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by bluesun

person Nepha
schedule September 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow...that was great. i love vampires stories especially with Yami and Yugi and when they are a couple. I hope Yugi and Yami get together soon. So update as soon as you can. PWEASE *puppy eyes* ja
person Amethyst-eyed Koneko
schedule September 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi! I like this! It's a bit choppy in places and your punctuation is haphazard at best; but I like the idea behind this a lot. Yami does make the sexiest vampire imagineable! Yummy! Update soon!
Koneko
person Cool in the Mood
schedule September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eh, a piece of advice? You're using the "!" too much. Try using periods every once in a while? It's like the characters are yelling or talking in loud voices all the times.
person Sarah Costa
schedule September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was good...what happen next? I can't wait for the next chapter. Please update soon. Ja ne
person candy
schedule September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey thx for the review....please keep writing your story...ohh and i have a ew story coming out i will be hoor if you cant check it out ..=)
person cutter
schedule September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
carry on!
person Arainaina
schedule September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
very good please update soon
person SakuraNeko
schedule September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Finally, a potentially good YGO vampire story. I look forward to reading more, so update soon!
schedule September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Pretty cool, I like the concept of this story thus far, along with the fact that Yami is a vampire? Anyways aside from a few errors in spelling and such I really like this and hope to read more soon.
person Giggles
schedule September 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting…please continue!