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October 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
that was great
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July 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
a perfect ending to a wonderful story.
*sniffle*
this will be one of my rereads for many years to come ;3
*sniffle*
this will be one of my rereads for many years to come ;3
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July 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Whoot! alright! Teary ending avoided! A million kudo points for you! ^_^
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April 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the better AU stories that I have read. Especially a JouxSeto pairing. Hope you update soon so I can see what happens next.
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April 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Edge of my seat, edge of my seat! ooooh thank you for the long chapter! I am just DYING to see how it all turns out!
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April 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the story. At first I was uncertain about this story but it is every entertaining. Unfortunately I fear our dear Seto is going to have a bad end. If that is the case *sobs* my uncertainty was well founded. The one thing that saves that is the lack of Character Death in the warnings. Could be an oversight, but if you kill off a main character it should be in the warnings. I don't read ANY stories that contain Character Death in the warnings unless it specifies OC or NOT OUR BISHI's. I've always wondered, why kill off our babes?
I'm sorta hoping that the deliberate lack of mention of females in Seto's world means his people are males and can get preggers (lol) to explain his illness, and yep a 'father' that died in childbirth without his mate is kinda where I was leaning. Even the mention of his 'mother' is ambiguous. But THAT would carry an Mpreg warning. >.<
Ah well, your choice of course. :) I will wait like the good little reader I am. But I wanted to thank you again for the entertainment.
Maggiemay
I'm sorta hoping that the deliberate lack of mention of females in Seto's world means his people are males and can get preggers (lol) to explain his illness, and yep a 'father' that died in childbirth without his mate is kinda where I was leaning. Even the mention of his 'mother' is ambiguous. But THAT would carry an Mpreg warning. >.<
Ah well, your choice of course. :) I will wait like the good little reader I am. But I wanted to thank you again for the entertainment.
Maggiemay
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April 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Uh oh, oh please tell me Mokuba won't disapprove, Poor Seto! and I hope you are feeling worlds better. only three left? seriously? you seem to have so much to wrap up in such a short amount of time. I eagerly await the next!
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March 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ooooh getting mokuba, good idea. And YAY for the two of them finally getting back together! Four chapters.... gah those words are bittersweet. I love it when stories get finished... but it's rather sad at the same time. I await the next update eagerly!
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March 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ooooh the suspense is gonna KILL me!!! *on the edge of her seat* will Seto be ok? will they get back together? Can they prevent the war? will they defeat Gozaburo? Can you possibly answer all of these questions and finish this plot with so few chapters left?!?!
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March 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'd like to start by saying that your story is refreshingly original and your character and plot development are fantastic. I'm quite hooked on this fic and anxiously await updates (I do hope Seto isn't going to die). However, I must say that I think your grammar and even your vocabulary need some work.
As a visually disabled person I tend to let my narration software read the fics to me, and if the grammar and such is off, the system has a very hard time making heads or tails of it. This makes it extremely difficult to enjoy and I usually won't bother.
Well, your spelling was good enough that the system could read it quite easily, but your vocabulary; choice of words and phrasing, etc., was very...questionable? Normally I wouldn't have bothered to continue, but I was so taken by the story that I turned off the narrator, moved my chair to within 3 feet of the TV screen, zoomed it out to 200% and read it myself.
You have a lot of talent, obviously, and I hope to read more from you, but (and please don't take this the wrong way) you might want to look up some of the bigger words in the dictionary first. Many of them aren't being used correctly or are used in the wrong context.
Thank you, and I'm looking forward to reading more very soon.
As a visually disabled person I tend to let my narration software read the fics to me, and if the grammar and such is off, the system has a very hard time making heads or tails of it. This makes it extremely difficult to enjoy and I usually won't bother.
Well, your spelling was good enough that the system could read it quite easily, but your vocabulary; choice of words and phrasing, etc., was very...questionable? Normally I wouldn't have bothered to continue, but I was so taken by the story that I turned off the narrator, moved my chair to within 3 feet of the TV screen, zoomed it out to 200% and read it myself.
You have a lot of talent, obviously, and I hope to read more from you, but (and please don't take this the wrong way) you might want to look up some of the bigger words in the dictionary first. Many of them aren't being used correctly or are used in the wrong context.
Thank you, and I'm looking forward to reading more very soon.