rate_review Reviews

People say im confusing because i stay skinny and eat alot......Mainly those people are my friends.....Oh yeah...Great fic..........P.S. Pizza is kinda spicy with pineapples......thats all....

Not to be rude or flaming or anything ('Casue I know what that's like and it sucks) but this does need some work. I liked it over all though. I like how you've got the dialogue between Yami and Yugi set up, very clever. I like the slight humor in this, try playing up to that a bit more. Keep writing; that's the best advice I can give you if you feel you haven't quite gotten the hang of this yet. And always remember one important thing: YOU are the writer of this fic, not me and not anyone else. Do not let others tell you what to do with it. It's cool if they give you advice, but honestly, go with your gut when you write stuff.
Best of luck go with you, and all the Muses,
ivorycoral