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December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
@ Help Please:
Are you being serious? Or did you accidentally review the wrong story or something?
Because this story DOES have paragraphs. Every single chapter does. And it's quite possibly the best fanfiction i've ever read.
Don't get me wrong, i'm not against people who give constructive criticism, but are insults really necessary? "You can't write" is hardly a nice or a helpful thing to say. It can be hurtful for an author/authoress to read something like that, after they've put hard work into their writing.
Please try to consider other people's feelings if you're going to make negative reviews.
Anyways, that aside, THANKS A LOT FOR THE CHRISTMAS CHAPTER LECHAN! ^-^ I was feeling a bit down before i came to check on this site, but when i saw the update and read your newest chapter, it really cheered me up. ^_^
I LOVE the way Yami lost his temper at Kaiba like that. It's such a Yami thing to do. *Is remembering Yami's duel against Haga on the train* I also like that Yami switched languages when he lost his temper. It really added to the situation, and made Yami seem that much more intimidating. Mainly because i didn't know exactly what he was saying until i read the notes at the end. So i felt a lot like Jounouchi was feeling while witnessing the scene. Speaking of which, i love the way you portray Jou. He CAN be silly and easily worked up at times, but a lot of writers forget that he can also be very mature and observant when it counts. I love how you manage to keep all the characters really in-character. Keep it up! ;)
I also love the way you're developing the relationship between Yuugi and Atemu. A lot of writers tend to make characters fall in love with each other, almost straight away. But i love how you're moving things at just the right speed. Fast enough that it's easy to see the changes, but slow enough that it doesn't seem at all rushed. So, great job on that part too!
Ati just needs to wait until Yuugi's ready, and Yuugi seems to be finally accepting his feelings. So it won't be long now. Hehe. ^_~ I love the way you ended the chapter and i can't wait to read the next one! I must know what happenes next! =D
Thanks again for this chapter, and i hope you had a Merry Christmas! ^_^
Are you being serious? Or did you accidentally review the wrong story or something?
Because this story DOES have paragraphs. Every single chapter does. And it's quite possibly the best fanfiction i've ever read.
Don't get me wrong, i'm not against people who give constructive criticism, but are insults really necessary? "You can't write" is hardly a nice or a helpful thing to say. It can be hurtful for an author/authoress to read something like that, after they've put hard work into their writing.
Please try to consider other people's feelings if you're going to make negative reviews.
Anyways, that aside, THANKS A LOT FOR THE CHRISTMAS CHAPTER LECHAN! ^-^ I was feeling a bit down before i came to check on this site, but when i saw the update and read your newest chapter, it really cheered me up. ^_^
I LOVE the way Yami lost his temper at Kaiba like that. It's such a Yami thing to do. *Is remembering Yami's duel against Haga on the train* I also like that Yami switched languages when he lost his temper. It really added to the situation, and made Yami seem that much more intimidating. Mainly because i didn't know exactly what he was saying until i read the notes at the end. So i felt a lot like Jounouchi was feeling while witnessing the scene. Speaking of which, i love the way you portray Jou. He CAN be silly and easily worked up at times, but a lot of writers forget that he can also be very mature and observant when it counts. I love how you manage to keep all the characters really in-character. Keep it up! ;)
I also love the way you're developing the relationship between Yuugi and Atemu. A lot of writers tend to make characters fall in love with each other, almost straight away. But i love how you're moving things at just the right speed. Fast enough that it's easy to see the changes, but slow enough that it doesn't seem at all rushed. So, great job on that part too!
Ati just needs to wait until Yuugi's ready, and Yuugi seems to be finally accepting his feelings. So it won't be long now. Hehe. ^_~ I love the way you ended the chapter and i can't wait to read the next one! I must know what happenes next! =D
Thanks again for this chapter, and i hope you had a Merry Christmas! ^_^
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December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I almost fainted at the last paragraph - Atemu is baaaad!! Poor yami, at home worrying about his light while his former self is on his way to getting himself a lap dance!!! -giggles- And the so called 'non-existant' relationship between Seth and Jonoh coupled with said lap dance just made my day. I'm usually just a SJ and BR reader, but this fic has me so into YYY that I wish there was more fics with the same kind of intensity between yugi and yami as you've presented.
Merry belated Christmas - and a happy new year!
Merry belated Christmas - and a happy new year!
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I don't think I can read this why? Well You can't write. Split it into Paragraphs. It would help a lot!
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December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
...*Glomps you * Sorry, but I couldn't help it. SQUEE! I'M SO FRICKIN' HAPPY YOU UPDATED! I. LOVE. THIS. STORY. SOOO. MUCH! I've been checking, you know. Back here. Many times. Hoping that your chapter number would change. *Purrs * I am HAPPY! HAPPY REVIEWER!
The grape scene was quite amusing, the comments you add are _very_ enjoyable, the “Oz thing” had me laughing the hardest, though…and the dance? *Nods * Definitely good. Very.
...*Stares * But...it's over...doggonit. Action! Action is good! That made me very, very happy! You got me to laugh, get all watery eyed, frown, feel pity, grin maniacally, AND blush. So, in short, I love it.
Unfortunately, I...have two errors to point out, (Forgive me, o' great Lady Le-chan, for you are amazing...)
And a question. *Giggle *
First, sadly…the minute corrections.
You said: “But… you, Yugi, I will stop.” …This definitely initially confused me. I mean, the story was totally and completely awesome, and I hung onto your every word…but I _did_ have to pause there, scratching my head a moment. “Stop him? Stop what? He’s not doing anything, you idio—OH!” So, I think you meant “+for+ you, Yugi, I will stop.” Right? (*Laughs at Atemu’s arrogance, a few lines down *)
And…oh. Oops. Found one I wasn’t even looking for. Umm. “All he could do was stare back at Yugi seemed to come to a conclusion even he had not been aware of.” …I’m not sure what, but there –is- something wrong with that sentence. “As” instead of “At”? *Shrugs *
…^^; …Um. And another, “The pr-aA obeys not mortal…” Mortal(s)?
But here’s the one I meant to mention: “Have I… please my pr-aA?” Pleased, right?
…Btw. The ending with our favorite pharaoh and his little hikari? Had me grinning like…well, like any of the YGO psychos before ultimate world domination. You rock. Out loud.
Oh! Right! The question…I almost forgot. *Clears throat * Okay, umm, I am adoring this story to the height of adoring any fanfiction out there, BUT—inquiring minds (or maybe just me, darnit all…) want to know! You know how you made Yami relive everything?
Well, thus far, he’s only relived the bad stuff…when IS he going to remember the good stuff? Like, this pretty little scene right here? *Points to Yugi straddling Atemu on throne * ‘Cuz if that wouldn’t lift Mr. Gumpy-pant’s mood, I dunno what the heck would.
On the other hand, perhaps you are intent on delaying the happiness of Yami so you can torture him and us, and make us (and him) squirm, as is a very good tactic for an author or authoress…a cruel one, but a very good one.
Sorry for this long-winded review, but even that is meant as a compliment, ‘cuz I can’t shut up about how awesome it is. *Duct tapes mouth to end review * Mmph umph mrrp muhuph!
(Which, in non-duct taped speech is: Please update when you can!)
The grape scene was quite amusing, the comments you add are _very_ enjoyable, the “Oz thing” had me laughing the hardest, though…and the dance? *Nods * Definitely good. Very.
...*Stares * But...it's over...doggonit. Action! Action is good! That made me very, very happy! You got me to laugh, get all watery eyed, frown, feel pity, grin maniacally, AND blush. So, in short, I love it.
Unfortunately, I...have two errors to point out, (Forgive me, o' great Lady Le-chan, for you are amazing...)
And a question. *Giggle *
First, sadly…the minute corrections.
You said: “But… you, Yugi, I will stop.” …This definitely initially confused me. I mean, the story was totally and completely awesome, and I hung onto your every word…but I _did_ have to pause there, scratching my head a moment. “Stop him? Stop what? He’s not doing anything, you idio—OH!” So, I think you meant “+for+ you, Yugi, I will stop.” Right? (*Laughs at Atemu’s arrogance, a few lines down *)
And…oh. Oops. Found one I wasn’t even looking for. Umm. “All he could do was stare back at Yugi seemed to come to a conclusion even he had not been aware of.” …I’m not sure what, but there –is- something wrong with that sentence. “As” instead of “At”? *Shrugs *
…^^; …Um. And another, “The pr-aA obeys not mortal…” Mortal(s)?
But here’s the one I meant to mention: “Have I… please my pr-aA?” Pleased, right?
…Btw. The ending with our favorite pharaoh and his little hikari? Had me grinning like…well, like any of the YGO psychos before ultimate world domination. You rock. Out loud.
Oh! Right! The question…I almost forgot. *Clears throat * Okay, umm, I am adoring this story to the height of adoring any fanfiction out there, BUT—inquiring minds (or maybe just me, darnit all…) want to know! You know how you made Yami relive everything?
Well, thus far, he’s only relived the bad stuff…when IS he going to remember the good stuff? Like, this pretty little scene right here? *Points to Yugi straddling Atemu on throne * ‘Cuz if that wouldn’t lift Mr. Gumpy-pant’s mood, I dunno what the heck would.
On the other hand, perhaps you are intent on delaying the happiness of Yami so you can torture him and us, and make us (and him) squirm, as is a very good tactic for an author or authoress…a cruel one, but a very good one.
Sorry for this long-winded review, but even that is meant as a compliment, ‘cuz I can’t shut up about how awesome it is. *Duct tapes mouth to end review * Mmph umph mrrp muhuph!
(Which, in non-duct taped speech is: Please update when you can!)
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December 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHH, an update! yea!!! this had to be one of the best christmas presents ever! Thank you soo much! I loved it, please update soon!
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December 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW! you merry christmas too!!
such a great story!!! please update soon... and Happy new year and christmas (again^^")
bye bye,
Luna
such a great story!!! please update soon... and Happy new year and christmas (again^^")
bye bye,
Luna
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December 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMFG!!!...that was so awesome!!!...You have done us proud, lechan....Jesus it was perfect!...Where in the world did you come up with some of the phrases?...They fit the whole scene just right...."Seduction wasnt rape after all"..."Yugi is going to have to move back in with me"...was classic as was "Love sick Jackal"...Hope you do not mind but I might have to use that in my personal life...laughs...Fuck, lechan-sensai (yes you have most definitely earned the sensai at the end of your name)over 11,000 hits and over 200 reviews...Damn that is sooo awesome....When I wrote, I never looked at the reviews just the hits because that told me how many people were actually reading my stories...I mean I loved the reviews, they were always awesome and inspiring but it was the hits that truly inspired me to go on...Im rambling, arent I....Vodka tends to do that for me...Hope you had a great Christmas, got what you wanted, and dont worry I will most likely annoy you in the New Year...but at least Ill leave you alone for a month or so....unless I get restless then Ill email you to harrass you....love you to death, love the story, cannot wait for more....catti
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December 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!!! Hope you're having a good holiday, after reading your story I know I am. ~___^ I'm so happy you haven't abandoned the story, it's too good to let go. Please hurry with the next chapter, and I do mean FAST!!! I can't wait to read what happens next! Yay! Yugi (as far as I can tell) isn't confused anymore! Yay for him and Atemu! Well, don't take so long with this one, ok? Love ya! *And here's a virtual cookie for all your hard work!* =D
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December 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh god, please continue. That was awesome. I'm so happy right now (does happy dance). This story is the greatest one I've read. Please don't disappear.
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December 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please update.