rate_review Reviews

You have a pretty good story going actually.
I think that it has great potential.
Hopefully you will continue this story.

I vote for a combination of b and c. Make some lemons but keep the story going, I really love this fic.

I love the story so far. One thing you can do is maybe bring someone in form jono's past like yugi or a new person. Maybe give him back some of his memories. We don't know a lot about him so there is a lot you could do with the story. You could do a future thing with them that would be cool. Like have them die all happy and in love then they are reborn and hate each other but they both have dreams of the past and the love they had but, if you do that then do it as they see in the dream the other a shadow that slowly shows who they are and they could be all confused that would be good too. If you want to you can let me know if you like the idea. I have alot of them but work 7 days a week no time to wright a lot.

Hi, I just found this today and I have to say that it is amazing!!! Also I was sorry to see that you've been in hospital etc, I'm going through that myself at the moment so you have my sympathies. I thought your Seth was amazing and Jono was so cute. I do have a vague idea for a was you could extend the plot...if you wanted. But as a new reviewer I'm kinda hesitant. If you'd like to hear the idea you can email me at Kittenbelle@hotmail.com. I won't be offended if you don't!

Again it is a wonderful read, I don't normally liek AE stories but you really pull it off!

Velvetina x

I think I will go with D! Honestly, I think you should extend this story a few more chapters, with a few more lemons of course, but add more of a twist to it. Stories that take place in the Egyptian past of the series can have events that can extend back to the present part of the series. Example: You know how the present Seto Kaiba constantly says that he doesn't beleive in magic or of his past life? Well, why not have something happen that causes him to believe?

What if Jono died, leaving Seth to grieve? Fanfics that sometimes have this theme tend to go over pretty well with readers, plus gives it the taste of a romantic tragedy. However, the souls of these two lovers have a second chance to be together. Hence, the present Seto Kaiba and Katsuya Jounouchi.

Though, that is just my suggestion. ^^ I love something that makes me cry, but then later has a happy ending that makes it all better.

Even if you do not go with my suggestion, at least extend it a little more. ^^ Please?

This story is GOOD! Don't do ANYTHING with it!!! DO YOU HEAR ME?! *cackles evilly*....*ahem* sorry...Seto tends to make me crazy...lol.

come back and keep on writting you made me cry with this story well i hope u up date soon before i have to go and not see a computer or internet for 2 month T.T

Ooooooooooh!!!*Shakes so hard the box of cereal she had been stuffing her mouth with rattles*That was soooo Cute!!*Does it again*I mean, I was crying cause I though Seth was going to do somthin` bad,And then you threw in the nickname from Seto and Jou.*Screams fangirlishly*I'm a hopeless romantic.

Ladama

*standing ovation* Good job! You do not suck at writing lemons and I hope to see more in da future. I'm glad to hear it was nothing serious too! Keep writing you have me hooked!

I still feel bad for Jono though T.T Poor little blondie! *hugs him* Anyway, please update!