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September 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
gah so good and so awosme i love that bakura a lawyer..oh my if that ever really happen the world would really end as we know it oh well bakura so awsome so who cares i love it just keeps getting better and better do continue
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September 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay, you have a pretty good plot idea here, but you seem to have a little trouble with spelling and grammar. Using net speak like 'u' instead of 'you' will make readers hit the back button. Also, try running your chapters through a spell check. I spotted some errors, like using 'faze' instead of 'phase', that a spell check would have picked up easily. Also, read through your chapters several times out loud, often times this will help you spot any grammar mistakes or akward wording. All in all you have a lot of potential, you just need to put a little more work into it. ^___^ Good Luck!
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September 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story keep it coming. Dragon to the resuce. Seto has a machine pop out gut and skin Jou's dad then disappears, leaving no evidence besides a dead fuck. Keep it coming I can't wait for more.
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September 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was great chapter, but I want Seto back!
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September 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I love it! It makes Mei warm and fuzzy feeling when Seto taking care of Jou. I cried for him. And wanted to kick the shit out of his Pa.
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August 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please update again soon! I love the way you're taking the characters and can't wait to find out what happens next.
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August 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
what going to happen to jou, isn't kaiba already took care of jou father? i want to know more! it getting good by the way.
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August 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
DAMN!!!!! Oh sorry I just relized that I was at the end of the last chapter! ~.^ Please update soon this story is GREAT!!! I love it!
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August 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story, angsty, and i love seto saves the day stories. Plus I like hikari/yami pairings. my only suggestion to improve your stories would be to get a beta, some detailed oriented type to catch those pesky spelling errors...so you can focus on the creative stuff.
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August 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
you better write the next chpter this story is way to good to stop on i want to know what happen next and what happens when jou finds out seto is his dragon so do continue with this story please