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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OoooH! It's all...plotty and stuff! This is great! You're fantastic!
Heh...i didn't participate in the game but got the DEATH refernce...heh...
Woot! You HAVE to keep updating this! Kaiba's all crazy and stuff and it's great! lmao And Bakuras nasty...you don't get people often writing him all nasty and mean! Wonderful! *huggles*
Keep up the sordid work!
Hellagoddess
Heh...i didn't participate in the game but got the DEATH refernce...heh...
Woot! You HAVE to keep updating this! Kaiba's all crazy and stuff and it's great! lmao And Bakuras nasty...you don't get people often writing him all nasty and mean! Wonderful! *huggles*
Keep up the sordid work!
Hellagoddess
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
O.O There was a game? Well, looks like I missed ze boat there. ^^;; At any rate, VERY interesting turn of events! Well, past events anyhow. Great work. :)
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August 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh shit....
urm, i would suggest running again, but...
well... maybe if he... no...
:winces: poor seto...
anyways, interesting chapter. liked the twist with ryou. ^_^
urm, i would suggest running again, but...
well... maybe if he... no...
:winces: poor seto...
anyways, interesting chapter. liked the twist with ryou. ^_^
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July 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, I'm game (pun intended). So:
"With two wheels resting firmly on the sidewalk, mere inches from the blond, Seto removed his sunglasses and sat back to observe the other's reaction." Seto's feelings of inadequacy come to the fore, thanks to Yugi, so Seto attempts to establish control over the situation, and Jou, in a very aggressive and unhealthy manner. He enjoys seeing Jou scared of him- that's a red flag in my book. Possibly more than one- the jealousy over other relationships, the aggressive control issue, and the risk-taking behavior(speeding).
"Jou's whimpers and curses were no longer even remotely pleasured sounding, and the brunet took perverse satisfaction in thwarting the other boy's release." Big red flag here, in regards to later escalation of violence. In D/s relationships (like all relationships), the most important part is communication. Most 'hard' scenes are discussed and even scripted beforehand, so both Dom and sub know what they're in for, so to speak. Between Seto and Jou, there's no trust, no mutual communication and comfort zone- not even a contract (which, for safety's sake, they should have had in place before starting the breathplay). Springing something like that in the middle of a scene, is bad news, not to mention highly inconsiderate. Then again, Seto doesn't care about Jou, either ( "I DON'T care...") so it is even more necessary to take those steps.
Sorry if that sounded like a lecture- that's a bit of a touchy issue with me.
And again- "He could sense when the other boy was at his wit's end, but he was literally unable to quell the sadistic urge to throw fuel on the burgeoning flames." Seto is a sadist, yes, and enjoys putting Jou down, again and again. Jou is in over his head; the fact that he cares about Seto is a disadvantage- he won't fight back when he needs to. Intervention!
""You're nothing but a worthless dog!" Seto screamed at him, his own words echoing those of Gozaburo's in his mind. Words that had been hurled at the young Seto every day for YEARS."
Seto needs therapy, and should never have been allowed near Jou until his anger issues were resolved. Again, abuse.
"You're getting off on this, aren't you, Katsuya?" Again, sadist. And now that Seto knows Jou gets off on it, he might as well have been given carte blanche. It's just a matter of time now.
That was...more than four, but really, that whole chapter was one big red flag.
Don't know anything about Fullmetal Alchemist, though. As for "what I think this is" - how old is Seto anyway? I put him around 20 (teens at the show's ending, plus a few years to the first chapter).
PTSD after Jou's death, certainly, but he was sliding before that. This chapter made me rethink my theory, though. I'll get back to you on that. :)
"With two wheels resting firmly on the sidewalk, mere inches from the blond, Seto removed his sunglasses and sat back to observe the other's reaction." Seto's feelings of inadequacy come to the fore, thanks to Yugi, so Seto attempts to establish control over the situation, and Jou, in a very aggressive and unhealthy manner. He enjoys seeing Jou scared of him- that's a red flag in my book. Possibly more than one- the jealousy over other relationships, the aggressive control issue, and the risk-taking behavior(speeding).
"Jou's whimpers and curses were no longer even remotely pleasured sounding, and the brunet took perverse satisfaction in thwarting the other boy's release." Big red flag here, in regards to later escalation of violence. In D/s relationships (like all relationships), the most important part is communication. Most 'hard' scenes are discussed and even scripted beforehand, so both Dom and sub know what they're in for, so to speak. Between Seto and Jou, there's no trust, no mutual communication and comfort zone- not even a contract (which, for safety's sake, they should have had in place before starting the breathplay). Springing something like that in the middle of a scene, is bad news, not to mention highly inconsiderate. Then again, Seto doesn't care about Jou, either ( "I DON'T care...") so it is even more necessary to take those steps.
Sorry if that sounded like a lecture- that's a bit of a touchy issue with me.
And again- "He could sense when the other boy was at his wit's end, but he was literally unable to quell the sadistic urge to throw fuel on the burgeoning flames." Seto is a sadist, yes, and enjoys putting Jou down, again and again. Jou is in over his head; the fact that he cares about Seto is a disadvantage- he won't fight back when he needs to. Intervention!
""You're nothing but a worthless dog!" Seto screamed at him, his own words echoing those of Gozaburo's in his mind. Words that had been hurled at the young Seto every day for YEARS."
Seto needs therapy, and should never have been allowed near Jou until his anger issues were resolved. Again, abuse.
"You're getting off on this, aren't you, Katsuya?" Again, sadist. And now that Seto knows Jou gets off on it, he might as well have been given carte blanche. It's just a matter of time now.
That was...more than four, but really, that whole chapter was one big red flag.
Don't know anything about Fullmetal Alchemist, though. As for "what I think this is" - how old is Seto anyway? I put him around 20 (teens at the show's ending, plus a few years to the first chapter).
PTSD after Jou's death, certainly, but he was sliding before that. This chapter made me rethink my theory, though. I'll get back to you on that. :)
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July 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
O.O Woah...this is incredibly intense. I am putting this on my bookmarks. I like the close attention to detail and the way you've portrayed Yugi/Yami especially. I can't wait to see more.
...god I'm a disturbed one. XP
...god I'm a disturbed one. XP
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July 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aw, shit. RUN SETO! ... or dont run, yami will chase you. o.o
meh, interesting chapter. ^_^
meh, interesting chapter. ^_^
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July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Kaiba may be obsessed and losing his mind, but I like that. Well, I actually liked it more when he owned Jou. Too bad Jou's dead. I wonder how Seto's going to last.
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July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DAMN!!! Snickers....catti
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July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! I looked really hard for all of your fore-shadows....but im a science major and havn't taken an english course for like....4 years. So Im pathetic and could only find the really really obvious one. *sigh* Oh well, I look forward to your next chapter.
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July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Review. *gapes* “Breathe Hella…Breathe! My god I think I held my breath for most of those last few paragraphs almost asphyxiating myself! I remembered at the end though only cause my chest was hurting! Wow this is really different! Most people just won’t go that far with their fics, they skate up to the edge and then back again…I hope this turns out to be as good as I think it is! Whoo! And I’ve only read the prologue!
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