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for Heartbreak

by mercynre

person Rock\'n Cherry Blossom 612
schedule October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMFG!!!!!Seto USED HIM!!! hope u rite more soon^-^
person Saka
schedule June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*sniffs* Oh wow how sad. Definatly beautiful though. I really love the ending when Seto 'n Mokuba were together. Just such a sad fic. But then again, those are usually the coolest. Great job, I really loved it!!
person Kaiyori
schedule June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow...This story was just...wow...So tragic!

My only criticism is that the whole story felt a bit rushed, the lemon scene, as well as everything else....I guess slow down is what i'm trying to say ^__^

All in all, I love the basis for the story, and you're a very detailed writer!
person FuKouHei
schedule June 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
dude. you killed mokuba.you.killed.mokuba.you.......killled.......MOKUBA! OMG! HOW COULD YOU KILL MOKUBA! *cries* DON'T WORRY MOKIE I'M COMING FOR YOU! *grabs a knife and tries to cut her wrist too. throws down the knife* damn plastic knife. it looked so real.
person Vapidbreath
schedule June 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, I don't read many SetoxMokuba stories because I just don't like Mokuba. I've only read two or three, but I like your story because it portrayed Mokuba as the young boy still learning about his body and sex that he is. I hate when authors make him a little nympho who knows more about sex than his hot brother. Anywho, what I'm saying is that I enjoyed your fic and would like to know if you plan on adding to it or leaving it as is. Good job and good luck on future fics.

BTW, sorry about your cat. I hope you'll be okay.
person DoT
schedule May 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Continue!!!

Dude, that was creepy at the beginning, you mentioned Suicide Club... which I just finished watching, like 6 minutes ago.

When the girl's boyfriend jumped off the building, and the girl was just walking away... I saw Yami Yugi on a shop window, and I shouted Atemu... my family stared at me like "What the fuck? Somebody just bloodily jumped off a building and you and more interested in somebody from an anime that you are obsessed with?!"
person Saka
schedule May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow... *mischievious smirk* Great story. Ok ya have gotta update this story. Really great writtin! *smirks again*
schedule May 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I really enjoyed the story so far. Very intresting in the events. I will be looking foward for the upcoming chapters.