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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Your review to my story "Sins of the Flesh" was extremely rude. However, I appreciate your honesty, enjoy the experience of my first flame - apparently, most people don't believe I'm a bad writer - and I do appreciate the fact that you at least left a review rather than ignoring the story. Now, I'm going to return the favor of reviewing your story and telling you precisely what I thought, in somewhat more reasonable terms.
Your writing is mediocre at best, unless you are a Lithuanian with a sixth-grade education. Your characterization is sloppy and vague; one must wonder if you've seen more than five episodes of the series and learned the rest from perusing fanfiction as well-written as your own. There is an over-abundance of original characters who do nothing more than take up space, where some canon character might have contributed to the plot, or where a character was perhaps best left out ll together. If I were a cruel person, I would take great pleasure in MSTing this monstrosity.
One the other hand, the concept is interesting, and if it were more well-written, I might even enjoy it. With several years of practice, you might even be a decent writer.
So, please, feel free to go flame my other stories as well. I have a set of Mokuba/Seto stories you might enjoy hate-mailing. They are at your disposal.
Your writing is mediocre at best, unless you are a Lithuanian with a sixth-grade education. Your characterization is sloppy and vague; one must wonder if you've seen more than five episodes of the series and learned the rest from perusing fanfiction as well-written as your own. There is an over-abundance of original characters who do nothing more than take up space, where some canon character might have contributed to the plot, or where a character was perhaps best left out ll together. If I were a cruel person, I would take great pleasure in MSTing this monstrosity.
One the other hand, the concept is interesting, and if it were more well-written, I might even enjoy it. With several years of practice, you might even be a decent writer.
So, please, feel free to go flame my other stories as well. I have a set of Mokuba/Seto stories you might enjoy hate-mailing. They are at your disposal.
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February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting beginnings, and the bones of a great tail (pun intended). I am not too into vamps and werewolves and creatures of the night, but I am interested in how this story goes. *adds to bookmark* If I might make a suggestion? Beta's are a good thing. *portals vs patrols*. If you don't know where to find one or what one is...check out the section on beta's here on AFF or you can reach me by searching for maggiemay in the author's section. HUGS* congratulations on the story!
Maggiemay
Maggiemay
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February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow. A Kaiba Werewolf fic.
Now that is a new one.
Keep going, I need to see where you are taking this.
Good job, and great ending for this chapter, too.
Now that is a new one.
Keep going, I need to see where you are taking this.
Good job, and great ending for this chapter, too.
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February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh, my *grins* werewolf Seto? I can't wait to read more of this! Keep it up!
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February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I tingled when I read this! TINGLED!!!! Very awesome and please times 123456789087654321345678987654321 keep this up. *Hugs both REBD and BEWD plushies*