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July 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE so pretty
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July 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
~*~*I LOVE THIS FIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!IT HAS BECOME ONE OF MY ALL TIME FAV Yu-Gi-Oh fanfic EVER!!!!~*~*VERY GOOD!
You are a VERY AMAZING author!!!!Keep It Up!
I wonder when Seto and Jou gonna FINALLY get together?? The suspense is KILLING ME!! UPDATE SOON!!!!!~*~*
LOVE THIS FIC!!!^-^~*~*
You are a VERY AMAZING author!!!!Keep It Up!
I wonder when Seto and Jou gonna FINALLY get together?? The suspense is KILLING ME!! UPDATE SOON!!!!!~*~*
LOVE THIS FIC!!!^-^~*~*
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July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I love the evolution of this story. It is good to see that Seto is finally admitting his feelings for Jou. The dreams are really good and very well written (and hot^^). I really do like this story. Update!!!!!!!
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE just lee[s getting better keep going!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ooooo!!! I know where you got that second dream sequence from! It's one of my most beloved dounjinshis and I recognized it right away. I've never gotten around to reviewing before but I wanted to let you know you're doing an amazing job. Your work is gorgeous and I love to see what you have in store each day for our boys.
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July 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay! what good story! I like it very much. I have discovered and read the entire 33 chapters in only 2 days. I love the evolution of the relation between Seto and Jou. Can't wait to see what will happen next to our favourite couple. The idea of the potion is really great^^. And By the way, I loved the half-lemon that happened in a couple of chapters ago. It was hot. And poor Jou! he hurts himself because of that. Really cute^^
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July 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love it!! update again soon!
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Just read chapter one: I like it but....
You set up the chapter without telling us who this "he" is being obviously vague. I assume then that by the telling of the drink strategy this character is random and inadvertently sets up our couple. (I first assumed it was one of the two... but then the drink strategy blew that assumption.)
Then you have Jou randomly at Seto's house waiting on him in good terms (yes, obviously not much strife between the two disregarding pet names). And I do say randomly, no hints are left for the reader to follow, no logic is explained in random character thought. They are just..... together getting along.... randomly.
I really enjoyed this line: “I told you… I was wearing them, and I fell down the stairs…” Really well done.
The tea part was really obvious... but WHY jou wants seto to love him to this desperate bid (in which he believes seto already cares somewhat for him... I suppose because Jou's allowed in his presence right?)
I did not like how Jou knew what his prescription was off the top of his head ("Oh, that prescription I know I'm not gonna be able to use, yeah I memorized it" though this is because I wear glasses and don't recall my prescription... and I actually get new pairs so it was self-based and based on the fact that Jou isn't the most ..... number retaining character)
So I like it,but a few things I wanted to point out.
You set up the chapter without telling us who this "he" is being obviously vague. I assume then that by the telling of the drink strategy this character is random and inadvertently sets up our couple. (I first assumed it was one of the two... but then the drink strategy blew that assumption.)
Then you have Jou randomly at Seto's house waiting on him in good terms (yes, obviously not much strife between the two disregarding pet names). And I do say randomly, no hints are left for the reader to follow, no logic is explained in random character thought. They are just..... together getting along.... randomly.
I really enjoyed this line: “I told you… I was wearing them, and I fell down the stairs…” Really well done.
The tea part was really obvious... but WHY jou wants seto to love him to this desperate bid (in which he believes seto already cares somewhat for him... I suppose because Jou's allowed in his presence right?)
I did not like how Jou knew what his prescription was off the top of his head ("Oh, that prescription I know I'm not gonna be able to use, yeah I memorized it" though this is because I wear glasses and don't recall my prescription... and I actually get new pairs so it was self-based and based on the fact that Jou isn't the most ..... number retaining character)
So I like it,but a few things I wanted to point out.
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June 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter2
Okay.... Jou as a random person invades seto's office but he's pretty okay with it and is chummy enough with jou to ask his prescription even though they aren't even technically "friends"? AND got all threatening about jou's safety. Like, possessive (this really led me to believe there was more than what was happening going on between the two).
And is it me or are seto's dreams leaning dangerously towards itemizing jou ... not loving him. Like the orange thing, that was awesome, why nodody's done that... I don't know. But then the collar and barking.... unhealthy dreams (which could be just him being cocky superior but he's... not. He's not in your story so it's sorta creepy.)
I like the breakfast, that was cute.
Chapter three
Why is his name kakashi... randomly japanese. An old man no less so yes that's he's a perfectly english speaking japanese. (my beef is the character name)
Anyway, I hope the information Jou is imparting in seto's dreams are not accurate and is just his imagination.
There seems to be no development between the characters since the first chapter in which you neglected important information to understand there was character development. Ie, it's just them bouncing off of one another (if they are noth together) without linking any actions or self's.
Okay.... Jou as a random person invades seto's office but he's pretty okay with it and is chummy enough with jou to ask his prescription even though they aren't even technically "friends"? AND got all threatening about jou's safety. Like, possessive (this really led me to believe there was more than what was happening going on between the two).
And is it me or are seto's dreams leaning dangerously towards itemizing jou ... not loving him. Like the orange thing, that was awesome, why nodody's done that... I don't know. But then the collar and barking.... unhealthy dreams (which could be just him being cocky superior but he's... not. He's not in your story so it's sorta creepy.)
I like the breakfast, that was cute.
Chapter three
Why is his name kakashi... randomly japanese. An old man no less so yes that's he's a perfectly english speaking japanese. (my beef is the character name)
Anyway, I hope the information Jou is imparting in seto's dreams are not accurate and is just his imagination.
There seems to be no development between the characters since the first chapter in which you neglected important information to understand there was character development. Ie, it's just them bouncing off of one another (if they are noth together) without linking any actions or self's.
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee tjhis is getting so cute!!!!
poor jou lol but that was really funny
poor jou lol but that was really funny