope u can make sense of my feedback. It is refreshing to see Seto attracted to a woman, though I love puppyshipping better.

wow this is really amazing i cant wait for the next chapter <3

This is a very good story, thus far. I can't wait until this story is finished. The story is very well written and I must say I like the change in POV. I think it give an once of perspective that most writes don't put into their stories. I love how you portray Seto Kaiba as both arrogant and protective to a fault, almost. Keep writing and I can't wait for the update on this story.