rate_review Reviews

Wow. I have to say that this is one of the best fanfics that I've seen for Yu-Gi-Oh! out there. It was a very sensual and vivid lemon that included a pairing that I greatly enjoyed, and you kept characters in character except for that particular instance where they weren't supposed to be. I must say it was enjoyable to find that a lemon fic that started out in character and seemed to slip to out of character like some fics (although most fics tend to start out of character and STAY out of character) actually got turned around and explained in a very believable and realistic way in the end (I hope that doesn't give away the ending too much), adding an unexpected plot twist that most writers (at least not most writers around here) don't think of. Reading it through a second time you can also notice all the hints that most readers would have been too distracted by the want or a lemon to notice, and it makes sense. That made it truly enjoyable to read. Thanks for giving those of us who read NC-17 fanfics that don't just jump to the lemon without giving the plot a second thought a plausible and pleasurable story.

Also, thanks for not using terms like "dick" or any other derogatory slang that tend to ruin an otherwise good lemon. You've proven that very engaging and very arousing lemons don't need slang to be good. And you've also proven that they don't need to rape the characters' bodies or mind in order to get them to have sex in a short story. It was one of the hottest and most engaging lemons that I've ever read.

The only real negative that I can find in your story is the need it creates for a follow-up at the end (or maybe that's just me who wants to see what would happen if Seto's problem ever gets resolved and he's in a position that he could actually do something about his thoughts), but even still it's an enjoyable stand-alone fanfic anyway.

I'm looking forward to seeing your next fanfic or (hopefully) the NC-17 rated chapter for Aurora that you've been promising. That fic's another one of my all-time favorites.

*sigh* If only the majority of fan fiction writers were like you two. Then I wouldn't go practically insane from mucking through so many bad fics to find any good ones.

-Cookie

holy tit fucking christ that was awesome!

That was brilliantly done. I loved the heat between Atemu and Seto. And the ending was unexpected :( But really well done in character. Thanks for sharing your work. Rayne