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June 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
still funny as hell ^^.........well, i can't wait for the next chappy.........or a nice, juicy lemon^.~ .........*hugs you* i liked how you put in that part at the end about them being so overcome with hunger/disgust, that they didn't notice a grocery store ^^.....it was awesome^^..........i can't wait for your next update^^........ stay healthy and don't overexert your awesome imagination (for anything other than your ficcys at least ^.~)............ja ne!
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June 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lmao This is some funny shit! I like it a lot! I can't wait to see the future chapters! Hopefully they'll be funny and I'll be looking forward to the 'group bang' if I recall the name right...ah well please update soon!! Ja ne!! ^^
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww, that sucks (about the grocery store). XD Poor little yaoi slave bois. ^^; This is very good, I like it much! *dances*
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
don't ask questions, just do it! if people flame you , they suck! you have creative control my friend! write on!
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
finished reading, tips for you!
remember to seperate dialogue! you don't always have to put he said this person said, but we need to know who says what! ^w^ me likey! it's funny! however, I warn you against trying to include everyone all the time, it thins out chracterization and plot. do some focusing!
remember to seperate dialogue! you don't always have to put he said this person said, but we need to know who says what! ^w^ me likey! it's funny! however, I warn you against trying to include everyone all the time, it thins out chracterization and plot. do some focusing!
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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*busts a gut* I must admit I wasn't expecting that last part about the coffee. However, I was half expecting that jello thing. I've had that happen to me before. Ew!!! But not with the fruit salad...yet. Oo; I hope it never happens. I can't wait for the next update! WooT!!
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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*starts to giggle* that was cool *has to put fist in mouth to keep from guffawing* i really liked the part where ryou threatened bakura with no sex for three months! *can't hold it in any longer, so starts rolling on the ground laughing* this is so awesome so far! is something going to happen at the diner? are they actually going to get to eat?! will the diner be out of.... god forbid..... PIE?! *nearly faints from the thought of that happening* anyways..... im going to definately keep tabs of this story so keep 'em coming, 'kay? if i have any ideas for you i'll let you know, too. thanks.....bye
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May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Write more Ra Damnit!!
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May 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
glad you liked my suggestion.
Today I had the worst day: I had to run from the police because of some stupid revolutionary student's movement at college. I almost DIED (I'm exaggerating) with those bombs that make you cry (I don't know the word in English, sorry). I just wanted to get home and read some light, funny, nice fanfiction.
I was glad you updated and I hope to read more soon. I mean, what can possibly come out from a situation like the one depictured in your story: chaos and lots of fun!
Today I had the worst day: I had to run from the police because of some stupid revolutionary student's movement at college. I almost DIED (I'm exaggerating) with those bombs that make you cry (I don't know the word in English, sorry). I just wanted to get home and read some light, funny, nice fanfiction.
I was glad you updated and I hope to read more soon. I mean, what can possibly come out from a situation like the one depictured in your story: chaos and lots of fun!
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May 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i think you should use honda and otogi. i like them better oh and the first chapter is good keep going