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for obsession

by janas

person kagomegirl
schedule November 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
haha kawaii!!! i cant wait to read more!! ooh and making joey pregnant would be good cuz then mokie would have another kid in the house to dote on ^_^ update again soon!
person Millie Ishtar Motou
schedule October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*GRIN* OMG ALL THROUGH THAT FREDDIE WAS SENDING ME the MOST HILARIOUS IMAGES

Freddie: *grin* Marik and Yami up a tree...

STOP IT!!!!!! *starts lauging again*

Marik: *frowns*

Bakura: kisses Marik...My whore

Marik: *growls* My UKe...Bitch

Bakura: hellz yea.

*still laughing*
person jordana
schedule October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Have you notice that you wrote the fic mostly in present tense? It's very confusing to read. Use past tense please or my brain will just implode...(sniff). Everything else is great!
person jordana
schedule October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
sorry to inform you but, you have some very noticeable problems with coherence and cohesion .Reread your fic and you'll notice how hard is to understand some sentences. In case you need some help just: duarte.jordana@gmail.com
person ruri
schedule October 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow amazing!!! i love this story it's so funny!!!
person smalvina
schedule September 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
poor poor Jou.
Father on a mission sounds bad
person PotionsPet
schedule September 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG! I can't wait to find out what happens next! PLEASE email me with the web address to this when you add the next chapter! Thanks! (excuse all the exclamation points, I only just noticed how many there are) *grins*

person fanficfrk
schedule September 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wonderful story - funny, cute. Love the press conference!!
person dana
schedule August 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice story..can't wait for update.
person ChibiRinni
schedule July 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
O.O **glares** U LITTLE TEASE! XD U better keep writing cuz that waz just wicked mean wat u just did to us poor readers!! We ALL were expecting a lemon! XD Dirty lil' trickster! XDDD I luved it regardless n I woulda sooo stole Seto's underwear!! XD Update ASAP Please!!

~ChibiRinni ^.~