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My first impression of this was how quick paced and interesting Marik and Bakura's scene was. Descriptive and a great story opener... However I don't agree with how Ryou acts. Your writing style in smooth and I generally like how your characterize everyone but perhaps you could work on Ryou a little? One he is a male, and just because he likes guys and is pretty doesn't mean he automatically thinks and acts like a girl, two I really don't like the message your sending. No one should keep quite about a rape threat. I'm sorry if this comes off as blunt or even rude but if nothing else I don't think you are doing your own writing skill justice by falling back on the overused Feminine Victim Ryou cliche. I can tell by what I've read so far that you can do so much more. Please keep writing.

love this fic, and a prequel AND a sequel would be awesome *greedy*

okies, this chapter could NOT have been given a double chapter. it deserves its own. anyway...I LOVED IT MORE THAN ANY OTHER CHAPTER!! Sexy fighting, blood licking, tendershipping moment, the parts that scream ROTLMFAO! i loved it all.

Loved these chapters too!! ^~^

Just because it'll be apsolutly amazing, and fun as well, you should make a sequal with atem (yami) being one of the oldest vampires coming to japan, meeting with those four, bonding with them and bringing little yugi in the mix, and yami's presence becomes a threat to the general, so the general gets together with some others at his level, and those who may or may not have drove yami out, depending on how you want to add him, and bring forth a war.

If not, oh well...

I loved the and I'm glad i got to read it completed, as many authors don't finish their work, one should write for their pleasure, even if no one like it, and i hope to read more of your work in the future.

OH. MY. GOD. I. FUCKING. LOVE. THIS. STORY. But seing as i have only read up to chapter 4, i would say chapter 4 is my FAVOURITE so far. SO FAR!!! This story makes me happy...^_^
GOOD JOB! :D

Ok, chapters 5 and 6 were great and judging by the 'Sire' thing about draining blood and replacing it with vampire blood and this line > “Yes, we were together as humans, but he ran away from me when he was forcefully turned to become a bed slave to a vampire general. I tracked him down and made him turn me. We then combined our strengths and freed him, to be together again.” i take it you have read Darren Shan's Cirque Du Freak? it sounds a lot like what Mr.Crepsley did to Darren, but this might just be a co-winky-dink. anywho, LOVING IT! Now for the next chapters...*digs nails into desk and takes wood out of it while reading* "this is the shit right here!" ^_^

SKEE!**hug** Nice finish
J-chan

I could so see Ryou there on the ground on top of Marik kissing him like that ^.^ hehe and he finally got his little revenge on those guys, go Ryou, though I didn’t find that at all dark of Ryou as they did give him such a hard time.

I am sad to see this story end so soon, I was hoping for a few more chapters –sighs- but on a good note you are doing more of my most favorite pairing, YAY! And let’s not mention that YOU have inspired me somewhat as well for future chapters for my fics, so thank you and gratz on finishing your first fic/story, I think you did really well and I loved it lots, hoping to see another update of something from you soon, Later (Hugs)

Absolutely AWESOME ending! I loved it all the way! And down the pipeline... I want all of them! They sound great! *huggles* thank you for finishing this story! I love you I love you I love you!

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