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I hope your still working on this story, I just came across it today and im curious to see how its going go end.

This story is so sweet. Please update soon.

I love this story...please update...Im dying to know what happens! ^_^

What a lovely Yami/Yugi fic you have here! I'm a sucker for romancy fics but everything here is a bit...lemony XD. I do have a bit of advice for you though, I hope I dont sound rude or critical. Though I do love this, it was a bit hard to read at times. The sentences are too long and the descriptions are too much. Its one thing to paint a picture in the readers mind but if it's used excessively it becomes distracting and redundant. You use a lot of descriptive words in succession. I recommend toning it down to the necessary. I also notice yo like complicated words( which i learned the hard way) is only good in moderation ^_^ Also, try not to over use words like 'Amethyst, cherise etc as you use them way too much to describe their eyes. I think that was the most distracing part. Anyway, looking foward to more sweet loveliness ;)

Riddim Mistress~

Good chapter. Poor Yami can't see the jealousy in Yuugi. I hope he realises what it is soon.

Poor yami. I hope he figures this out soon. Yuugi must be really suffering from all this.

I hope that makes him see. Tea needs to be gone from even their very thoughts. They need to be together.