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Sal, I'm enjoying this. It's not as esoteric as your other pieces, and the imagery is minimal, which is quite different from the other two. However, (and please don't hate me. . . ) I hope you won't decide that you've had enough of this story and cut it off in midstream just to write the end, which is the feeling I was left with in 3 Days Grace and The Claiming Rite. Both endings came as shocks to the system as they came out of nowhere. Don't get me wrong, the Claiming Rite ending was a good ending, just out of nowhere, but the 3 Days Grace ending, well really left things up in the air.

As to this chapter. . .

Wherever Seto is, he asked Mokuba to come to him. Not to save him, but to come to him, and that he'd know where he is. . . Personally I get the feeling he is dead and that Mokuba is going to end up in some virtual world his brother created. Something is just not right with Yami, and I personally would rather trust Bakura. At least you know where you stand with that nutcase.

So here's hoping Mokuba gets out of the basement and finds Seto and that a solution is in sight.
bahen

Good chapter. I hope they find him soon. Mokuba is desparate.

Good chapter. I'm glad that Seto got the rod, the question is now what will he do with it. I hope he remains on their side.

I hope Mokuba settles down before one of the Yamis hurt him. I hope they can find Seto soon. Mokuba really needs him even if he doesn't think he does. Good chapter.

Sorry to disappoint you Sal, but there are answers here. Now the question is are they truthful answers. . . Is Malik involved? The others follow Yugi like sheep, but Mokuba asks questions, is that why they've locked him up, because he has the capability of finding the answers?

Yami is evil, and at the moment I wouldn't trust him an inch. His attitude toward's Seto and Mokie are disturbing to say the least. What is he trying to hide?

And lastly, what do you mean you are restarting? When is that going to happen?

Till the next chapter,
bahen

Don't think Mokuba was acting weak in this chapter at all. Considering that the people he trusted 'appear' to be the people involved in 'something' not right, he is doing amazingly well. Yami seems to be a slightly modified throw back of Season 0. Not quite a nutty psycho, but not the peaceful Pharoah either. If he is the reason Kaiba was kidnapped, hope we get to see some answers this time around.

looking foward to the next update.
bahen

Don't quite understand what is happening here. Has Mokuba been moved by magical means to somewhere in the Kaiba mansion? And was it Yami questioning him and walking away disappointed? Love your style for the most part, but really would love a few blanks filled in as I continually feel I am missing the point/plot.

Mokuba knows he needs help, but doesn't want it at the same time - typical. And yet he knows that Yugi and gang will back him up no matter what. A clever boy, but still needs to grow up. . .

Here is hoping for some answers next time around. . .
bahen

Good chapter. I hope that is not someone there to kidnap him. Mokuba should ask for help. Even Seto needs help on occasion.

Good chapter. I'm glad Mokuba didn't get hurt.

So, as per normal, there is more to this than meets the eye, and the mysterious someone is after Mokuba as well. . . interesting.

Like your use of Honda. It's nice to see him, not on the side lines for a change and perhaps in this story he plays a more major role.

Really nothing else to say at this time, but will look forward to the next update.
bahen