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While I have to agree that this chapter wasn't quite like the others in that it's less forceful and more pensive, but it is also totally worth it for the light it sheds on why all this is happening. All stories have a chapter like this to recap a character's state of mind, and I love the fact that even at his fluffiest, your Kaiba is still a psycho (I could squee all over your Kaiba/Mokuba interactions, but I won't here ^_^). The appearance of the OC was slightly abrupt, I thought...a better way to ease her in would have been to mention her during Kaiba's hospital stay just to pique some curiosity, but this is just in my opinion, and I'm not worrying either--you write the better class of OCs :D.

As for the voice, it is less striking in this chapter, and I suppose that can partly be blamed on lack of action. My only critique for this is that while there is information, it is perhaps too little. It's kind of odd seeing Kaiba jump from vengeance in the beginning to emotional wreck here. Knowing that Kaiba doesn't feel bad for much, what he must have done to Jo has to be pretty f-ing bad and that gravity doesn't come across quite as assertively as it could have, based on your writing in general (try your hand at flashbacks?). But what I do love is the sensation that Kaiba seems to be trying not to default to force when dealing with Jo, who is obviously not making it easy. It would be interesting to see where this takes them.
Yeah, those are my two cents and I hope it helps. Thank you for writing, your works are wonderful!

Less ex-cop? I protest! I loved Fixation (stop pimping Grafitti, peoples! Fixation is her best story!) precisely because of the ex-cop! And I'm not sure you need the concrit... you've pretty much given us proof (more than plenty) that you know what you are doing. Trust yourself, woman!

I love this story so far - was put off by the prologue at first but the following chapters more than mare up for it. I adore your grim dark moody cop gangster stories.

Milly

OMG!! I actually missed two updates >.< Damned computer dying on me!!!
I'm loving this. It actually took a nice turn after what I was imagining xD Please do continue~

Thank you soooooooooooooo much!!!! and I love you hahahaha, love the chapter, looks like our puppy was brainwashed, poor Seto is going to be a very "hard" work to help him and maybe Jou will start asking himself if his dragon (because he still loves him even if he doesn't want or can't admit it yet) would feel like a girl hehehehe. Thank you so much for sharing, we know you are busy but thank you for giving us one more chapter. Love the story, take care and hope to read you soon.

I love your stories, they are all so... I don't know how to describe them... twisted?

I'm not sure that's the best way to describe them, but I love them anyway.

I look forward to reading how Seto can bring Jou around. (Assuming that he can...)

"This is not healthy, Seto" = understatement of the year?!?! Seto is always incredibly fucked up in your fics, but I think this one takes the prize. He has not thought this through as well as he thinks he has. Jou scares me. Where is my blond bundle of joy? The blank look frightens me. Though Seto does scare me more..

You know honey, I usually don't like dark stories but I love your style, your stories are amazing and captivating, can't wait to read what is next and can't wait to read "how" Seto is going to bring some life again to his puppy eyes mmmmm... "he wouln't feel anything like a girl in bed" no Seto, anything like a girl! and I know you are going to love exploring "all" the differences! *shivers* Thank you so much for sharing, take care ok and read you soon. =)

Wow. I can't believe how awesome it is! Can't wait for next update!

hope the bunnie bounce helped workout the kinks ... or maybe put a few more kinks in depending on how you want to look at it ... lol. Can't wait to see what happens next with either/both boys.

This is fantastic. It's awesome and I just adore your style, dark stories are indeed better :) (Why, yes I'm twisted like that.) I can't wait to read more!