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for On hidden paths

by darkangel985

person XaloneXalwaysX
schedule October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update damn you! XD
person Reyn
schedule October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oo! oo! I know a survival tip! Moss always grows on the north side of trees! (nods happily)
person Jessica
schedule October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooo, Jou is impressin' Kaiba with his mad wilderness skills!...>-<...I hope you update soon cuz this really sounds good!....And kudos for this being your 1st YGO fic! The characters are very canon! Keep up the good work! Bye! ^-^
person Velvetina
schedule October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey there. I will get onto the next chappie very very soon but today my teachers decided to swamp me with work but never fear it will be done. As you know I think that this is awsome and i still love it. Ahh Kaiba and Joey...wonderful! tee hee email ya soon!
person Linku
schedule October 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That's it?! I want to see some woodland lovens! The fact that I'm a rabid Kaiba/Jou fan doesn't help either... at least a kiss. Please?
person XaloneXalwaysX
schedule October 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Weeeeeee things are...starting to...sort of heat up...lame pun....okay I'll shut up. You update again soon ^_^.
person XaloneXalwaysX
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Mweep! Update soon! I needs more of this XD.
person Velvetina
schedule October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey cool story and espesh well done since you mentioned that you aren't really that familier with the show and characters. I remember when I
person Velvetina
schedule October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lol sorry about that! Anyway!

Hey cool story and espesh well done since you mentioned that you aren't really that familier with the show and characters. I remember when I first got interested in this show and fanfiction etc my first Yugioh story was appalling and I reckon you've done a fantastic job, I'm impressed with the characterization it took me a long time to really get that right.

Tee hee this pairing are so funny together and the way you write it makes me chuckle out loud!

Gah I'm not much of a beta but I'd be happy to have a go at it for you since you asked so nicely, but when looking through I couldn't really see many mistakes. Maybe some odd commas but other than that really well done. Anyway my email is Kittenbelle@hotmail.com so if you would like me to beta just send me an email!

Can't wait to find out whats going to happen next

Velvetina


person sg
schedule October 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I find your placement of commas sometimes disturbing, but all in all it's pretty okay. Any chance of Seto being uke? Doesn't look that way, but thought I'd ask...