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August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
tsk, tsk... naughty Hayden!
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August 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love this story, your doing a great job!
i was wondering if you could write more about rayna and bakura?
thanks again for writing a great fic!
love Jess
i was wondering if you could write more about rayna and bakura?
thanks again for writing a great fic!
love Jess
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August 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh that was certainly yummy. It's not everyday you receive a juicy brain in a box.
Bakura: It would go nice with my collection... that is my misc. body part collection. Someday my super-zombie will be complete... and THAN I will .. oh, nevermind. That's top secret information. *snicker*
Bakura: It would go nice with my collection... that is my misc. body part collection. Someday my super-zombie will be complete... and THAN I will .. oh, nevermind. That's top secret information. *snicker*
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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yeah! i'm also a loyal AFF.net reader as well!! *gags* last thing i needed described to me today, being sick and everything...BLEH!
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I know this early...chapter 10, thanks you for lemons of seto/jou...
I love bad Yami(Atem)...what about Hayden...will he continue his
killing spree of gays? Please don't let Aten die...snuggles Aten plush toy
Can't wait 4 chapter 11...also thanks 4 updating at end of chapter....
I love bad Yami(Atem)...what about Hayden...will he continue his
killing spree of gays? Please don't let Aten die...snuggles Aten plush toy
Can't wait 4 chapter 11...also thanks 4 updating at end of chapter....
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August 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PoV lemons, I love those kind! Great job! Poor Donny! *giggle* At least there was a table nearby...
Awwww... damn... That last paragraph was just sad!! (The funnies between Malik/Marik and Bakura further up were absolutely the shit though! PrEttY in PiNk! *giggle*)
Awwww... damn... That last paragraph was just sad!! (The funnies between Malik/Marik and Bakura further up were absolutely the shit though! PrEttY in PiNk! *giggle*)
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July 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whoa, damn... Pharaoh! You are quite the actor, I must say!! *snicker* (We know you, can't fool us! Na-na! LOL!)
Bakura: Ryou, you should pop a few Excedrin for that headache.
Marik: Cool, guns, baseball bats and mushed brains. Love the gore, more gore please. Nice job describing.
Bakura: Yeah, we liked that part. GORE RULES!
Marik: Thanks for the plushies too.
Bakura: Are these like my voodoo plushies? *tickles Joey plushie with a feather*
Bakura: Ryou, you should pop a few Excedrin for that headache.
Marik: Cool, guns, baseball bats and mushed brains. Love the gore, more gore please. Nice job describing.
Bakura: Yeah, we liked that part. GORE RULES!
Marik: Thanks for the plushies too.
Bakura: Are these like my voodoo plushies? *tickles Joey plushie with a feather*
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July 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm back! At last, the much awaited sequel where in Aria and Aten finally confronts the Pharaoh! I think it's pretty safe to say that this particular sequel can be considered as the climax of your series (no pun intended) and I'm really looking forward to reading the final battle between the Itemri-Ishtar family and the Pharaoh that had began back from ancient times.
From your first few chapters, I've noticed that you brought back Seto and Joey's characters, after not hearing from them since the last few chapters of Journey to Heaven, along with past villains in Vera and the "Anti-gay group" with the inclusion of Hayden. I would just like to ask on how large the roles of these villains will be on this particular story because it seems to me that they are a little out-of-place here since your summary, more or less, concentrates on the Millennium battle itself. Please don't get me wrong, I'm not trying to impose on your ideas, but I think that it would be better if the focus would be shifted more on how the Pharaoh "paves the road" towards the family's destruction. Another thing, about the chapter when you first introduced the pharaoh in the form of a voice in Ryou's head, I would just like to comment on the way Yami stated his plans. I think it would be better if you didn't make Yami "say" what he thinks and the plans he's been concocting directly and all at once. Let us readers know very little of what he's been planning and use the element of surprise and unpredictability to your advantage; leave us hanging on to the edge of our seats, eager for the next chapters to arrive. I'm not in opposition to lemon scenes in chapters, but toning them down a bit would help to make way for chapters to gear towards the more important parts of the story. Add them in between major scenes or after certain conflicts are solved so that they may be seen as "breaks" or bonuses for both readers and the characters, not to mention they allow us readers to be more emotionally attached to the characters who would be involved in those scenes.
You really have a very promising idea for a story, I hope that you would develop more the scenes and characters alike. Love scenes don't have to end up in fluffy moments or lemons either. Portray how your characters are feeling in more than words and add more the use of simple gestures and movements that imply and invoke strong emotions. Use the characters' surroundings to amplify those emotions as well. I know I'm being quite harsh on my comments but please don't be angry with me. It's just that I really love your series and I want to help in improving and developing them because to tell the truth, I'm really one very frustrated writer who can't transform ideas into actual stories (I really can't, I have a whole bunch of them in my head but it seems they don't want to be written :( ) So, there! I hope you won't take my comments personally and in the wrong way. By the way, I've read about that one flame about your stories and I just would like to say that I disagree with whoever that was. I personally think that this is one of the most original stories I have read and will continuously read. I mean who else would write on the Bakura and Ryou's life back from Ancient Egypt, up to 30-40 years after they've been reincarnated in modern times? Not to mention throwing in some interesting OC's as well as Ryou having kids with not only Bakura but Marik as well! I think that's all I've got to say for now, see you next chappie! ^_^
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I was just wondering, are you serious when you said that you're planning a lemon between Marik, Miranda, and Daniel? Not to be imposing but, I hope you won't go through with it...the idea kinda makes me feel...I don't know, uncomfortable? Uncomfortable,in a sense that I just don't see the three in bed having you know what, ugh...(shudders). A-anyway, please don't go through with it, pretty please?
Another thing, will the pharaoh be their final enemy? Last time I asked, you said that you might add Bakura's Ka beast to your story in their battle against Aten. So, I'm guessing that Aten will indeed die any time after this sequel; Marik will resurrect him, and in the process invoke an evil creature that would cause more problems for the family.
Lastly, I was also wondering on what would cause Ryou's death since, there was one character on one of your past stories that said, Ryou will die of a cause other than the creature Marik will invoke, will it be his weak heart? I'm not really sure about the details, but I think adding a few details on Ryou's condition would help in your current story in further stacking the odds against the family. I don't know if you would consider this idea or not but please comment on what you think about this. Furthermore, I hope you would plan many "diabolical" strategies for the pharaoh to torture and cause problems to our lovable family (I really love chaotic plotlines with sadistic and reaaally evil and strategic villains, they really add to the drama!)
From your first few chapters, I've noticed that you brought back Seto and Joey's characters, after not hearing from them since the last few chapters of Journey to Heaven, along with past villains in Vera and the "Anti-gay group" with the inclusion of Hayden. I would just like to ask on how large the roles of these villains will be on this particular story because it seems to me that they are a little out-of-place here since your summary, more or less, concentrates on the Millennium battle itself. Please don't get me wrong, I'm not trying to impose on your ideas, but I think that it would be better if the focus would be shifted more on how the Pharaoh "paves the road" towards the family's destruction. Another thing, about the chapter when you first introduced the pharaoh in the form of a voice in Ryou's head, I would just like to comment on the way Yami stated his plans. I think it would be better if you didn't make Yami "say" what he thinks and the plans he's been concocting directly and all at once. Let us readers know very little of what he's been planning and use the element of surprise and unpredictability to your advantage; leave us hanging on to the edge of our seats, eager for the next chapters to arrive. I'm not in opposition to lemon scenes in chapters, but toning them down a bit would help to make way for chapters to gear towards the more important parts of the story. Add them in between major scenes or after certain conflicts are solved so that they may be seen as "breaks" or bonuses for both readers and the characters, not to mention they allow us readers to be more emotionally attached to the characters who would be involved in those scenes.
You really have a very promising idea for a story, I hope that you would develop more the scenes and characters alike. Love scenes don't have to end up in fluffy moments or lemons either. Portray how your characters are feeling in more than words and add more the use of simple gestures and movements that imply and invoke strong emotions. Use the characters' surroundings to amplify those emotions as well. I know I'm being quite harsh on my comments but please don't be angry with me. It's just that I really love your series and I want to help in improving and developing them because to tell the truth, I'm really one very frustrated writer who can't transform ideas into actual stories (I really can't, I have a whole bunch of them in my head but it seems they don't want to be written :( ) So, there! I hope you won't take my comments personally and in the wrong way. By the way, I've read about that one flame about your stories and I just would like to say that I disagree with whoever that was. I personally think that this is one of the most original stories I have read and will continuously read. I mean who else would write on the Bakura and Ryou's life back from Ancient Egypt, up to 30-40 years after they've been reincarnated in modern times? Not to mention throwing in some interesting OC's as well as Ryou having kids with not only Bakura but Marik as well! I think that's all I've got to say for now, see you next chappie! ^_^
Note:
I was just wondering, are you serious when you said that you're planning a lemon between Marik, Miranda, and Daniel? Not to be imposing but, I hope you won't go through with it...the idea kinda makes me feel...I don't know, uncomfortable? Uncomfortable,in a sense that I just don't see the three in bed having you know what, ugh...(shudders). A-anyway, please don't go through with it, pretty please?
Another thing, will the pharaoh be their final enemy? Last time I asked, you said that you might add Bakura's Ka beast to your story in their battle against Aten. So, I'm guessing that Aten will indeed die any time after this sequel; Marik will resurrect him, and in the process invoke an evil creature that would cause more problems for the family.
Lastly, I was also wondering on what would cause Ryou's death since, there was one character on one of your past stories that said, Ryou will die of a cause other than the creature Marik will invoke, will it be his weak heart? I'm not really sure about the details, but I think adding a few details on Ryou's condition would help in your current story in further stacking the odds against the family. I don't know if you would consider this idea or not but please comment on what you think about this. Furthermore, I hope you would plan many "diabolical" strategies for the pharaoh to torture and cause problems to our lovable family (I really love chaotic plotlines with sadistic and reaaally evil and strategic villains, they really add to the drama!)
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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*blink* That was just... utterly amazing. Holy hell that was sexy! AWESOME ASSKICKING LEMONS!! Great job!!!
Marik: Ass..whating??
Bakura: O.o... I enjoyed the way Marik intimidated the piss out of that rag-bag VERA. She's such a bitch. I would not be sad if she spontaniously combusted.
Keep it coming! (hey, I didn't mean for that to sound hentai, really I didn't... *snicker*)
Marik: Ass..whating??
Bakura: O.o... I enjoyed the way Marik intimidated the piss out of that rag-bag VERA. She's such a bitch. I would not be sad if she spontaniously combusted.
Keep it coming! (hey, I didn't mean for that to sound hentai, really I didn't... *snicker*)
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July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's a hundred degrees outside, and the thermometer just exploded here in the house. Holy shit, that evil cliffie was hotter than hell! Great job 'faking' it boys! *snicker*
Feeling bad for Aten, knowing he is going to die and all. Like the old saying goes though, "Only the good die young." (That must be why I've beaten the odds so damn many times. *evil grin* LOL!)
Glad my suggestion worked for you!
*squishies and plushies*
~77
Feeling bad for Aten, knowing he is going to die and all. Like the old saying goes though, "Only the good die young." (That must be why I've beaten the odds so damn many times. *evil grin* LOL!)
Glad my suggestion worked for you!
*squishies and plushies*
~77