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Drool. Yumm. So Hot. And totally realistic. And so well written. And my brain is fried.

Lenchan next good story, but I can't wait for chapter from "Memories...", "Key of Ra" and "Touch me other me" please - chibi, watery eyes. I hope that Yami will always love and lust for his little aibou. Please, please. You are one from my favorite writers. Hugs.

sequel! sequel!!! XD XD XD
i think it was nice, it was, after all, a one shot, so the ending was an aproppiate one

And I want next chapter.^_^

Ya know A sequel would be appriciated!!!! YES!!! PWP!!

Loved to the very end. Very nice wording. Brought in a very truthfull way and most certanly enjoyed to no end.
Please write more!!
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Ahh, that made my pants happy. Gotta love a horny Yugi and a voyeuristic Yami. Mmm... good job!

Not bad, I thoroughly enjoyed the thought of yugi touching himself... You're language was very descriptive and explained his "need" quite well. I also wouldn't mind seeing a sequel.. Albiet one that is a little longer and one that might involve a little yami/yugi action, (I know it has been done before.. but still.. It's Hot...) So I would definetely reccommend that you commandear your muse and write up a sequel and also if you do.. build it up a little, create tension between Yami & Yugi there by making their love-making that much more enjoyable.. (and by build it up I mean give them both a burning need for sexual release, one that they need to release "behind closed doors" and away from each other.. until "something" happens... Like what you ask? I'll leave that up to you.... There you now have a plot idea from a mere Shadow..

P.S. Oh & just so you know, as you can probably tell from my review, I'm a huge fan of Adult fan fiction... Judging from my review do you think that I might have the necessary prerequisites? You know a broad vocabularly, knowledge of the series you're writing a fan-fic for, you know things like that...
Just so you know I'm 16 and a guy, you don't have to answer I'm just wondering what you are? gender and age?
I want to know because most of the authors I know are like 15-20yrs. old and female.. Like one you might want to check out...
Eyes of Ra... She's pretty good if you know what I mean...

Wah!! So hot and cute and awesome!!!! You should update this when you get the chance, make it longer! It'd be really really awesome as a full-blown story!