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for Waking up the next Morning...

by radkoko35

person Milly
schedule June 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm getting used to read a caring Kaiba and I love it. Yay for Joey being a hardworking student!

The only little detail I'd like to point out is the repetition of the word 'Jou' in the paragraph starting by "They sat in silence, the mute room eating away at Jou’s sanity..." But I do it all the time, too! Teehee
person Milly
schedule June 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the super sweet story! I hope you write more, and I'm looking forward to the sequel =D
schedule June 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I did enjoy this story. I'm one for few words when it comes to reviewing, but I thought you'd like to know that I liked it. ^_^
schedule May 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love it so far. Let's see how it plays out for Seto and Joey.
schedule May 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
That was hot and sweet! I love it!!
person Chiken89
schedule May 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
You're doing wonderfully. I really hope you do continue on with the story, I really do enjoy it very much.
person Chiken89
schedule April 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Your story is great. It has a great basis and plot. But your chapters are a bit short. It would help to elaborate. I do realize it's really hard to do it. But besides that I really do enjoy your story. please do continue!!

schedule April 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Woooow... I don't think it was possible but.... the smut sucked. You suck at writing smut. The rest of it was ...ok but... no. Sorry. I only Speak the truth. Practice (with more detail) and watch porn (for variations) it might help you get better.