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for Puppy

by Moonwing

person ahsie
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hey ive been wondering, how come, in the earlier chapters joey has not once said or complained that he was feeling sore.? i mean, that dude definately has to feel at least SOME pain, with the bleeedding and passing out, dont tell me he's toooo in love with seto to feel pain. then one day he's gonna bleed to death when seto goes over-board no? what will seto do when he realises that his puppy is in a huga puddle off blood lying on the bed with a low pulse? or what if seto accidentaly does something that triggers one of joey's memories of his father beating him? then joey wont be seeing seto as seto but as his father instead right? how woull seto react if suddenly joey was taken out of his life, (by the means of a kiddnapping for ransom?). will seto give a damn, or will he just hurt his puppy's broket heart more by showing the kidnappers a heck-care-do-what-you-want-with-him attitude????

okok.. sorry, so many questioons ya? all in all. this fic has a very interesting line to it. it has the ability to hook and reel its readers in, asking,"what's next?!" ... but i'll give you some advice. get yourself a GOOd "beta" to edit your fics, maybe even give you the author some idea's too add in~ also, try make you chappies more loonngeerr~ ok~
i suggest you read some of "maggiemay"'s fics~ she's really good in seto x jou fics~ ^_^
all the best moonwing~! and come on out with an update SSOOOOON~!!!! good luck~!

person ahsie
schedule January 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
arreee yyooooouuu ggonnnaaa uppddaatteee orr nooottt... good noees how many times ive reviewed you alredy........
person ahsie
schedule January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
armt you gonna update?!??!
come on~! dont keep us waiting..~!!!
person ahsie
schedule November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hhhhhhhhhhheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
ive been checkin in and again n u havent updated....
i waiting........................
person Jessica
schedule October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! An update!...and I like how you reworked the chapters a little bit...I think this is heading in a great direction and I will continue to read! You have me hooked! ^___^
person Nekosune
schedule September 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hehe, coolness. Love it! Is it over or is there more? I really hope there's more! ^_^ Pocky for you and cookies for Kai-chan and Jou-chan! I'll give you yamyams if you update soon! ^_^
person ahsie
schedule September 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey hey, u author of puppy... what do ay tink of my sugestions??? i was actually tinking of making a fic outa it, budden ... -_-
hahahhaha~
aniwae~
UUPPDDAATTEEE~!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i dun wanna wait so long to read ur wonderful storie~!

person ahsie_030189@hotmail.com
schedule September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
come on~ u gotta update~!!!!!!!

how bout, seto torturing koey to the extent that joey actually stops liking it? u noe.. more pain.... hehehehhe im evil..
can i give suggestions? how bout, have one of the kaibe corp. rivals kidnap joey, since they noe joey is lyk, setos dog, noes all setos secrets, therefore will be someone hu can tell thm some secret, budden ofoz joey wont tell. so joey will get punished.. then. will seto come save him? or not?
hows tt?
aniway~ update ~!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person person
schedule September 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
^__^ Awesomeness! That was a great chapter. Yayful-squigee-joy-ness! ^_^ I look forward to the next chapter.
person Earendel
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Is this the end?