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for Puppy

by Moonwing

person michito
schedule August 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
how interesting........nice chappie ^^
person person
schedule August 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cool! That was great! ^_^ Just in my opinion, Jou shouldn't want Seto going easier on him. ^_^ Just letting you know what I think.
person Anon
schedule August 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
very good i like it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hope you have some more chapters to put up
person michito
schedule August 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
mwahahahaha more please!
schedule June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The story is interesting. At first I wasn't sure, but now I think it's interesting. Continue and tell me when you update it!
person silverfox
schedule June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
very interesting VERY good chapter keep up the good work
person nicky
schedule June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this story much better than the other one... Maybe because it's written from Jou's POV. It's got much more insight to his thoughts and it's cute how submissive he is.

I loved the scene when seto orders him to call him by his real name. Here, it was kinda good that you made no big fuzzy sentence around it all, you just let him say it and Jou thinks he knew this was going to happen. So, there's more to it than just some S/M kink... Good!

Your chapters are kind of short though, and the last one (quite frankly) I have no clue as to what it's supposed to be good for. But maybe it's gonna be important for the next ones... I can't know, can I?

Also: I highly apprechiate that you - unlike so many others - no not delete reviews that are not 100% positive. I've seen people delete constructive criticism and put up fake praising reviews instead. It's good to see someone who doesn't! Keep this honesty up ^-^

person zombiedarkelf18
schedule June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
cool story update soon
person Jessica
schedule June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ouch...this is just too painful to watch...an uber submissive puppy! This is really hard to read since I love Seto/Jou so much yet it's like a train wreck; I can't tear my eyes away! BUT THAT'S A GOOD THING!...'0.0...what I mean is, I really want to see where you are going to go with this story so I'll be hear waiting! As far as suggestions, I have none yet but I will let you know! Ja!
person person
schedule June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah, wonderful M&S *is in happy place* this is a brilliant story! keep it coming!