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April 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
.... Your going to make me cry T-T
Nicely written story... but... you just had to be cruel to Bakura didn't you! T-T
Oh yeah, This is a nice change from Yami/Hikari pairings =)
Nicely written story... but... you just had to be cruel to Bakura didn't you! T-T
Oh yeah, This is a nice change from Yami/Hikari pairings =)
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April 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
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Okay, I'm speechless.
You killed Marik. And Jou.
And even though those two had died for Bakura's and Malik's sake, Bakura and Malik hooked up anyway. I'm sorry, but that lost any chance that I'd be able to symphathize with them or understand that. Generally speaking, I wouldn't consider sleeping with your lover's brother a demonstration of how much you cared for someone that was willing to be killed for your sake.
The Seto bastardization doesn't really matter since I understand that you needed a villain and this is AU anyway, but it is seriously irksome to have you build up so much romance around the Bakura/Marik interaction, then just break it down and expect your readers to believe that Bakura can live happily-ever-after with Malik after that. It doesn't make any sense. Bakura would have had to have never really loved Marik at all to be able to switch loyalties so easily. Not to mention that it's rather cheap of Malik to get together with Bakura after that. Your characterization of them really seemed illogical at that point, like you were just trying to squeeze in a happy ending and didn't care if it made sense or not.
I liked the story to start with, but honestly, I can't say that I think much of it right now.
Okay, I'm speechless.
You killed Marik. And Jou.
And even though those two had died for Bakura's and Malik's sake, Bakura and Malik hooked up anyway. I'm sorry, but that lost any chance that I'd be able to symphathize with them or understand that. Generally speaking, I wouldn't consider sleeping with your lover's brother a demonstration of how much you cared for someone that was willing to be killed for your sake.
The Seto bastardization doesn't really matter since I understand that you needed a villain and this is AU anyway, but it is seriously irksome to have you build up so much romance around the Bakura/Marik interaction, then just break it down and expect your readers to believe that Bakura can live happily-ever-after with Malik after that. It doesn't make any sense. Bakura would have had to have never really loved Marik at all to be able to switch loyalties so easily. Not to mention that it's rather cheap of Malik to get together with Bakura after that. Your characterization of them really seemed illogical at that point, like you were just trying to squeeze in a happy ending and didn't care if it made sense or not.
I liked the story to start with, but honestly, I can't say that I think much of it right now.