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November 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like this chapter. In the show they never showed him in the shadow realm just an empty body like a puppet. Bakura is interesting in this chapter. If I didn't know any better I would swear he was sticking up for Yugi. Well update soon.
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, this is quite amusing. I love how Kabia so sarcastic. And I'm liking how this is going. Now when is Ryou-kun going to actually interact w/ Kaiba-kun? lol.
The way you portray the characters, Pegasus is a freak and Yuugi is stupidly stubborn. XD I love how you portray Kaiba, and his remarks to the silver-haired one is causing much anxiousness to the readers. ^_~ I hope you are considering to pair Kaiba w/ Ryou-kun.
Please write more soon, I am readily looking forward to the next ch. ^^ I shall try to review/read, but if I miss some, that means I'm confined by the pile of works I am being given. :P
The way you portray the characters, Pegasus is a freak and Yuugi is stupidly stubborn. XD I love how you portray Kaiba, and his remarks to the silver-haired one is causing much anxiousness to the readers. ^_~ I hope you are considering to pair Kaiba w/ Ryou-kun.
Please write more soon, I am readily looking forward to the next ch. ^^ I shall try to review/read, but if I miss some, that means I'm confined by the pile of works I am being given. :P
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yami nefertira; Hmm interesting,
Hikari nefertira; Go whoop his ass Kaiba!
Yami nefertira; This is a good story!
Hikari nefertira; Go whoop his ass Kaiba!
Yami nefertira; This is a good story!
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Poor Seto, I want to hurt him so bad *wait a minute I already did in one of my stories* Seto just saw Bakura and he likes him *snickers* and yes you did make Yugi super annoying. I hope when you put these two together you make it really hot. Though I really do like Seto and Jou. Update soon.
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I want to hurt Pegasus real bad. Correction on typo. Sorry.
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November 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*grin* I like where this going...
Bakura: that's a first...
Marik: *snicker*
Freddie: Hey Millie...can I please go kill people now
Okay fine..if you must...Mr.Sharp and Pointy, Venom let's ride!
BEWD a.k.a Venom: ^___^
BEWD a.k.a Spike: zzzzzZZZZzzzz
BEWD a.k.a Fang: *chasing butterflies*
hee hee...
awwwww....
Bakura: that's a first...
Marik: *snicker*
Freddie: Hey Millie...can I please go kill people now
Okay fine..if you must...Mr.Sharp and Pointy, Venom let's ride!
BEWD a.k.a Venom: ^___^
BEWD a.k.a Spike: zzzzzZZZZzzzz
BEWD a.k.a Fang: *chasing butterflies*
hee hee...
awwwww....
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November 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I do not like Pegasus. If you want to know how much I dislike him read my story Night of the Vampires. Yugi is so sickenly sweet in this it makes my teeth hurt and I hope in your version Pegusus gets his butt kicked but good not by Yugi but by Seto. Update soon.
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I hate a tease. Oh well when it comes to writting a good story im just as bad. You have got to put either Seto and Jou together or Seto and Ryou/Bakura. Please not Yugi/Yami and Seto. To me they are not a good match. Update soon.
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW! This is hilarious! The chapters are a bit short and the humor is a bit dry though. But keep up the good work!
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It's an interesting story you got going there. I like the humor. I think the first chapter was the absolute best when his boyfriend suddenly went scitzo on him. ;)
The only thing I didn't care for are those chapters you wrote that had little to no change, whatsoever. Like, the helicopter scene. You don't want to repeat the exact same plot that any fan all ready read in the manga. It's just boring. You got to add atleast a little 'something' for change. Like.....instead of the guard aiming a gun because Pegasus ordered him to, you could have had the guards get flirty and try and make some kind of sex offer. Then when Kaiba rudely refused, they could have gotten in such a jealous stink that one aimed a gun at him, while the other told him to blow him away. See? That would have good, too. ;)
Of course....that's just an example. You see my point, anyway.
But, other than that.....I like it, so far. I just hope I can find your fic again the next time you update. This websight is so unorganized compared to ff.net. ;p
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The only thing I didn't care for are those chapters you wrote that had little to no change, whatsoever. Like, the helicopter scene. You don't want to repeat the exact same plot that any fan all ready read in the manga. It's just boring. You got to add atleast a little 'something' for change. Like.....instead of the guard aiming a gun because Pegasus ordered him to, you could have had the guards get flirty and try and make some kind of sex offer. Then when Kaiba rudely refused, they could have gotten in such a jealous stink that one aimed a gun at him, while the other told him to blow him away. See? That would have good, too. ;)
Of course....that's just an example. You see my point, anyway.
But, other than that.....I like it, so far. I just hope I can find your fic again the next time you update. This websight is so unorganized compared to ff.net. ;p
Clarity