rate_review Reviews

^^ Hello again, glad to say I spent the whole day reading almost non-stop : ) Great story, I'll be sure to keep up with it :p And I can tell that the way it was written improved throughout the story but you should definitely get someone to look it over for you, it could make it worlds better. >.> And if I do say so, your lemons are wonderfully wicked though I recommend spreading them out or at least not having so many so close together (I found myself skipping them when there were several close together) Trying to be honest but not mean, you're definitely an author for me to watch ~Naomie

:) I'm always thrilled to find a new story, and it's only better to find one with actual length. I can tell you've put a lot of effort into it just by that fact alone. But I'm here to say that you can definitely grow in terms of a writer, the story is nice, original enough, and has definitely left plenty of things to build upon so I'm sure I'll be well entertained. I can't help myself from thinking of better ways to word things in your story as I read it. I don't know if you have someone else edit for you or if you simply re-read it on your own but maybe you should try getting someone else's opinion on the matter. But a lot of things about the way you depict the characters makes them seem a bit inhuman, for example- would a friend really leave Yugi to his own devices so easily? And right after the discovery of his deceased grandfather? Try not to take any offense from what I've said, I intend on reading this one through but I definitely feel that you can improve immensly. Excitedly reading more. ~Naomie, Feel free to contact me if you'd like any help or suggestions.

I got to read the un-cut one. Great work by the way.

Great story on vampires. Could you please do a sequal? I would like to know the answers to my questions that I had asked awhile ago. Like what happened to malik's dad? Who was the one who wanted to torture Yuugi with the Chinese Water Torture that Pegasus did? What happened to Ushio? Did he stop torturing other teenagers smaller than himself or did he transfer out of the school into another one? Ryou's dad can't expect his son to suddenly change his ways because he said so.

Great story. I forgot to ask. What happened to Joey and Seto? Didn't they come back? Did Seto change Joey into a vampire? What kind of technology would be advanced? Please do a sequal. When you have the time of course.

nice story.

Totally totally AWESOME.... PLEASE PLEASE update soon... ^_^

i absoulutley love it
it has rekindled my love of Vampires
Thank you thank you thank you

if i could i would send my plushie army of appreciation to thank you

and nowthat i have sounded like a complete fool i will go hide in embarresment

I hope you update this until you are caught up. I wnat to see the too hot for ff.net

awewsome i found you^_^
too bad about the fanfic. rules but it's good you could come here.
-s.o