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by NeruKudasai

person angle of sex
schedule November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
THE MONKEY DID A GOOD JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!^-^
person bluesun
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
haha love you little additude at the end hey thanks for writing more that was good i'm still working on my poor robin fic im doing but your good
person Millie Ishtar Motou
schedule September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AWESOME AND YOU KNOW IT!! erm...one question i am comnfused did Yami actually rape Yugi?
person Sekhmet
schedule September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The writing needs work. It's more impressive when you're able to keep the characters inside their own element. Try writing them off with the appropriate personalities and it would be much better. Also try to ease up on the pace; it jumped out at my face and it made me blink in shock.

Other than that, good job.
person Midnight Hope
schedule September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Midnight: yeah...sex in the mornng before school will proablay hurt.....if it was for Yugi and or Yami....but for me? hehehehehehehehe ^_^ luv the story
person bluesun
schedule August 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow well what with yami will yugi acept it or will he banish him so many other questions i have you really need to keep going
person bluesun
schedule August 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey i like i like that was cool but needed to be longer