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by undercoverme

person 1enchantedgirl
schedule June 29, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I think u did a great job with this. I do wish u had taken a little more time with the ending. I'm very curious as to the new relationships with joey rebecca and becca and how that will affect the wheeler company, as well as how rebecca adjusts to her new body and her mental age. I look forward to reading more of your work. I am a huge fan of your beta's and of course maggiemay. I also came across a storey written by your neice...what a talented gene pool!I know u wrote this a million years ago but I wanted to let u know that your work is still being read.
person Anon
schedule July 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ahh oh man oh man oh man. I read Jou Cool a few days back and saw this story on your profile and decided for reading it later. Only I completely forgot about it. Luckily I found it again.
There's so much awesomeness in it, but I surely don't have to tell ya, probably hundreds of reviewers already did this. So I'll content myself in commenting just one very simple scene: VR Kaiba's clothes changes.
Okay, I smiled at the boxers; laughed at the dog suit... but the Marilyn dress was too much. I thought I wasn't gonna recover to finish reading it. And it's all your fault that I can now perfectly picture Seto Kaiba in a white dress. As for the... tight outfit... I wish someone had drawn a fanart.
I don't remember what I said in the review for Jou Cool, but I probably thanked you for an amazing story and a few entertaining hours.
I'm aware you have yet another story, and I'm looking forward to reading that one too, but maybe tomorrow since I skipped sleeping today reading this one.
I don't care if you don't even use this website anymore, I just had to tell you all this, somehow. And I should say much more, but I'm too sleepy.
Thanks!
person YugiTheCutie
schedule November 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i like it! wished u liked mine uu ^^ mokuba is so cute!
schedule July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow! this story was incredible. I love it! Seto was really impressive for all he have done to find Jou. This love between them is so sweet. And when Seto invited Jou to the japanese restaurant and was so happy to have Jou for him again...it was simply so touching. Poor Jou! I'm happy for what happened to his grandfather at the end of the story. He really deserves that. As for the scene with God, it was great and unexpected! I loved this scene^^
You are very talented. Can't wait for your next puppyshipping story^^
schedule June 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A-ha! I found the end of your little story here. LOL

And I liked very much how Seto cherished Jou in such incredible way. *winks*

Good one!!! And I reallywnat to see that little story from Jou you posted the tease...

Kissus!
person lokivsanubis
schedule June 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
2 great stories in one week... what am i going to do without my boys around? Hurry and get to the other life times... LOL... Can't wait for your next stuff.

Lokivsanubis
schedule June 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great last chapter! The lemon was hott, and I just LOVE they way Becca is punishing him using his body to be with another guy. How ftting, the bastard should suffer. Wonderful story!
person Wicabeth
schedule June 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mmmm, beautiful, hot lemon there, hon. And the necklace just tugged at my hopeless romantic heartstrings.

I was dying to see what you planned for this chapter XD
schedule June 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*sob* *sob* What a fabulous ending! I'm all mushy with love!! It's been a great story overall. A wonderful, emotional, well-written romp. And like I said before, I suck at reviwing, so I apologize for not saying anything until now, but know that you are definately one of my favorite writers and I can't wait to read more of your stories.

*glomptackles*
*snugs*
*prays you are better*
'Ko
person catti
schedule June 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Domo arigatou for the lemon...and may maggiemay-sama sensai be well...catti