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for Slave of Destruction

by hatochiisai

schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oooh, finally updated this story! ^_^

I would have to say that -in my opinion- it's the best story that you have still in progress, it was agonising to go so long without seeing a new chapter. Hopefully getting one chapter out will mean that you have less trouble with the next one. I find that writers block comes in chapter sized blocks unless the story is well and truely dead...hopefully the story's NOT dead. ç_ç

Anyway, even MORE emotional conflict than the last chapter and a good deal of violence too- the fight scene are always hard to pull off but I believed you managed to pull it off very well- despite the outcome being very one-sided.

Strangely enough I feel sympathy for Set... as well as intolerance (odd combination I know)- he just doesn't understand Ryou, nor does he really love him, he only believes he does. I think that's a little sad, personally, to be so self-absorbed that you can hurt the friends of the one you 'love' and still believe you are on the side of right.

My intolerance for him stems from the fact that he evidently refuses to acknowledge Ryou and Bakura's bond- or the time that Ryou has spent with both his yami and his friends. The fact that Set thinks he can just waltz in and snatch Ryou away from his family (friends more than blood family) without any emotional repercussions makes me want to slap the guy, god of destruction or not.

I love how you brought in Throth, the scribe god with the head of the wading bird, the one that eats snails from the river Nile? At least I'm pretty sure that's the one (damn, I need to brush up on my Egyptian mythology), if that's the one I'm thinking of then I'm glad that you are making him a major influence in this story as the voice of reason. Apart from Khepri and Anubis, that guy was always one of my favourites.

Anyway, hope this helps you get over your mental block.

Best regards,



*Shadow In Flight*
person Chibigeemu
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh yeah, read all these chapters in one day and I love it. Hope that writer's block doesn't get you again. D:
person Jeda
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg. u must update and u must update soon. i've been waiting for u 2 update this story 4 like ever. Set is such an asshole. i really don't like him. i hope ryou is really under some spell or somthing cuz i'm really starting to believe that he's never gonna leave set. i feel really sorry 4 bakura. anyway, UPDATE!!! this chappie was great.
person K.C
schedule April 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I HATE SET!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I want to kill him!!!!!!!! Pkz write more soon I love this story!!
person lokivsanubis
schedule April 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
me like but symboles issue it was hard to make out words.
person Itavita
schedule March 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
D: D: D: *hugs Bakura* Poor, evil doom-baby. :( All he wants is his hikari back. ;____;

I honestly can't guess how this will end. Set won't just give Ryou away, Ryou is torn between Set and Bakura, and Bakura's not giving Ryou up without a fight. :o *suspense*

Hope to see the rest, too. ^^
person Anon
schedule December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Crap. Thpse girls a whores and useless puppets.
person Anon
schedule December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Pif stupid.
person BJRose
schedule December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'd kill that father selffish.
person Anon
schedule November 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please!!!!!!!!!!!!! add a new chapter! i have been waiting over 2 months and still you havent updated.