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for Invisible Me

by LadyLaran

person Innocent
schedule November 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi
Yay! An update! Which is wonderful as I love this fic and i've been checking for updates for almost a month since I first read it.
This chapter was great too but with the comments about keeping other girls away I wonder what the groups reaction would be if Yami's next girlfriend was nice instead of bitch like Sachi. After all stealing uniforms and batting baseballs into faces isn't as fun when the victims only crime is to be dating the wrong guy.
Also it's good that Yami doesn't love Sachi as I can't help thinking that the break up tactics wouldn't be very effective otherwise. If I was hit by a baseball and having a bad day it'd mean that my boyfriend would probably spend more time with me rather than leave. But I guess that's kind of the point.
Anyway keep writing because I can't wait to see what happens next.
person CattyNebula
schedule October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The summary of the story hadn't really impressed me, because it didn't look like my kind of fic. However, I decided to give it a go anyway, considering I was really looking for some Yugi x Yami fics. Let me tell you how happy I am that I decided to give your story a go. It's wonderful! And so very well written! I think thats why I like it so much, because you did a great job on writing about the characters. I'm getting more and more excited about the others joining in on the little scheme, too. I look very forward to your next update! :3
person Silvershadowfire
schedule October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*snickers* God... that was SWEET! *gives Marik a chocolate bar* Perfect shot! I can just see that happening to her. And that is only the first day. *mock sigh* poor girl... she should just dump Yami now while she has the chance.

Great chapter!
person ShadowRaven
schedule October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
GREAT STORY!!!!!! It totally ROCKED, Loved when Sachci got racoon eyes that was absolutely hillarious! KEEP IT UP!! I'll review more soon. ^__^
person AngelViper9
schedule October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like your story. You have managed to make all of the charaters in their orignal personalities. Good Job! I hope you can update soon.
person Arainaina
schedule October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh very good please update again soon
person vampslyr
schedule October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yea, you updated! Sorry to hear about your problems with the hurricanes, but I'm glad you're okay. Murr [nuzzle] I love this story, we get to see everyone at their devious best. I still want to know what the heck is going on in Yami's head. How can he be so blind to Yugi's love for him? Or was he an idiot and gave up on him too soon and decided to move on? Still, idiot. It's surprising that the teachers haven't picked up on what's going on, with Sachi being the target of so many pranks in one day. I wonder if she and her friends think they're bad ass enough to retaliate? I think she *would* be stupid enough to try something on Yugi. Something subtle that the others wouldn't notice. And since Yugi doesn't know about the secret meetings to help him, he wouldn't necessarily go to the others. More likely he'd suffer in silence until Yami finally noticed and mind crushed the bitch. Or it might be the last straw needed for Yugi to say he's had enough and tell her off.

If you do bring Jou and Seto in on it, I think they should be the ones to focus on bolstering Yugi's confidence. Setting Seto on Sachi would kinda be overkill and the others wouldn't get to have nearly as much fun torturing her.
person catti-dono
schedule October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It is good to see an update...we are all a little traumatized about the horrible hurrican season that is befalling our fellow readers and writers down south...I know my heart as well as others goes out to you and yours that this has affected....and I also know that we, the fans, will pray to the computer god for your motherboard....this was a great chapter....must say I had to reread the whole story but still good even after the second time around...look forward to your next chapter....catti
person Red Dragon Of Egypt
schedule October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
RD: well things certainly are getting interesting and more fun by the minute hehe Racoon Girl thats my new name for Sachi bravo Ryou bravo indeed hehe and I'm also curious as to what Yami is thinking about thats keeping him so preoccupied but I have a strong hunch it has something to do with Yugi well keep up the great work and update soon gtg now JA NE
person leighc
schedule August 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lolness! Oh boy did we both need that laugh. Me thinks your muses are having way too much fun with this girl. Tell them to keep it up eh? And remind me to never piss them off.^_~