rate_review Reviews

I enjoyed it. Nicely written, and the "break in the action" (when Asuka says she only has feelings for Juudai) made me smile...then I laughed when it quickly got back to the fucking. As much as I liked it, I want to see some Asuka-dominating-Juuda, rather than her just teasing him while she was playing with herself. Other ideas include a hot springs chapter or maybe simply a shower one. Whenever I read a shower or hot springs lemon, it's interesting because the author always makes sex seem different in both scenarios. I would like to see you depiction of it. Overall, I'm really amused by this fic. :)

Eagerly waiting for the next,
~a Dream~

That's right Yubel, alter Asuka to be even more perfect for Judai to fuck. Can't wait to find out just what she did!

I really enjoyed the last chapter and if I may, I have a suggestion to get Yugi/Mai/Anzu into the story for a chapter.

They come to the island at the invitation of Chansellor Sheppard to discuss Yugi giving the Commensement speech for the upcoming Graduation and while there he gets Judai and Asuka to give Yugi and his entorage a tour of the island. I think you can guide it from there.

Nicely written. I enjoyed this chapter, although your story had many run-on sentences. The lemon portion of the story was really hot. I loved how Yubel took over and just made Juudai *rape* Asuka. Maybe you can make Asuka dominant in the next one...oh, maybe her White Ice Queen side comes out...? :)

Update soon.
~a Dream~

Very good and hot, great job having Yubel make Judai dominate Asuka so aggressively. Now Yubel needs to make Judai steal Asuka's bras, make her "work" to get them back.

Very good I like this. It would be fun if instead of Yubel experiencing things through Jaden she takes over Asuka and seduces him that way giving Asuka the benefit of her experience.

I think my previous review was lost. In any event, I'll say what I did before; Yubel should start using her powers to mess with Asuka's body, especially those big boobs of hers. Just a thought.