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October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Who are these people and what have you done to the real Ryou, Marik, Seto, ect?
Seriously, this fic is a holy mess.
Seriously, this fic is a holy mess.
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October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG! AND THE PLOT THICKENS!!!!!! XD I really like this fic! Ryous got some seriously bad issues to sort out. I wish Yami would fuck off and leave him alone after what he did. Poor little Ryou diddums. ^^ Im glad Baku is back.. or actually IN the story i should say. When you wrote in one of the first chapters "and lost his yami" i was like "OMGWTF?!?!" LOL! Yey for Baku.
Hmm, somehow i cant see Malik being happy Bakura is back though. lol.
Poor Ishizu ;_;
POOR MALIK! =(
I hope your beta gets back soon. Cant wait for updates ^-^
Hmm, somehow i cant see Malik being happy Bakura is back though. lol.
Poor Ishizu ;_;
POOR MALIK! =(
I hope your beta gets back soon. Cant wait for updates ^-^
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It is getting better and better every time i read a new chapter
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story best one i have ever read........................................................................please update soon
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June 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey you shouldnt be sorry i cant even fine your typoes and that person doesnt like them the maybe he/she shouldnt read your story
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June 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dude, I feel sorry for you! I just finished Finals at my school. Anyway, good luck and update when you can!
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May 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don't know if you care about your writing, some people who post online don't, so if you don't care about your writing just disregard this review.
I only got about halfway through the first chapter, simply because of the grammatical errors. It's a massive turn off to have mistakes in your writing everywhere, though a few typos are excusable. If you want to have quality writing, start proofreading. If that doesn't help or you already do, get someone else to proofread your stories; a beta would work wonders. At the very least watch out for things like the difference between 'there' and 'their,' there is nothing more annoying than reading something and coming across a 'to' where there should be a 'too,' or a 'there' where there should be a 'they're.'
This is not meant to be taken as an insult, just to be taken as advice for improving your story, what reviews exist for in my opinion.
I only got about halfway through the first chapter, simply because of the grammatical errors. It's a massive turn off to have mistakes in your writing everywhere, though a few typos are excusable. If you want to have quality writing, start proofreading. If that doesn't help or you already do, get someone else to proofread your stories; a beta would work wonders. At the very least watch out for things like the difference between 'there' and 'their,' there is nothing more annoying than reading something and coming across a 'to' where there should be a 'too,' or a 'there' where there should be a 'they're.'
This is not meant to be taken as an insult, just to be taken as advice for improving your story, what reviews exist for in my opinion.
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May 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
woot updates! I think Yami's trying to get his boyfriend back. So is he going to the party?
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May 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay!!!! WE got a lemon. That was great! But I got upset when he got that phone call. Oh well update soon!
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May 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
what happens next???
(Waiting paitently)
(Waiting paitently)