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**blink Blink**wait confused....was he dead or.....**blink**....huh?
J-chan

Is English your first language? Or is this just your first fic? It's pretty decent but the english and grammar need work. Getting a beta-reader is a good idea. I think i would have liked this a lot better had i npt just spend a week doing a group assignment by myself and the only group member that contributed had deplorable englisb writing skills which took me countless hours to decipher, correct and edit. it was infuriating. Your work is hardly as bad but it still grates my nerves a little. But the story itself is alright. i like it. please continue.

Lol. I knew it! But wow! What a significant change in grammar and spelling. I love your writing style and the better grammar help me to appreciate it more. Kudos kid. i'm off to read the next chapter after I finish a another portion of a research assignment. so l8r.

Brava kare`nina. this is going well. Your english is definitely improving. congratulations on a new chapter too. It's great.

You updated! ; ) I like this story... even if it is starting to get to the "scary" part! Ryou and Bakura are just too perfect together. I love how Bakura is able to make Ryou blush all the time... and that the dark one cannot keep his hands off his smaller lover. Ryou was crazy for denying Bakura another helping of lovin'! Silly little white-haired boy with the cherry lips! And now it would seem that Marik has made his move... Hurry, Bakura! Go find and save your other half!

Ahhhhh!!! Oh-em-gee! When everything was going good too.

oh poor ryou! baku's going to feel so bad when ryou doesn't return and he's going to be pissed. once again lovely chap! ryou and kura are so cute i hope bakura saves ryou! marik is evil and not sexy evil (in this story) like bakura.oh is ryou's sis going to have a cow. i wonder if baku is going to take her with him to save ryou! and do you all ready know exacly what's going to happen? oh i can't wait till the next chap! plez update soon! bakura's going to mutalate marik. oh one last thing are you going to fit malik in here anywhere?

Oh god, Ryou has been kidnapped! I hope Bakura finds Ryou in time! Poor Am. too late to find where Merik was! I'll be reading updates so don't stop writing until the story is finished! Great story so far! ( and will always be! )

Fantastic story. Really original. I think this is one of those rare stories with Amane alive that actually work. Very well written. I admitt the first chapter was a little hard to understand every now and again, but each chapter just gets better. I can't wait for you to update! ^_^
And whats this thing with Marik hurting Ryou! I'm feeling like Ryou is right now, I want to know but at the same time I don't! XD

Update really soon! ^_^

marik? marik hurt poor, poor ryou? i love marik but for this story i don't like him anymore. i love the chap. and i was expecting it to be marik, i figured it would be pegasus or an oc wow i love this story. and how could ryou ever doubt that bakura loved him? well at least his sis was okay with it and bakura made it clear that he loved ryou. are you going to hook up aname with anyone? i love this story i hope you update really soon? i can't wait to see how this turns out! once again it sent shivers i love the way you write. this story is turning out to be a real work of art. plz cont! asap.