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...wow. Did NOT see the whole transferring consciousness thing coming at all. ^_^; It reminds me a bit of The Skeleton Key, only this doesn't scare the crap out of me. Then again, most horror movies do that to me. Anyhow. I'm so proud of Jou for deliberately cutting his meds in half like that! I really really hope this works out for the best. I do wonder how Rebecca would feel if she knew the truth.. I hope she finds out by the end of this fic. Keep up the great work!

Can wait for more ^^

well I just wanted to tell you you write just fine...It remindes me of youre beta's style of writing Rroselavy I remember one of his story (if it takes me forever I will find you)...(something like that!!)but youre fic has less passion in it....that's the only low point I see .we readers have to picture every thing we read and youre good with the details...like in this chapter you shoew seto's sharpness and intelligence that's when I think this is what seto whould do,set up a plan to figure out the truth.but you don't show his emotions clearly.thats a link you know.to join every part of story in every chapter. when we know peopl's feeling we know why they do things...use methods like mind talking or dreams or something....like what you did in the last paragraph of chapter 1. you can use youre own words for showing romance...but don't overdo it...me myself I never write a story I just read too much...but trust me I've read enough to know youre work is great...it just has to get to it's balance....don't rush some parts and then slow down on some other parts...like the way you wrote about jou loesing his memories and all...you freed most of the story with seto's discoveries witch you could kept them as secrets and let him find a little bit of truth in every chapter slowly....with adding a little exitment to youre story (specially in youre last paragraph of every chapter)you can turn youre story from truly beautiful to completly perfect...what I really like bout youre writing is mostly youre choice of wocablary and the lenth of every chapter...and ofcourse you've done a graet job in creating an original story using charachters with theire own identity and personality(specially in seto's case) what he does in this fiction is exactly what real seto whould do I like youre seto very much...romance is not his thing but you can show what he hides from the world inside of himself that shoes his pride and self control......his inner voice and his love for jou....keep this up and you'll end up making people thinking ...and that's what a fanfic is about....I personally want to use my mind and try to findout what I think not what the writer thinks......and that's when the writer does the bettr job than my thouths in the next chapter... that's when it shows the writer is a good one......and you have written the secend chapter better than my thoughs.....i usually just want to read because I have a boaring life..I don't like to give people advises but I thought you could use some of this .......what ever you do just update soon....i want to know where this fic is going.and I want to know how much you go better than my thouths in the next chapter....love kisa

Holy hell! Go Seto! Gut that mother fucker!

Really? Maggiemay-sama's sister? Truly awesome...*bows low to great ones*...I love this story...cannot really picture Jou with short hair, though, thats a hard one...loved the whole idiot language talk...Seto is too funny...cannot wait to see him kick Joey the first' ass...catti

ahhhhhh.god that was wondeful....this chapter was so nice and it kills me when they kissed...now you see youre a born writer....god Ican't wait to read the rest update as fast as you can .... you really good like youre sister....tell her I'm sorry I never updated for none of her story I just read them but now if she only update I promise I won't be an ass !!!

I'm also a member of Dragons Liar and searched for your story. I was so sad, I couldn't find it. ;_;
I love this story and can't wait to see Seto start the real ass kick'n. Please update soon!

I'm so sorry I gave you the wrong impression at first, I didn't mean it! :hugs: But no, I am LOVING this story. I hadn't ever read any of the original manga, and the only thing I've been exposed to of the anime is just the stuff they've aired on TV, so.. I guess they did a great job on phasing out the lethal part of his personality. XD I applaud Seto for being as strong as he is with "Joey" right now, because I don't think I could stand it. Heh. But I suppose that's why he's the big bad CEO and I'm just a college kid. ^_^; Much love for this story, I can't wait for the next update!

(Also, I accidentally read one of the other shout outs to someone else, and that's horrible of people to do that to your sister! I had no idea that was the situation, because I will absolutely go back and rate Sapphire Queen again. I rated it once when I first started reading it - I don't usually rate them after each chapter. She's one of the main reasons I got into Yugioh fanfic.)

Wow this seems to be almost too easy, but I like it because it means that there'll be no pointless chapters that I see too much when people try to do a drama this but have no skill. You have skill. three chapters and I am rivited!

Keep up the good work!

i am glad to see seto trying to help joey back, please update soon