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November 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The storyline was good...but you need to work on your grammar - a few full stops wouldn't hurt. Progressed a little fast, but I like the way you showed the character's feelings. Like the idwa, but it's just the structure and the punctuation that needs some improvements.
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November 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The story was good i like the way you displayed their feelings towards each other and I'm hoping that i get to see more chapters of this story cause i can tell its going to be good oh yeah and the title i don't know how you came up with it but its already a classic