rate_review Reviews

Hey read your story hope you finish it soon

I cant wait for the next chapter. I hope you update soon!!:-)

more plez

Well I'm glad you're going to update with or without reviews :3 but either way as long as I can I will review you.
Anyway even though this chapter seemed a lot shorter than the other one it was nicly done and I look forward to the next update you post :#

Ah I think I am going to deeply enjoy this story :) But ohhhh that chapter was so shirt! It left me wanting so much more lol. There are a few little typos but nothing major. I wish you luck in finding a beta reader. I am looking forward to more!
And just to let you know, if the mods see your note at the end they will be removing your story. I had something at the bottom asking for reviews just for a vote on one of my stories and the whole story was removed and I was informed that "demanding" reviews for updates was against the rules :P SO you may want to fix that. I would hate to lose this story before it even hit the good parts ;)

I do like this story very much already; however, I do have a few side notes. It's all constructive criticism so please don't think I'm being harsh. I wouldn't be a good reviewer if I didn't point out what I liked or disliked about the story. I really like the whole concept of the story. It's really nice and it's exactly what draws me in. I think the parts that bothered me the most was the beginning and the part where they're about to go to sleep. In the beginning, you put out their descriptions which is fine but I really wish you incorporated their descriptions after some dialogue or description about them getting on the plane and being on the plane because somehow the time frame from when they were on the queue to the time they went to sleep in the plane is sort of out of wack to me. That's probably just me though. Also, I was extremely confused because after you mentioned that they were on a plane, you said "...they all went to their beds." which gave me the impression that they had already landed and were now in a room about to sleep. The way you described them waking up and looking at the wall and ceiling further reinforced this thought. It wasn't until the captain spoke through the speakers that I realized that they were still on the plane.
Besides all that confusion, I thought the chapter was really good and I would really like to see what happens in future chapters.

Not a bad start at all. I really hope you update this soon because it looks promising :3