rate_review Reviews

an excellent first chapter to what i'm sure will develop into an intriguing story. i hope you continue this!

I'm glad to see another story from you! I love reading your work! I do hope you continue, it is a good idea, and the story seems strong so far.

But just FYI, from where you introduced the boy who witnessed the event, until the end where the raiders were leaving, the story got muddled. I couldn't keep it straight who's POV I was reading, or what all was their reasoning for their actions even though I tried reading it through a few times. I'm sure it's easily fixable, but I thought I should point it out.

I truly would like to see more of this story, Atemu's character is deep and strong and most definitely 'squee' worthy.

omg this sounds good, very intriguing, would absolutly love hear the rest, please please continue.

Oh Please Continue Soon Thank You!

Oh my gosh! I love this story. Beautiful descriptions and a very intense beginning full of action and slight scenes of foreshadowing which I won't attempt to try to guess until a few more chapters. I'm very curious on where you're going to go with this even though I have a slight clue but I'll keep that to myself, and hope and pray that you continue. You have a beautiful way of keeping the characters close to how they acted in the series and managed to use the best wording for the time period. Wonderfully written story. I can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you for having Bakura and Marik good again. I've read your other stories and thoroughly enjoyed them just as much as I enjoyed this one. Keep going! I'm loving it. Lovely title for the story. You always come up with great titles. It leaves a lot of the imagination.