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You have no idea how happy I was to see a new chapter of this.

That is much more like an ending. It rounded the story off beautifully. ^_^

Nice to see Mokuba get his just desserts.

*lmao!* Haha! Take that Mokuba! You little rat bastard. (Seriously, he needed to be punished. He's lucky he's not MY little brother, because I probably would have gone ahead and sent him to those alternatives, plus Antarctica and then, I would have made him ride the Small World ride like... 50 times. Because I am both cruel and unusual. *lol*)

Ah, the lives of the rich and the famous...

I really like this, it's much darker and more expeditive than the rest of the Fixation chapters. It actually feels like the dawn of a brand new story, so you definitely have to keep writing, and not let us hanging there!

At any rate thank you for writing this. It's one of my favorite stories on the whole website.

Milly

Good chapter. I love it. I can't believe I missed it before.

Good chapter. I hope Seto will stop physically abusing him soon.

I am still in awe and gratitude before this story. Thousand thanks for sharing it.

I'm in the process of reading this for the second time. That's just how good it is.

I can appreciate this so much more now. I love how you hint right at the beginning how Mokuba actually is very smart. And the action flows in so well. Be blessed.

Well it is now 6:30 am and I have managed to get through this in one entire day. I did Graffiti a couple days earlier. It's hard for me to write a review for a fic that has 50 or 90 reviews already. I feel like anything I try to say, you've probably already heard several times over.

I sincerely hope you enter the creative writing field and get paid for your work. I work in publishing and you are definitely good enough to be published. The problems I have with this story would be easily fixed (or semi-easily at least) with a firm editor going over your work. And a lot of that I see you've already improved on with Graffiti.

The biggest disappointment I have with this is the ending, and the fact that your antagonist "got away with it" so to speak. It just leaves an unsatisfying end to the whole thing, especially as we the readers have all come to associate ourselves with your main character, Jounouchi, who was so adamant about bringing Mokuba to justice and then suddenly just gave up and ran in the last chapter. However, I can certainly see your delema. The options you had was for him to either be killed and thus be stuck as a martyr character, spend the rest of his life in prison for 60 murders, or "get away with it." I was terrified you were actually going to kill him off, actually, which would have just done me in (cuz I'm a hopelessly romantic girly girl who believes in the power of brotherly love and all that, I admit it!). And I'm sure a lot of other readers feel the same, as well. Haha, you seem to have written yourself into a corner here, making your antagonist such a sympathetic and integral character! Your readers will accept a lot of slack for a character they like THAT much, but at some point most people are going to step back and say that some things are just too much. I do like how you hinted Kaiba is going to deal with him after they get back, but it's just not enough to satisfy the readers after the entire last quarter of the story is about Jounouchi besting Mokuba and not giving up his morals even for the person he loves.

Also wanted to point out I have a friend with Aspergers and your depiction of it is very realistic. As realistic as a fanfiction about a show with dueling card games can get anyway lol. So tip of my hat to you for that!

Please keep writing. The world could stand to have more stuff like this in it.

ch 10: And you write fight scenes too? is there no end to your talents? :)