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for My Blue Eyed Dragon In White Armor

by tash1021

person Millie Ishtar Motou
schedule January 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Jou: Seto Please? *whispers* Save me

Yugi: What was that Jou?

Bakura: *sings loudly* SOMEONE FANCES THE CEO, SOMEONE FANCES THE.....MMMMMMM...Marik

Marik: Shut and kiss me fool!

Yami: *rolls eyes* Not in front of Yugi!

OK Where did that come from? still never mind...Your story is good

person Velvetina
schedule January 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Aww so angsty. But I'm liking it lots. I really want to see the next chapter of this as I reckon its got great potential!
schedule January 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is really well written! Jou is such a good character and you've managed to keep his personality realistic whilst brining out another side to him. *FuzzyBunny hands you some cake* please update soon!
person Miko Kage
schedule January 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ooohh i hope kaiba rescues poor jou from his nasty father. I like your plot and idea, the only improvement I can think of is to find a beta, they can help you catch those pesky spelling mistakes!