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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice start!
I can really see Kat doing that, it just seems like something he'd do. Ya Know?
I wish he'd stop though he might bruise his pretty little head.
As for Seto, just what will he say Hmmm?
You write I'll read & review deal?
~Ivy~
I can really see Kat doing that, it just seems like something he'd do. Ya Know?
I wish he'd stop though he might bruise his pretty little head.
As for Seto, just what will he say Hmmm?
You write I'll read & review deal?
~Ivy~
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WTF?!?!?!!? UPDATE! HOW DARE YOU!!! WE SHALL JOUST OF THE FISTS!!!...or something..please update, it was good, and...I'LL CRY IF YOU DONT UPDATE SOON!!!
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice first chappie
i cant wait 2 read more
update soon!!!
i cant wait 2 read more
update soon!!!
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is really funny! Though there were a few grammatical errors, I really liked it! I can't wait to see how Seto plays this off!
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ausome Fanftion Joeyxkaiba make a cute couple please write more cant wait till next chapter!!:)
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May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awww lemon time!!
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May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
so what will happens next ?
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May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Blue: Great start!
Arion: We loved it!
Carrie: *bonks them both* Sit down! But you had some BIG spelling problems.
Arion: Let's roll the clips...
Carrie: In the summary you put acidity, which refers to the strength of an acid on the pH scale, it should have been 'accidentally'. Then you wrote 'seconded hour' when it should be second hour. Lastly, when you substituted in words for the names 'Jou' and 'Kaiba', you put 'blonde' and 'brunette'. Those are both French words and if you have ever studied any of the Romantic languages you would know that all adjectives have a masculine and a feminine form, you used the feminine form and both are male so this is clearly incorrect. Those words should be replaced with 'brunet' and 'blond'.
Blue: *pushes Carrie out of the way* And that's all from the beta, and know for our final verdict!
Arion: 7.9
Blue: 8.4
Carrie: 7.5
Blue: And that's all folks! No not the cane!
Arion: *drags Blue away* Ciao, and happy writings!
Arion: We loved it!
Carrie: *bonks them both* Sit down! But you had some BIG spelling problems.
Arion: Let's roll the clips...
Carrie: In the summary you put acidity, which refers to the strength of an acid on the pH scale, it should have been 'accidentally'. Then you wrote 'seconded hour' when it should be second hour. Lastly, when you substituted in words for the names 'Jou' and 'Kaiba', you put 'blonde' and 'brunette'. Those are both French words and if you have ever studied any of the Romantic languages you would know that all adjectives have a masculine and a feminine form, you used the feminine form and both are male so this is clearly incorrect. Those words should be replaced with 'brunet' and 'blond'.
Blue: *pushes Carrie out of the way* And that's all from the beta, and know for our final verdict!
Arion: 7.9
Blue: 8.4
Carrie: 7.5
Blue: And that's all folks! No not the cane!
Arion: *drags Blue away* Ciao, and happy writings!
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May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Blue: *pushes Carrie out of the way* And that's all from the beta, and know for our final verdict!
Laughs hysterically at the reviewer who pointed out all the spelling mistakes in the fic (of which there were many) and then makes a very careless one herself. The above line should have read: Blue: *pushes Carrie out of the way* And that's all from the beta, and now for our final verdict!
Know is to be aware of something, I think the word you were looking for was 'now' meaning to happen in the present.
Oh about the fic, it was very cute but it would be much better if it was handed over to an experienced beta before it was posted.
Laughs hysterically at the reviewer who pointed out all the spelling mistakes in the fic (of which there were many) and then makes a very careless one herself. The above line should have read: Blue: *pushes Carrie out of the way* And that's all from the beta, and now for our final verdict!
Know is to be aware of something, I think the word you were looking for was 'now' meaning to happen in the present.
Oh about the fic, it was very cute but it would be much better if it was handed over to an experienced beta before it was posted.
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May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey u can't just stop there noooo.
great chapter update soon
great chapter update soon