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This is still to date one of my favorite fics of all time that I reread over and over again.

This fic just- I link all my friends to it! It's great! I wish there was more :c

oh my, please continue this! I made an account just to ask for more of this!

Yay! Smutastic! I hope I don't end up spam reviewing, AFF is beign funky. Also I am horrible for not reviewing this sooner I couldn't log in XD
Anyway I do hope you update this soon :3

Ok, so this story is basically made of pure awesome. I LOVE it. Ryou makes such a lovely little slave.

*Is a complete pile of mush* I loved this chapter! I guess I'm just a huge sap, but I always enjoy a story more when there's emotional depth, it helps me feel more connected to the characters (And the smut was also really hot, Ryou you little pro you ;3 ).

I hope I didn't come off as rude before, I was just hoping that I could prod your brain a little and see if I could get you thinking about the story in other ways if you wished to. Regardless as far as most Master/Slave stories go, you still seem quite a bit better then most I've read so far. Yes, its a fantasy story and based solely on fantasy but most are purely gratuitous sadism with angst thrown in for drama and all read exactly the same to me. The fact that even at the beginning you showed things from Ryou's POV and showed his own hidden desires, instead of making him a cookie-cutter victim in this story is what kept me reading. Also I like how that now that things have begun to leveled out between Bakura and Ryou you are starting to build on their interactions and their character development. Keep writing, I'm really excited to see what else you have up your sleeve!

Very very hot, can't really complain about the smut. However while I realize that this is a (sex) fantasy fic, the complete lack of emotion on either Ryou or Bakura's ends keeps me from enjoying this as much as I could. Its not bad, it just seems very two-dimensional. Human's are social animals and have emotional needs that need to be met, and while it would be ridiculous for there to be any love or trust at this point, the complete lack of real feeling makes the story feel a little flat to me. Not going to even bother going into things like contracts, safe words, and signing yourself out of an insane asylum if you feel like it, but if you ever do consider adding more emotional depth to this story, I'd like to point out that Doms are only as powerful as their partners make them. In that particular life style its the 'submissive' ones that make the real rules. You could almost wonder who really is the slave in some cases. The bottom breaks the tops 'rules' and they are 'punished' (which may be why they were broken in the first place) the top breaks the Rules and the game is over.

Allow me to add that I don't feel sorry for Ryou as much as I feel sorry for Bakura. Ryou is in a place where he can easily have his new needs met. It was already stated that Bakura is extremely... Eager. And very impatient. All Ryou has to do is act like a good little pet and look fuckable. Bakura is coming off like he's been incredibly isolated by other humans, what with his needs seeming to debilitate him as far as normal human interaction goes, plus he was thrown forcefully into an asylum, and that's not something random joe can have done, so someone close to him probably had a big hand in that. On top of that he was put in solitary. Even the worse criminals are allowed human interaction provided they behave, and solitary only lasts so long.(Bakura seemed like his punishment was indefinite.) Thats because its really important to human health. So Bakura has quite literally been starved of things he needs as a human to survive. And as for Not feeling sorry for Ryou? If he Really wants to get back at Bakura, all he has to do is endure. He can keep 'misbehaving' so Bakura will be forced to punish him, leaving both of them deprived, and even if Bakura gets nasty, Ryou, unlike Bakura is not 'starved' so he could be incredibly cold and ignore/shut Bakura out, leaving him deprived again. Subs may not have the physical advantage, but they certainly have the emotional. I wasnt kidding when I said they decide just how big (or small) their Doms are.

I just read the whole thing. Love it! I really like the training. The maid outfit would be really cute. I think Bakura is being too nice and letting Ryou come entirely too often. Maybe he should use a chastity device, really make Ryou work for it.

Alright visitors! I'm so glad your out of hiatus (even though I only discovered this two weeks ago). I really enjoy the plot of this and I look forward to an update.